I’ll change it soon.
This isn’t the case in the slightest, but I’ll fix the paths in the coming update.
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I think it’s more of a progression fantasy than power fantasy big difference, but you have a solid foundation, just not what was advertised
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1346, the amount of attacks for each card except the angel one is the code, the catalogue number of the cards corresponds to the order
I don’t think it exists for now, if I understood the game’s code correctly.
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Wow thats great to hear man, thanks for answering 
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Thank You for the Info, I hope It becomes A series The Game Has Potential.
Dreary write your power fantasy however you want it to but I’m begging on my knees don’t copy the nothing burger that is Solo Leveling (Webnovel) The manhwa was beareable because the art was good.
Some things would be better executed like a faster loading screen for the fade in texts.
You could definitely do better in showing the possession of our secondary PC (the vessel) so we can stop the repeating complaints about lack of agency. Especially for an introductory chapter that’s meant to show a bit of the world building. As a further suggestion you should probably write down across the socials of this game what you mean by power fantasy and your general plans for the game. Put down titles of the whatever manga, manhwa, manhua or novel that inspired you to write this, just make sure it’s accurate to what you’re planning in the future so you can stop receiving complaints about this not being the current trend of power fantasy depiction.
As for the chapter itself, it’s good. Some parts were a drag to read, the dialogues could do better especially the villains but considering the influences, it’s understandable but you could try to improve it after finishing the whole thing. For now, just keep it in mind. I’d rather see you publish the whole thing before you fall to the same curse most WIPS end up having.
As for the choices, I think it’s better if you put an indicator on what sort of personality each choices would bring. There are choices that I can see why it would be ruthless, but some I simply couldn’t fathom why it would be labeled as Idiot when it would be more appropriate for it to be labeled as Indifferent.
I’ll probably replay just to see what other personalities I can get just because I like to FAFO.
In short, there are areas for improvement but you can leave it after finishing the entire thing. But this has a great potential especially for a first chapter that’s heavily influenced by early 2000s-2010s shounen jump introductory chapter.
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does Gigi really die?
I never said that, lol. I said that it’s not going to be a story like that by any means.
I mention my inspirations on this forum post and on the game page.
Yeah, I’ll be adding an option to toggle that on in the next update later today. (Along with a few other things) After this update, I won’t be touching Chapter 1 again until the story develops a bit more—then I’ll probably rewrite the sewer section.
Appreciate it! Honestly, one thing I really like about this forum is how critical people are it helps me shape the story into something much better by pointing out flaws I might’ve missed. It’s a little rough around the edges right now, but it’ll get there.
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yea
shame, kinda hoping she would become an RO, or have the shoen character group of mc, mc’s make best friend, and MC’s female best friend
This is the first valid critique I v seen in this thread. The others were winging on and on and were trying to fit with their own style they v made in their head as well as comparing it to other ifs.
A majority here complaining about a helpless MC in the beginning got me soo peeved. Everyone wants to play Op characters from the onset smh
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Personally, I don’t get the power fantasy complaint. Of course we aren’t power fantasy lvl yet. We only just got bit halfway through the chapter and our MC hasn’t learned how to do anything yet. Our cells only just activated. Now it’s time to power fantasy. Plus, we did end that wall shadow, which they were saying was already above the level of newly awakened beginners to take on shadows. Once we figure out our mutation, then we can start OPing things.
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Btw guys, the reason I haven’t made a Tumblr yet is because this is only part 1 of the first chapter. “Chapter 2” is technically the second part, so I’ll make a blog once that’s out.
(This includes polishing the chapter as a whole 
Plus, I’m missing some visuals and music.)
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Password for settings?
I’m just… wow. Wow. Fucking w o w. This is a good story! Holy shit, this WIP is so Jujutsu Kaisen coded and I’d love it just for that but it’s absolutely engrossing. The main character is phenomenal (a bit too Megumi Potential Man for me atm but that’ll change), every character is a banger, and FUCK YOU for what you did to Gigi! I don’t want any of the other ROs, I want Gigi back! Please please please! The Superbros have to rise through the agency as a trio. This has got me choking up, man. Keep cooking 
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I like this, and am excited to see more of it. Can’t say much else without spoilers but I admire the storytelling. I do think some more choices in the first chapter would be nice, but the main thing I’m looking forward to next update is finding out what kind of abilities the protagonist can have. In the world you’ve established, I imagine the power list would be quite unique.
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Thank you for writing author, I like it so far and am looking forward to the next chapter but goddamn the Gigi thing was brutal, she was downright adorable and I was planning to romance her (hadn’t checked the RO list yet.)
Btw the “rape against the door” thing was still there in my playthrough, also I got the “You might even have to talk to… girls…” thing and while funny I don’t really think that fits well for a female protagonist.
Yeahhh, I’m really hoping that she’s the secret 7th RO and she somehow comes back to life, the epilogue scene gave me a little hope that that’ll be the case. Like the chemistry was definitely there with her. (Also my second choice for a RO is a tad bit of a red flag (Natsumi.))
YESSSSSS, FELLOW GIGI FAN! LET US COPE AND SEETHE TOGETHER BROTHER/SISTER/SIBLING!
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All of that was actually fixed a while ago, I just forgot to push the updated build since I was still polishing a few parts of Chapter One. Sorry about that lol (Game’s updated now, and there’s a few more scenes/choices/changes)
this will age very well
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She’s totally the 7th isn’t she? Or am I just huffing too much copium and misunderstanding what you’re saying?
Would give your replies likes but I’ve hit my daily limit.