I really enjoyed the demo and can’t wait to see what comes next!
Some things I noticed:
Because of a save space you allow them to have - Maybe you meant to write safe space
I don’t have to remind you that if you fail to fullfill another job - Fulfill
Also, I probably missed it, but I don’t think it was ever explained why the mc needs glasses when they’re outside.
Lastly, is there another link to the tumblr? Unfortunately, the one on top doesn’t lead me anywhere.
Anyways, that’s all I have to say for right now! The demo has me hooked and I can’t wait for more !