Just checked the demo out, and it’s quite good!
Here are my notes; I hope at least some of them are useful!
Maybe it’s just me, but I didn’t realize which stat this choice will affect. I knew it would involve Sincere-Disingenous binary, but I couldn’t tell that it was also determining the Routine-Variety one.
And this choice I expected to be determining my character’s Worldview, but it doesn’t affect anything (that I can see). Perhaps this could be a good opportunity for a Worldview choice?
I like the character-creation choices, but perhaps they could be intertwined into the narrative more? Like, maybe our character flies over a puddle on the ground and notices their appearance? Or maybe Galileo refers to us by name or pronoun, thus those choices follow?
Here’s another choice where I felt it wasn’t clear which stats it’s going to affect, I assumed it would be the Routine-Variety or Tidy-Disheveled binaries. It was the latter, but also Idealist-Cynical, which I didn’t see coming at all (but again, maybe it’s just me).
In hindsight, I get why this choice was about Routine-Variety and Idealistic-Cynical, but when I first saw it I assumed I was just being humble so I picked the cynical option unknowingly. Also, I expected this choice to affect Ayvex relationship stat, but it didn’t.
Wow, it got dark quick! O_o It’s a great choice to set up the tone of the story, and I wonder if perhaps this moment should appear earlier in the game, since this is a very good “hook” for the reader, I think. Would it be possible for it to be moved to chapter 1?
Also, I had to pick the talon option since it seemed the least… evil? But, considering I was going for a Beak build, perhaps it would be better to separate the skill choices from the choice of the victim?
I’m fine with a snarky MC, but I do feel like their attitude towards vultures, Feeders and some other characters might be going a bit too far? It seems quite bigoted. Maybe there could be a choice determining how they feel about them with varying degrees of contempt? Otherwise, it almost feels like the MC is being hijacked by the voice in their head.
I like the concept of Clumps and Bundles, but I wonder how the birds are able to carry those around? Especially Bundles, since one Bundle is a hundred twigs. Perhaps it could be explained in further detail?
I wonder; if a Caller or a Champion loses their client to the Balancing, do they get compensated for their death? Otherwise, why would anyone take a Feeder as their client, right? (sorry if it was already explained)
I liked it, personally, but perhaps for some this might seem like a slow start? Compared to CCH, which begins with a flash-forward to a battle with supervillains, this story begins relatively slowly. (Not that I’m the one to talk, since my own games have fairly slow first chapters)
Overall, I really liked the demo and look forward to more of the game (whenever that will be )