Hi! I’ve recently been reading those Foreign Legion novels by P. C. Wren, and they’ve inspired me to try my hand at writing. I’m more of a short story/article writer, and this is the first CYOA I’ve ever tried writing, so I’d appreciate any feedback you can give me! I enjoyed writing this and I hope you’ll enjoy reading it too.
If you have any questions about the universe this is set in (parallel to Beau Geste) or the characters, ask away, but I can’t promise a spoiler-free answer
Dashingdon link: https://dashingdon.com/play/armadillidium/sahara-wip/mygame/
Enjoy, and thank you in advance for any feedback!
You are an ordinary young man living near the end of the 19th century when your life is suddenly turned upside-down by a scandal. Hoping for a new start, you have fled home and enlisted in the French Foreign Legion. Posted to the Sahara for five years, you will have to make the best of your time here.
May 8, 2021
Woo! Update time. 6553 words including code. See post #30 for more details.
Rewrite of Chapter 1, clarifying and expanding on PC’s background and context of things in the universe, since the setting is time-removed from today.
The major decisions I’ve made for this update:
I have decided that the story in its current form will be genderlocked male. To have a female PC means either she is the sole exception among an all-male cast which is not very believable (or even allowed), or writing different scenarios for them which I don’t think would be fair. If I’ve gotten your hopes up before, I’m sorry!
This game is not currently written with any character as being an RO.
European PC only:
For simplicity sake, your choices for country of origin as of now will be limited to eight European countries.
Okay, I give up on keeping track of them here. There’s a lot. And I mean a lot. I think there’s about twenty now. Not all of them will make it out alive.
I’m not looking for typos or grammatical errors yet, but on style and pacing.
I’ve edited Chapter 1, but most of the changes are in the coding, so it’s behind the scenes. The changes in the narrative are clarifying what I felt was lacking, so it’s mostly about establishing the PC’s background and providing more background information/context. I’m sure any French in there is still broken as hell, but that can wait.
And of course, any bugs if you encounter them.