Enjoyed the demo thus far and I’m definitely looking forward to more, especially the royal/mc romance route. Has the Mc and the Royal ever met before? I know that the royal only finds out the MCs name after we rescue them in the castle but do they just assume we’re a servant working there or have they seen each other in passing sometime?
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They’ve seen each other in passing, but not in any significant way that would make the MC stand out.
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ihauk
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i like how you build up the story
well done
i will keep an eye on this
Hey there. Gotta say I enjoy the premise of this story: being a spy and prince of a major kingdom planning to take over everything has always been an idea I’ve been interested in. Thanks for coming up with this.
I have very little on feedback when it comes to story structure and writing as I find everything relatively easy to digest with no complications there. It’s still too early for me to judge the characters so I can’t tell you if they are well developed or not until I see more. Except with our parents and sister. Being our family, I would like to have maybe one scene with each, a small conversation with them to get the gist of their relationship with us. I got a minor thing like this when in the scene where the MC reports what the Oracle told them, I got an option to say “this will be fun” and our father chastises what we consider fun. That gave me a taste of how his relationship is with us and I would like to have that with all three members of our family. Just a reaction that gives us a general view of how they act with us.
Besides that I have nothing more to say on that front.
On the technical aspect, there is an error I keep finding regardless of I what I do:
Everytime I hit that choice I get this error:
So far that’s the only one I’ve find.
Good luck and keep it going. I love this idea and wish to see what it develops into.
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Just letting everyone know that saving is officially implemented
And since I’m here I’ll tell you that I am still working on the first draft of the next chapter, but I am getting close! I’ll let you guys know when it’s done so you can watch for the update.
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well the story is interesting. Love the dialogue…
And I’ve got my eyes on Lady Mage!
But is it normal, when you get to the big dude getting hurt…the demo go on a loop…and you are back at the beginning?
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Ender1
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This is quite an interesting plot can’t wait to see more
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Thank you for saying so! And yes it is, I put the wrong command to signal the end of the game but it is the end of the demo. I’ll go back and fix that to make it more clear, thank you for pointing it out
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That’s very kind of you to say! I’m glad you enjoyed it
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Just quickly letting everyone here know that the next update is slowly but surely progressing! I finished the first draft several weeks ago and am working to fill in the “meat” of the story.
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Love the story. Can’t wait for more!
The link for the demo is updated! This update is an interlude that mostly consists of dialogue with the original 5 ROs. And of course, please point out coding and grammar mistakes that have been made!
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Really loved the new update…Keep up the good work👍
Does the demo end where we forget the dream
Does the new update end after the dream because It is just loading after that?
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Yes! Sorry, I forgot to put the end command.
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