Sins of the Crown WIP (Path 1 Complete 5/25/2024)

Sins of the Crown: A sister's descent (WIP)

Hello everyone, hope you are having a good day.

Thank you to those that have been here since day one, and welcome to all those interested in seeing where this story goes.

You’ve done everything to avoid this outcome, yet here you are, embarking on a bloody campaign of your own. This one promises to surpass all others in the history books though. But what else can you expect when you’re unearthing secrets that laid the foundation of the very world?

Sins of the Crown: A sisters descent is a Fantasy/Sci-fi story by Pariah where your choices control the story.

  • Play as male, female non-binary; gay, straight, bisexual or asexual
  • Explore 4 romances with characters possessing their own ideals, morals, and hidden agendas
  • Unravel the mysteries of your spacefaring ancestors, where every revelation could reshape the world.
  • Harness elemental powers and wield formidable weapons to carve a path through your enemies. Or, opt for a more subtle approach slipping in and out of the shadows.
  • Customize your gear and appearance to reflect your unique style and choices.
  • And amidst the chaos remember to question everything.

STORY LINK (5/25/2024 - Major Update - Path 1 Complete)
Path 1 of 3 for the Prologue has been completed and implemented. Please read the dev rant for more details.
https://dashingdon.com/go/15921

Character/Romance Tease

A piece of dialogue from each character and a few details about them. Minor to heavy spoilers incoming.

Liira “Does it ever get easier, telling them they aren’t coming home?”
Name: Liira
Race: Human
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Straight
Height: 5’7
Liira stands at about 5’7. A woman with ebony hair that is cut short and practical, framing her face with a subtle elegance. Dark brown eyes, deep and expressive, that command respect are set on a backdrop of warm olive skin.
She has a jagged and harsh scar running almost half her face but it does not detract from her natural beauty instead enhancing her sharp features.
She is…

Rauk “We both understand what needs to be done. And we both know what’s waiting for me at the end.”
Name: Rauk
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Straight
Height: 5’10
Rauk stands at about 5’10. He is a man who has a quiet charm about him. His deep brown skin contrasts strikingly with his immaculately kept full beard and short coiled black hair. His strong features are enhanced by his intense light-brown eyes. Eyes that are always trying to take in every detail of the world.
To say he is driven is an understatement. And it would be a commendable trait if it did not also help his…

Echo (Male) “I will drag you to glory, whether you like it or not.”
Name: Echo
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Bisexual
Height: 5’6

Echo (Female) “Do not mistake this for kindness. I will keep my promise whatever it takes.”
Name: Echo
Race: Half-orc
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Bisexual
Height: 6’8

Isona “I still want to be rescued. Is it so wrong for me to wish for that?”
Name: Isona
Race: Human
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Bi/Straight
Height: 5’8

Killian “I want to lie and say I’m fighting for something”
Name: Killian
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Bi/Straight
Height: 6’2

Safie “I would give anything to know less.”
Name: Safie
Race: Dwarf
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Lesbian
Height: 4’11

Ermes “We are playing with forces far beyond our comprehension but that is what makes it fun.”
Name: Ermes
Race: Unknown
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Gay
Height: 6’1

Dev Update Log

4/10/2024 Update (Minor)

  • Fixed a bug where regardless of power choice player ended up with Ice magic.
  • Implemented relationship stats.
  • Minor stat tweaks across the board.
  • Closed off player progress at Path split for now.

4/25/2024 Progress Update

  • Path 1 Complete
  • Not implemented yet
Dev Rant

4/10/2024 Rant
Its sad that I can’t update the story for the month, but I think this decision will be worth it in the long run. These 3 paths are vastly different from each other and for each I was hoping to explore a different aspect of the world and characters.

But talk is cheap, and I don’t expect anyone to believe me until I deliver.

PS. Sorry the first part of the Prologue is so short by the way, but I’m also glad the initial test story was that short. I couldn’t imagine having to rewrite and rework everything I’ve done till now.

End of rant.

5/25/2024 Rant
This was never the initial plan, releasing the paths one by one, but plans need to change especially if life gets in the way. I’m hoping to get back to my normal schedule in June though.

This update completes the prologue for one of the paths though and there should be 2 others coming before I start work on Chapter 1. And I understand that what I’m doing isn’t advised but there are plans to condense things after the prologue and along the lines condense things even further. This means the story will be less unique after this split but will have more options in each choice.

Path 1 is a little iffy so far in my opinion but that could be because I’ve read in more than two dozen times and the people helping me also started having the same opinion after a couple of playthroughs. On one hand the quick pacing, being flung from one thing to the next works but on the other hand there are a lot of openings to slow things down and build things out. There is a plan to fix things if they don’t land properly but that will come after the other paths are finished. No sense running in the same spot. Although one change I am definitely making is Sabers dialogue along the lines.

Well that it for now. Hope you enjoy and until the next update peace.

I update Tumblr on my progress when I can, and sometimes provide game files, so if you are interested you can head here. I prefer to update the forums version when there are significant changes and progress. Not to say these updates are insignificant, but they are much smaller by comparison.

If you are interested in early game files, sneak peaks at unedited work and would like to support the game you can head here.

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@PariahLight found this:

intro line 82: increasing indent not allowed, expected 7 was 8

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you’ve made a promising start with your writing, but it feels like it could use more depth and clarity. while reading, I found it a bit challenging to discern the genre, and it seemed like the story was attempting to encompass too many elements simultaneously. providing some additional context could help anchor the reader within the narrative, but I understand that this is just a proof of concept so far.

your writing style is undeniably beautiful, yet there are some grammar mistakes and a scarcity of punctuation that could be addressed. despite this, the central mystery surrounding the rebellion and the royal family is intriguing, and I’d love to see where that goes.

the pacing… there were moments where it felt a bit off, and the dialogue could benefit from more personalization rather than solely serving as a vessel for conveying information. although the characters and storyline captured my interest, I did find certain aspects confusing and rushed.

I see significant potential in this, perhaps more stuffing before it’s a delicious baked bread! :croissant:

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Hello I’m really really sorry about that. It seems that slipped under my radar but I went ahead and quickly fixed it.

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Thank you for the insight. Some of the issues you bought mirrored a few of the things I thought would be a concern especially the pacing.

In terms of the world I was thinking of making a separate page in stats for history, legends and anything else to clarify a few things.

Again thanks for the feedback

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Very short, but pretty interesting.

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@PariahLight my curiosity is peaked looking forward to seeing more.

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I feel like I’m being incredibly dumb right now cause I don’t know how to edit my original post. Help would be appreciated but I’ll keep searching for the answer so in the meantime here is an “update”.

Please also ignore the fact it’s in the wrong blog.

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Not dumb at all! It’s because of your trust level on the forum - once you post in more threads over time it will allow you to edit your posts. I’ve made your first post into a wiki in the meantime so you should be able to edit it now.

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Thank you very much. I appreciate the help and information.

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Hi, I still have yet to reach the appropriate trust level, and I’ve finally gotten the game out of the prototype stage and want to change the name of the post so could someone please help. I’d just like to change it to “Sins of the Crown WIP” if possible.

Thanks in advance if I am not around to see it.

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Done.

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A sneak peek at some of the work. Still a lot to do and I’m not a 100% satisfied but there is progress.

A much later scene in Path 1

The start of Path 3

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I finally got the feel I wanted for the folklore section. I still need to complete it but so far I like it.

So our big sister wants to kill us here? and my MC became a traitor :slightly_smiling_face::slightly_smiling_face:

Sounds about right :grinning:

Is a save system coming soon to this game?

Honestly I have no plans for a save system right now. The story is still quite short in my opinion but I will came back and reevaluate this once it has gotten longer.

Enjoyed the update and I look forward to seeing where this goes!

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I enjoyed what I read. Nice!

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