Street Jam: The Rise (Updated July 16)

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#1

Hey everyone, it’s your cousin Tevin here! After two book failures and a lot of depression, I’ve started work on an interactive fiction. I’ve wanted to do this since I was a kid playing choice of the dragon, and I always promised myself as soon as I turn eighteen I’d make one. It’s time.

It’s an underground street fighter story where you play as a new fighter looking to debut in the circuit. You’re background is entirely your own choice, as is your rise.

Be warned it is extremely mature and will involve bloody scenes and sexual scenes. I ain’t the type to censor things. It is inspired by the criminally underrated Def Jam series. The title is still being worked on and any suggestions help.

You can rise by winning fights and gaining fans, cheating and shooting up the streets, bribing your way through matches, or using the police to your advantage.

Each route has it’s own risks, a legit fighter will have to win by using their own skills, a corrupt cheat will have to avoid getting caught by both the circuit and the cops, and someone working with the police will have to avoid anyone finding out. No matter the way you rise, you’ll face many challenges on the way.

Whether you end a champion, a gang leader, chief of police, or six feet under you’ll learn the meaning of danger in the criminal life.

Currently it’s about two chapters done, and I plan on updating it at least every two days. My obsessive fascination with writing will help make updates frequent.

To play the demo, go here: https://dashingdon.com/play/tevin/street-jam-the-rise/mygame/

Right now I’m mostly looking for stat balancing advice but grammar checks will be appreciated. And advice for more choices such as backgrounds, more fighters, more clubs, and more romance options will all be extremely appreciated. And look out for easter eggs and other hidden gems.

If you have any criticism go ahead, I very much prefer a bit of advice on what works and what doesn’t then a comment saying “FUN”! And nothing else. Still, any type of feedback is better than no feedback.

That’s all for now folks.

Progress:
Day 2: Added beginning of next day and a ton of things to do along with a bunch of references and easter eggs

Day 3: Added shopping, cars, next club intro and more background differences along with first game over, be warned it is hard to find.

Day 6: Added introduction based on background

Day 7: Added rival and pre-fight scene at new club

Day 8: Added first fight at new club, rival gender, and two rival fight outcomes

Day 10: Rival fight fully done

Day 11: Boss introduction done

Day 12: Boss fight done

Day 13: All after fight outcomes down and early game end added. Secret scene added.

Day 15: Mugging, RO added, and next day opening added

Day 17: Two options filled with easter eggs added

Day 19: Two more options done

Day 20: One more option done


#2

Sounds really good if there a update at all in future could put the date so we now when you updated it


#3

Look good and i get a ‘Def Jam NY’ vibe from it, which is pretty cool, just need to see where it goes now


#4

Thanks, I tried hard for that. I’m replaying def jam vendetta so I can try that type of vibe too.


#5

I don’t think this is my shit wifi: trying to go to the stat page gets me an infinite loading screen and I found this

I haven’t gotten through the full thing just yet (cause im insurmountably dumb and immediately forgot the stat page bug so i had to start over a 3rd time), but I’m interested to see how this goes. I like the tone of the narration right now and those little comments made after choices in the character creation part.


#6

Needs a save as well


#7

Oh so Snoop is the final boss?


#8

It’s interesting so far, rare to see this kind of story, will looking forward for more :slightly_smiling_face:

Error and suggestion:

Error when choose to agree with Jane then leave:

foo line 2176: It is illegal to fall out of a *choice statement; you must *goto or *finish before the end of the indented block.


Suggestion:

  • While I enjoy the game, reading it a bit difficult since there almost no break between paragraph.
  • Seconding Harley_Robing_Evans suggestion, since there quite many path, it would be neat if there save.

#9

Fixed, thanks for pointing it out


#10

@Dark_Stalker No spoilers, but I don’t know how his legal team would react to that

@Harley_Robin_Evans Tried it, broke the game. Do you know how to do it?

@SabrinadizaLS How do you break between paragraphs?


#11

Also that is just where the game ends right now, that’s why there is an error


#12

Yeesh studying and paying attention in class isn’t enough to graduate :confused: The requirement seems a little high to me. It’s at 25 right?


#13

yeah it is 25 intellect


#14

Gotta say I was hoping if I clicked the stand still option enough she’d come over.

  • The crowd cheers loudly for you, completely surprised at your tactic and how incredibly efficient it was. You have beaten Jane at her own game, and they love it!
    The owner runs up, raises your arm up high in the air, and yells “What a crazy twist! Looks like the newcomers kung-fu was definitely greater than Janes! I cannot wait to see what happens in our final round.”

    • Jane’s
  • When the cheers are done, the cowboy leads you out the crowd and through a cracked white door in the back. You end up in a small dressing room with three lockers and not much else other than some cheap-looking chairs in front of a few mirrors. The only other people in the room are Paper Poe and Jane, sitted next to each other and looking at you.

    • sat
  • Only a true fighter would’ve bet that much. Yer gonna go far, i know it. And this’ll help you on yer way."

    • cap I
  • It’s carson, and I’m really glad ya came here today partner.

    • Cap Carson
  • They both turn to you, Jane looking as if she dares you to say Poe, and Poe looking as if he’d do anything if you’d say Poe.

    • Kind confusing, if I’m interpreting this right Poe looks as though he’d do us a favor? I feel like the second Poe should be something else like “his name”

foo line 2176: It is illegal to fall out of a *choice statement; you must *goto or *finish before the end of the indented block.


#15

All fixed but the last one is because that’s where the game ends


#16

Just simply break it:

Text 1

Text 2

Alternatively, you could add double *line_break:

Text 1
*line_break
*line_break
Text 2

#17

It was fun to play street jam hope we get full game


#18

I liked it seems like it could be a lot fun though I kind of felt like I was watching my character rather then becoming my character if that makes sense and maybe it’s just me.


#19

I don’t understand…

You see, I am quite new to writing in more third person than first-person, all my stories are always littered with my characters personality in the way it is told.

However, with this, I must narrate it rather than go first person in order to not steamroll a personality onto you, and let you project your own.

Can you explain how I can make you feel more like you are them?


#20

Ugh sorry I honestly can’t think of anything am not a writer that was just my initial thought maybe it’s just a writing style I have to get used to.