Wow that cliffhanger after choosing to become the vessel will drive me insane this month
It was not supposed to be a cliffhanger originally, I was planning to have the chapter end with the whole situation resolved one way or another. Time constraints got in the way.
At least that way, the penultimate update will provide conclusion to multiple routes, instead of the fairly specific one like I planned originally, which I guess is a good thing? I don’t know, writing multiple endings is hard.
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@Omeg I don’t know if you got my second email, but please make sure to only use the art with this font, since we do not have a commercial license for the first one.
If you submit art assets with the first set of fonts and get a cease and desist letter for copyright infringement, I’m going to do this:
I not only got the email and saved the assets, I’ve read the thread which made you realize the previous font was covered by copyright. Monitoring everything that’s said or done about your game is pretty easy when only four, maybe five people ever mention it anywhere.
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This is quite sad given the quality of it, but on the upside, people who do mention it are clearly individuals of impeccable taste.
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By the way when someone else becomes vessel it loops back to interlude 2, maybe some goto tag is wrong
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Earlier today, someone posted an mpreg fanart of one of Saturnine characters to reddit. I’m not sure if it’s a point for or against your statement, but I figured it was worth mentioning.
I think it’s a *return command not working as intended. I could fix it fairly quickly, but the current draft ends on the very next page anyway, so I’m not going to bother until the full update.
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Boss Update. Battling Dusk can take many forms and end in many different ways. To reflect that fact, this update contains four different “boss” battles with three distinct outcomes each, as well as conclusions to other paths from the penultimate chapter, amounting to about 49K words of added content.
Keep in mind that, due to extensive story branching, the contents of this update will only be visible in some potential paths and may break pre-existing saves. I advise readers to wait for the complete version of the game, which is set to release this Christmas, followed closely by the official beta.
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Thanks I love being depressed again over the death of a fictional character I first experienced a decade ago😔
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Don’t know if these have been reported yet but gonna mention them just in case
If you decide to make Damon the Vessel you’ll get stuck in a choice loop no matter what you pick at the page where Dusk shows up due to “final_boss” not being set to “damon” when you pick him, making this version of the boss impossible to reach.
Also noticed there are checks for whenever or not Hadaly is with you in both his boss fight and when you choose him as the Vessel on this branch (team_stat = 3) even though you can only select him if Hadaly is absent (the check for being able to select that choice is team_stat = 2). Don’t know if this is an oversight or just leftover writing that was left in the final draft, but figured i’d mention it either way.
Also wishing you good luck with the beta and the release, and here’s hoping you get at least some decent sales, because you deserve them.
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You should generally assume that it’s good to report any issues you spot. I don’t get many bug reports—in fact, one of the main romance routes has been broken for half a year and I’ve only noticed the problem today. The game definitely needs some serious debugging before any official release.
In any case, thanks for support. I need it in more than one way.
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I’m still very early in the story but I’m enjoying it so far 
Small bug report - Choosing “Radius” from the premade (male?) name list results in MC being named “Robbie.”
Also, in the meeting that introduces the gang, I think there’s a missing word here:
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Hey Omeg!
I have fun reading your story. I give you a detailed view on what I enjoyed the most and what could be improved later.
I just wanted to post my findings inside the first 5 Chapters:
(Sorry for any spelling mistakes on my side. I just wrote the findings down quickly.)
Chapter 1 & 2
→ ““Aren’t we past this point?!” Marshal irritably says as she lands to your right, completing the semicircle that now surrounds you.”
Marshal can’t land besides my MC. He just let her fly against the billboard and she crashed on the floor. Then my MC was trying to rip off the head piece. So maybe Marshal can stand up beside the MC.
→ “To my hidden layer in the depths of the ocean, to study dark magic and perform an act of virgin sacrifice," Crystal replies without stutter.”
The “ in the middle is wrong.
→ What happened to MC’s shoulder? It was hurt during the first fight (oil leaking). On the ship it is never mentioned again. Was it fixed by the Meta Trio?
Okay, I read now the station part and that the wound gets fixed there. Does that imply the MC was leaving small oil droplets all over the Gray Queen?
→ “I’ll approach Krill and continue our previous conversation.”
Kirill 
→ Kirill’s name is also written wrong in the “Relationship data”.
Chapter 3
→ ““A bit pessimistic, don’t you think?” Miguel says, just as Olivia flaps into the hall. With that, everyone is present”
. is missing.
→ ““Maybe I shall explain,” Krill offers” and ““I assure you that this is not our plan,” Krill replies” and ““It is not just his faith, if that helps at all,” Krill replies”
Kirill → Maybe you should search in the whole text for it.
Chapter 4
→ “Krill, on the other hand” and ““That is one of the destinations we considered.” Kirll nods”
Kirill
→ “…this mission must fail. And I must figure out how."”
The “ at the end is too much.
Chapter 5
→ ““Is there anything camouflaged in any way?” Krill asks”
Kirill
→ ““Ocarina is a good ship.” Link shrugs, you imagine.”
And I thought it would be named Epona. XD
→ “Do not think I have some hidden agenda, , Sauce says”
One , too much
→ “to interact with. is an entity touched by the”
MCs name is missing
→ “I did not believe we were that familiar with one another already.”
This is about the name Sauce should call the MC. The interaction with Sauce is weird because my MC already introduced himself by his old name.
→ I’m missing a choice within the Sauce’s dialog. I want to ask Sauce to join the team. It’s okay if he declines but I want to have the option. (I was sad while reading that he is not happy there.)
→ “Can you make me… real?"”
“ is missing at the beginning.
→ “You still feel male, and so you’ll keep a matching body. Besides… you may need that upper-body strength at some point.”
Maybe the sentence could vary a bit? The sex change thing feels repetitive…
→ “You quickly say your goodbyes and go your own, divergent ways. As you head towards Marshal’s apartment”
After watching a film with Rook my MC somehow automatically went to Marshal? Wrong connection of pages?
→ “Hos she could be saved, were she to repent for her sins and embrace Christ.”
How?
→ ““Is artistic expression still legal in the Federation? I thought it got criminalized decades ago.””
This option does not get gray.
→ “"You lead an interesting life. Thank you for recounting it.”
“ missing at the end.
→ The time you can spend with the different teammates feels unfairly distributed. My MC can ask Rook so many questions but can’t talk with Damon about shared memories?
If you have any questions, please write me.
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Hello and thanks. I will correct—or have already corrected—the spelling and grammar mistakes you’ve spotted, as well as the bugs. The less work copy-editors will have to do, the better.
As for the time you spend with your companions, it is unevenly distributed, but that’s a feature more than a bug. For one, the MC already knows basic facts about the Saturn Nine crew, so a huge conversation tree during the hangout with Damon wouldn’t make much sense. Secondly, future chapters include mandatory conversations with Damon/Hadaly, so players who wish to spend time with these characters will get a chance to anyway.
I do worry that Damon in particular might be getting under-utilized, and I plan on giving him some extra focus in the final update, but I don’t think expanding his interlude scene is the right way to do it.
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Yes, I thought that this wasn’t a bug but a design feature. I just wanted to point out that it’s noticeable.
There are a few things you could discuss with Damon at this point. What does he think about the new team members? How does he feel about the mission? What’s his opinion on Sauce? Entrusting him with how weird it was to get the new powers from Sauce…
But these are all just examples. You have the better overview and I’m looking forward to the dialogs with Damon in the next chapters.
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The story got me hooked. Here is the next feedback. Mostly spelling errors and a few opinions from my side. I hope it helps. 
Chapter 6
→ “I will search beyond the down. Check out their fields, or whatever else they have.”
town
→ “They just speed up when they see you, perhaps recognizing you for an android, though they may just be wary of an unknown face.”
It makes no sense that my 99 % social MC thinks that random humans could identify him as an android.
→ “"A lot, I imagine. So many pleasures that I just cannot experience…”
Why are all choices here starting with a “? MC isn’t talking to anybody.
→ “don’t have the choice of tasting and smelling things”
How does the MC in other scenes know that people are “smelly”?
→ “He eats cats live, he executes his employees for bad attitude, he personally designs pleasure androids which he also uses as enforcers…”
Alive?
→ When Lisa is standing naked in front of MC, an option would be nice to lend her his jacket.
→ “Cloud, you need to make a choice now.”
At this situation I wished to have the option to talk to Crystal again… Retrospective the hiding option was okay.
→ ““I’d just be making it awkward for you, sis.” Hadaly smiles very weakly.”
Hadaly calling Damon sis?
→ “Hadaly walks away into the fog. He probably wishes he could disappear in it, for there’s clear hurry, clear desire to be somewhere else in his step.”
Wrong pronouns.
→ ““I… may have hooked up with damon literally minutes ago.””
Capital D
→ So… MC reads in a book that the nanoparticles are looking for a new one vessel, after their old one is destroyed. The group still wants to kill Crystal. MC doesn’t think about informing the group about this problem?! This isn’t a “whoopsie, I forgot.” I mean, they could somehow look for a solution together.
Chapter 7
→ ““For once, I have to agree with our resident werewolf,” Krill says” and ““I just talked to Hadaly. Our cutter should be capable of entering Telesto and picking us up if absolutely necessary,” Krill continues.” And “Krill pauses once again. “You want me to take control over your body? I can fly right into our ship’s effective range that way.”” And “Krill puts his hands out, two arms extended towards the wyvern, two open palms aimed at it.”
Kirill
→ “Then, at long last, turns towards him android.”
I think something is not right with this sentence…
→ I think I missed the choice where I could change the name Damon calls MC. Probably because I thought that there was a more fitting answer at that moment. Now I regret my choice. Like… MC is kissing Damon and he calls him “boss” to sentences later feels awkward. Maybe a second chance to change the name? Maybe when they start dating?
→ I’m a bit sad that we do not have the chance to offer Crystal help and kind of search for another solution. It would be totally okay if Crystal declines MC’s help or the team disagrees with MC’s plan. Having the chance / choice would be nice…
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What I keep cringing at. Being referred to as boy, Sir, man when I never select that.
I could do a billion women types for more years than the bot is given. Still not end up mimicking a previous look once.
Maybe change boy to kid or Sir to Ser. Use gender neutral if not going to refer to current options picked?
Everytime it comes up. I have to force myself to ignore that word especially when used the perma name. “Sir, MC permanent fem name.” I cringe hard.
Either don’t refer to real name or fix the genders to the genders. Wouldn’t of batted an eye if was a fake name after Sir.
Otherwise, enjoying this.
Um… I’m pretty sure there’s not a single line in the entire game where the MC is referred to as “sir” or any similar honorific. Are you sure you didn’t just write it in front of your name during character creation?
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Yes there is. I came across it with Link. I was called boy by Master, that I found very disturbing but skipped over it mostly.
I wouldn’t of said it otherwise if it wasn’t there…
First time meet up with Link. He might of said it once but due to changing network, had to go through that twice. Link has Sir with my name, not fake name.
Could you post a screenshot of scene where such thing happen? Would make it easier to track down the issue, if there’s even such issue.
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