“Still have no idea what you’re talking about!” You responed. Friendship is magic"
Hmm.
Should we point out any typos? o3o
Love what you have so far. : D
@ninjas If you would be so kind
and thanks it hasn’t even gotten to the plot twisty part
typos: “the girl jumped. You forgot HE was still there”, “just take ME word for it”, & ““Ariel” ASTRONG voice called” all three on farmer path.
in the first paragraph it says subborn instead of stubborn
“could you please make breakfast today?” “of course Father!”
I think both start with upper case
Being their first and only son has doubled the work load on your shoulders. set suit “gown”
The three of you only have each other to depend on, with no other family to speak of. Your home doesn’t feel empty in the slightest though, since you live on your family
The set suit “gown” thing and you should change the Blacksmith option to Smithy since its referring to the place you live at .
Tavern Path
You noticed he was talking to a large man. He looked like one of the heroes in your books, perhaps a little older. “Well aren’t you hansome?”
handsome*
For the time you notice
there was a small boy standing by his leg
there was a small girl standing by his leg
I think you meant “For the first time, you notice”
“oh hello there” you said with a sweet smile.
Upper Case and coma after Oh
His a knight who just recently began drinking here."
He’s*
he’s my squire.
Upper Case
his only responce was hiding his face and shaking more.
Upper Case and response*
“Pip, will you please entertain Airel well we talk business?” “of course Father!”
while we talk business* Of*
Before you could hear someone unspoken voice you had to sync up with them.
someones*
Blacksmith Path
When you were a baby your mother warmed you by the heat of the forge
needs a period
Also before Airel leaves he calls you a Loon
Unless the MC’s name turns out to be Loon it should be lower case, loon* :v
Farm Path
You rarely ever interacted with customers causing you to be very awkward around other.
others*
“I’m really sorry about this.” he said
“I’m really sorry about this” he said.
“Mmm how intresting.” It was fear but there was something off about it.
interesting*
“Are you even listening to me?” She wasn’t afrid for herself but someone else who was also here and not a human.
afraid*
“What are you talking about?” he gave you a look that you were unfortunately very farmilar with, the reason you haven’t told anyne you can understand animals, the ‘you’re mad aren’t you’ look.“She doesn’t have any babies yet.”
*familiar *anyone
he looked down at Fen, who yawned lazily. “She doesn’t look scared.”
He*
“Well she is okay! Just take me word for it!”
my*
“Airel!” Astrong voice called from the house and you saw the figure of a large man. The boy turned his head “That’s Father.” he whistled and Fen jumped up. “See you later, Loon.” he snickered as he walked away.
A strong*
He*
loon*
Hope I helped 
Friendship is magic, and so is this story. :3
@rocky and @ninjas thank you, I’ll fix those as soon as I get the time. Loon’s a nickname. Yeah a lot of the "he"s and "she"s need to be captialize and I don’t know if I have to create a new variable to do it.
@2ton lol
Today I have two test (English Lang and Stats) six hours of testing 8-|
Wish me luck~
Good luck @Katgirl64
From http://choicescriptdev.wikia.com/wiki/Displaying_variables
If we want to make sure that the first_name variable is always displayed with a capital letter, we can add an exclamation mark just after the dollar $ symbol but before the curly braces, like so:
$!{first_name}
So you’d use $!{he}! assuming that was your variable.
Oh well if its a nickname thats totally fine :v
Back from testing~ Fixed all the typos (I think) and now I’m gonna get to coding.
@Fairygodfeather thanks that makes it so much easier than how I was planning to do it.
Any idea when the game might be finished?
It only just started. I think that means its fair to say it won’t be anywhere near finished for quite some time.
@pinklauryn I haven’t even finished the first chapter, which will end at the Gala, so a while. The game going to last 2-2 1/2 cycles (going to be explained in game)
So how far on you on the current update if I may ask?