I agree we are off topic
No, I actually like the way the scene is now, but I would like (if it’s possible) later on down the road for us to be able to reveal why they are so insecure, after they’ve gotten comfortable enough with Grey (or whoever is asking) to open up about something like that.
I’m the same way, believe it or not, and frankly I can see my character being that way. Which is why I think, realistically, if someone like Grey were to analyze me like he did to my MC, I would either lie and say he’s way off, or be partially honest and say he’s “mostly right” (like the option listed in the WiP), but not elaborate on it until I got more comfortable with him as a person/friend. And I think that’s how you should have it in the WiP too, if you can.
Well, since both of the MCs parents are super successful and super famous, one reason for the MCs anxiety and insecurities could be that they are afraid of not being able to live up to their names. Or that they are afraid of (like you suggested) failing or making a mistake, and people judging them (the MC) harshly about it. Another reason could be that as a child (or while they were in high school), the MC was bullied. A lot. That could explain why they are insecure. You could also have that they just over think things and are always second guessing themselves. Or that their parents were over protective of them, having the MC get home schooled until high school (which is where they meet Lenny). There are lots of reasons why someone would suffer from social anxiety and insecurities, at this point I’d say choose your “favorites” and add them as possible choices for the player to pick from (while rehén the time is right)… if you wanted to.
On another note (from the same scene with Grey); when Grey offered Skyler some beer, I chose the option that she doesn’t drink, and Grey just kind of accepts that. My issue is (and I didn’t notice it until recently) that, during the scene where everyone is celebrating after Skyler first joined, I had her drink alcohol… shouldn’t Grey call her out on that? Or something?
And on a similar note, would it be possible for you to make it that the MC gets drunk during the celebration scene? These are just some random questions that pop into my head while I play the WiP
Omg this is a jewel! I’ve caught some typos and I print-screen_ed_ it. IDK how I should send it to you, but I think other people sent it already. I think paragraphs between the dialogues would make it clear who’s speaking, it gets a little confusing two or more people speaking in the same paragraph.
Anyway, about the game. It’s simply fantastic! Gosh it’s really immersive, and I loved the characters. I’m so in love with Grey, the interaction with him is funny and hot (at least for me who chose to play as a shameless flirty), and the cases are really interesting ! I loved how you gave the option to choose with who we want to work with, to bond with Hu, get a dragon egg and a pet. I can’t wait for more ! You’re doing a great job !
One way to do the typos is to make a post with the screen shot of the typo and the proper way to write it.
@VioletHikari I’ll keep the choice for when the MC feels more comfortable with Grey then. The other characters will talk about the MC’s shyness too, I’m not sure when though.
Thanks for the suggestions! The MC’s parents aren’t overprotective, if they were they probably wouldn’t have wanted their child to work with the supernatural. Of course, they respect whatever choice the MC makes, but they think the sixth-sense should be used.
Thanks for catching that discontinuity, I didn’t realize it either. I’ll have Grey call them out on it.
A drunk MC sounds like fun, and choices you can only make drunk- cause we loose our filter when drunk.
Different MCs bring different sides of Grey out. So a flirty MC will get an equally flirty Grey, and a bashful one a softer Grey. Of course, he gets tender with both types of MC in a relationship.
And the non existent filter/drunk MC is the only way I can see my shy MC asking Grey about his “kink”
That’s what I was thinking too when saying choices you can only make drunk
how supernatural in new york
Sorry, what? I’m confused.
sorry tried say how story going with you
I haven’t done a lot of writing as I was on vacation, but now I’m home and will start working on the game.
Glad you are back, and about a drunk mc you can give the player the choice of how they act when drunk
What I mean is they have a dominant emotion ranging from romantic to angry to bold or sad.
Then any scene when they get drunk they automatically act like that. Now some people may not like not making choices but they are the ones that will chose to get drunk
I can picture it now; my shy/timid MC gets drunk (off of just one glass since she doesn’t really drink) and suddenly becomes bold!
I’m working on the drunk choices now, and I was thinking of just adding in some places the choice to say things you wouldn’t say sober (especially if shy) and slur words, maybe feel a bit dizzy. Would it be ok?
This game is really shaping up since I last saw it (cough3 months ago cough) and it looks really awesome
Thank you! And thanks for hanging around to see the game’s progress
heh, no problem, I’ve been lurking here there and everywhere for awhile.
Anyway, drunk choices seem like a good and inventive idea to have in this story/ game and could work really well. God job.
I have @VioletHikari to thank for the idea
Yeah, I’m more of a lurker myself (except for my own thread, of course). I’m just a little bit shy over the internet as I’m in real life.
I am just a general lurker everywhere
Well it is a good idea I general, props to the person whom came up with it as well as you for putting it in this game