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lovely story so far tho can’t wait for more 
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This story has a wonderful beginning!
There are so many plot conflicts and characters, but it is not chaotic and interesting. What surprised me even more is that in one of the routes, the player can choose to obey the arrangement on the surface, but actually secretly plan his real goal, and the subsequent plot will also change accordingly. It is so touching to see the actual actions taken by the characters to try to break free from the gilded cage with their own efforts… I am looking forward to the development of the story!
(In addition, my English is not good, so I used machine translation. Please forgive me if there are any errors in the sentences)
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Thank you very much! I really appreciate it. The English is perfectly understandable.
There are a lot of big branches in the story, yes, it’s going to be very long. It’s strange, because it’s more work, but I really enjoy writing for each different character and each different goal. I’m learning so much about the Regency era while I do it. I knew nothing of British politics and very little about the war in this era before I started, but the process of gaining knowledge and applying it to the story is fun!
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Taking you up on that. More quiet/stoic/shy (not bashful or blushing, or stumbilng and stuttering, SHY) choices. Let me be standoffish and consumed by silent rage. Even with G (sometimes it feels like I’m forced to be happy or cheery when I don’t wanna.) I would also like some reactions to Lancelot based on dislike of his boisterousness and/or sheer volume. And when it comes down to that point, please please please make certain that the “I’ll dance with him to be polite” option is well represented as just that.
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I definitely agree with having the potential to be put off by Lancelot/Linden’s loud voice. Speaking personally, even if I thought he was an interesting person and very attractive I would still struggle to be near him if he was especially loud. If he is always speaking predominantly with the crowd in mind then it I would be struggling not to cover my ears, I imagine in polite society too there is an emphasis on avoiding being excessively loud.
It would be nice to have that as an option though, to just note how the first thing that you notice is how loud he is and then that might feed into a later conversation down the road.
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Okay, thank you, I appreciate that. And I can see where I can make changes with G, or add more stoic and shy options. Truth be told, I know people don’t like to be thrust into the ‘this is my best friend whom I’ve never met and I love him - but I don’t’ situation, but I did it for a reason that will probably become apparent by Chapter Four. But I can still add dissenting or grumpy choices.
I was trying to veer away from giving MC personality stats, but I can still give a wider variety of options with reactions. (Perhaps I will implement personality stats, I don’t much like them myself but if there’s a need I’ll do it. I’ll think about it.)
I can add extra choices to Lancelot’s intro too. I thought I covered it with the choices to like or dislike him or laugh at him etc, but I can see how that doesn’t reflect in the writing or the initial meeting.
@Phenrex Thanks, that helps me understand better!
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With G it’s less that (in this case {for me, anyway}) and more wanting to characterise PC to be a bit more like her mother. Which I feel should be an option in any case. Part of who you are is who you’ve been around, and with a mother like PC’s, it would not be amiss for PC to have picked up some of her colder traits, particularly in the era.
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Haha, now I want to play a gambler MC 
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Okay, I understand, and that’s fair. I can definitely add a few more cold or stoic choices after I’m done with Chapter Two.
@LiliArch I did actually consider that lol. It’s not entirely off the cards (pun intended).
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I would actually like to choose more than one positive trait or negative trait. I think having an I dislike everything about my body option but not the ability to say I like multiple things (or everything) about my body is a bit iffy to me.
I hope I’m making sense here I could understand if it’s a coding thing though.
Edit: Some blunter dialogue options would be nice as well. I would’ve liked to match Will’s energy during our dance together. I’m playing a tomboy on the ruined family route and the options for something like that is a little limited.
Also having what you did to cope serve as a secondary accomplishment boost but a lesser one would also be a nice addition. BTW picking languages when it asks about accomplishments is bugged I think. Choosing it doesn’t raise your language stat.
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Yeah, choosing language boosts music, that’s the thing I keep forgetting to mention!
So that’s why my music stat was so high. 
I did die laughing when our aunt forgot to list English as one of the four languages we speak. Then my MC reminded her so dryly, which fit his personality perfectly.
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This. I was thinking that perhaps we could take one extra positive trait for every extra negative trait we take.
Also (something to consider for the future, not now, since I imagine it’d be hard to program) some extra interactivity with said traits would be nice. For example, if I choose the trait ‘strong arms,’ it’d be neat if another character mentioned it later.
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Hey there, thanks for the comment. There is definitely an option to like everything about your body, I pick it every time when I test play lol - I have a shallow streak where I always want to play attractive characters so I’d be dreadfully unhappy if that option weren’t there for myself! I will definitely consider your other suggestions, they are good, but for the moment I’m focusing on Chapter Two.
@Garagos - There is already some interactivity with traits, unfortunately not all of them though. I worked some of them into the tailor/modiste scenes, and tall and short heights have also been used twice so far. There’s also a small acnowledgement of male MC’s long hair if you’re on the marriage or fun route. Niche, I know, but I prefer it to feel authentic. I will work in other traits when they’re relevant, promise.
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It might be fun to play as relatively plain (I pick good skin as my positive trait) but still with that confidence of “I like everything about my body/myself.” Don’t discount a plain girl with confidence!
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Do you have a Patreon? I’d happily contribute. I’m really enjoying it so far! Are we going to see any of King George and his madness?
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The humor on this IF is on point lmao 
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I’m sure King George will pop up somewhere! I’ll consider making a Patreon if the story’s been beefed up some more, right now it’s still early days. But I’m really flattered you’re willing to contribute, thank you.
Thanks! I really enjoy writing humour and was actually reticent to try writing a Regency story because I thought it was too serious of a genre. But someone I talked to pointed out it’s actually the perfect genre for humour. There’s so much to poke fun at and love about this era, it’s amazing.
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Really enjoying this so far. Iris is definitely the one i’m most intrigued by right now but im also really enjoying my friendship with Griffith, im very interested to find out more about his sisters fiancee .
I also really liked the politics stuff about the west indies and the slave trade, hope that continues on, I find that a lot of these period romance novels focus too much on the characters with no chance to interact with the world that they inhabit. Overall 8/10 so far would be interested in supporting on patreon once we get more.
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Thank you! Iris is very loosely based on my very brilliant best friend, I’m so glad you like her. And Griffith and his sister’s story ramp up in the next chapter, so stay tuned.
There’s a lot more politics and history (and maybe even some war) to come. If you choose for MC to be into politics there’ll be even more of it too. That said, I am a bit nervous writing about it, I love history but I’m not an expert. I have no idea what it would be like in the House of Commons or Lords in 1806 for instance, I hope I’m making it feel authentic.
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