Scales (Working Title) WIP Updated 02/23/21 (Afternoon)

Wanna see a magic trick?.. Demo

Hello all, my name is Taran long time lurker, first time poster… In any case as I said this is my first (uploaded) demo and I guess I was tired of no one seeing it. So yea here’s the breakdown.

Plot

In the game you play as new creature to the land of X’thania which is saying something since their have been no “new” creatures found in the world in a millinia and certainly none which weren’t explicitly made by the goddess. You’ve lived you’re whole like in a place called The Meadow a sequestered paradise hidden within a mountain. Your parents one a dragon, the other a human taught you many lessons but nothing prepared you for the invasion of soldiers. Soon you’re sent head over heels into an unfamiliar world your parents tried to shield you from with nothing but your closest siblings to hold onto as you traverse treacherous terrain and even more treacherous people as you learn who to trust and who not to.

Choices

In this game you’ll be able to make all the major choices gender, orientation, name, as well as others such as age (which makes a large impact), as well as the breed of dragon you are, I intend to include combat though I wouldn’t expect anything ground-breaking, what’s more there will be factions which your choices will influence, there will be physical skills and intellectual, and of course emotional though the time of implementation for each will vary.

Length

I don’t know how many words the complete story will have but I’m aiming for at least 100k - 150k words. Currently it sits at roughly 30,000k as for an upload schedule… I am going to be honest with you folk I have never worked on a schedule and the idea scares the fire out of me so… yea we’ll see.

Feedback

Well as for feedback I am not looking for anything major, spelling errors, grammer errors, thoughts on the story, hopes for future updates

Changelog

02/23/21 (11:00 A.M.) - Demo Uploaded - Word Count 25,000k

02/23/21 (6:30 P.M.) - Demo Updated - Word Count 30.000k - Many Spelling Errors corrected special thanks to MistyLeaf123 @MistyLeaf123? - Game no longer broken please enjoy…

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It seems interesting- although there were quite a bit of little typos and grammar issues. Would you like me to send the corrections over in PM or on this thread?

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Hey , same here just been lurking for a while now searching for a good book to read . Cant wait for you to start writing more . =)

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Put them in the thread I can take it… plz

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This is a very interesting one, but there are tons of spelling and grammar errors like @Mistyleaf123 already mentioned…

alright! here you go- also a Save Option would be nice for beta testers- it’s easier to find typos and glitches :slight_smile: If you ever need a (private) grammar/spelling correcter, I’ve got a knack for it ^^

(first few pages lol)

  1. “There you are, Ember; I’ve been looking for you.”
  2. "Listen carefully, Ember, because
  3. all of our siblings, yourself included, but…
  4. He sees
  5. there
  6. use a semi colon instead of a comma
  7. Out there, people are
  8. you splutter
  9. “I fear I may be killed if I stay. I’m twenty years old, Ember.”

  1. He
  2. You
  3. withholding himself? (“his own head” makes it sound…like he’s a criminal or smth :sweat_smile:)
  4. Ember- this is the task I’m assigning to you.

  1. The other sixteen/fourteen/twelve year olds (no apostrophe)
  2. Period instead of comma.
  3. another period.
  4. know-it-all
  5. blanch -flinch or grow pale from shock, fear, or a similar emotion. maybe use another word like “blurts an apology”, etc instead?
  6. she’s a drama queen in the best of scenarios, and she appears to think herself the beauty queen of your family.
  7. use either period or semicolon or “and”
  8. period or dash or semicolon
  9. period and capital T
  10. comma or dash
  11. period

  1. before emitting a sigh, not even flinching when another explosion rocks the small chapel.
  2. This should be another paragraph, I believe
  3. lets
  4. period
  5. comma
  6. period
  7. I shout, anger surging to the forefront.
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@Redway_bull found this: Ch_1 line 2156: Expected choice body

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Same

Found this bug part way through

Ch_1 line 2156: Expected choice body

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Same here

Glitch has been fixed. I can’t wait to play more

This is actually really good! I’m also not good with grammar (English isn’t my first language), so I can’t help you with that. But being able to play as a dragon…well half-dragon is great! There are only a few games that let you play as a dragon. Thank you for sharing your wip :’)

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Wow, that’s great! Will we have options for height and body type? Is there going to be a romance of some kind.

P.S. I hope that Zekiel is fine :pleading_face:

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@Mei_Hiroshi He’s fine… probably… as for the customization you will be able to choose scale color, and body type, no hair though.

Most likely where it comes to height you will be able to choose between x and x ft depending on which type of dragon you are given Land and Core are leagues bigger than Sky and Sea, or perhaps I’ll just make a point to say you’re very tall or short for the type of dragon your (parent) was. Which would you prefer?

Romance wise I intend to have several different suitors from different factions appear throughout the game which will be options though I wouldn’t expect anything untoward

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I guess the description of you are tall or short for your x type of dragon should be fine

:heart: it. Looking forward to seeing how this progresses.

I love it. I love it. I live it. That’s all I got to say and all that’s needed to be said.

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Loved what I see so far and has me most definitely wanting to see more great job and keep it up!

Seems interesting

It’s really good! Saved it under my favorites on my phone :smile: