This is a really cool premise! I like what I’ve read so far. Your writing style really helps me visualize the scenes, and I think you have a great way of describing the mood, especially in the first scene. The magic elements are really interesting so far, and in particular the bard’s scene was like living in a music video in the best way.
In response to your question at the end of the prologue, maybe you could write something about what the MC thinks about their father and/or remembering their mother? Looking back on their family life, what they’re about to lose as they run away? I don’t know if there would be a great way to write choices about that, besides maybe a reaction to the father specifically, whether we’re feeling understanding or betrayed, etc.
For other feedback, I felt like the alt text on the page breaks was too frequent and too long. I get not wanting a bunch of NEXTs, but most of these felt jarring, especially the ones that were dialogue. I’d personally recommend switching at least some of those to normal text.
I feel like given the circumstances, visiting Nikolas at the Mage Comissioner’s office seems really dangerous. Would it be possible to have them discuss why Nikolas wants you to visit in person more, and/or have more reluctant or suspicious choices about it? To be honest I thought it was a trap and was kind of surprised when it wasn’t It’s cool if you don’t feel like that would work well, though.
Finally, I did a quick run through with some gender switches just to check stuff out and found an instance where Nicole’s name didn’t appear. [“Hey there, Elaine,” calls out as she greets you with a smile. “Glad to see you’re on time.”]. For reference, this version happened when I chose not to spend time with her after meeting at the tavern.
I think that’s about all I’ve got for now. I’m looking forward to what’s next!