Red Breaths (WIP) (4.5k Update, Chapter One Completed, 9k words)

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Red Breaths

Synopsis: You were found in a destroyed home. Blood all around you. You have no memory of how you got there. The only thing you know is your life as you used to know it is completely gone. Now they are running tests on you and talking about your ‘potential’. Choose who to trust and who to betray. Can you even trust your own mind? Can you even return to your old life?

Author Note: Hello!

I am a long time reader, first time writer for IF stories and currently have my first demo for my WIP Red Breaths. Currently this only includes the Introduction and the first half of the first chapter which comes to about 4.1k words. Sorry for the short duration. Should be about thirty minutes read, so if you could give it a read and provide feedback, I would be more than happy to take the feedback and respond. Also the stats screen is not fully implemented yet, so don’t expect that to be fully working until a later update :slight_smile:.

Update 1.1: Finished Chapter one bringing the total to about 9k words. Let me know what you guys think! Also improved the stats screen a bit and gave the option for character customization.

Content Warning: Blood, Gore, Mental Trauma. If any readers think of any others I should add, let me know.

Link: https://cogdemos.ink/go/6810

AI Disclosure: No —- This project does not contain the output of Generative AI

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It is set to private. Can’t access the link.

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Set to private, sadness.

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Concept idea has me curious but like the others have said its set to private so can’t check it out.

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My bad guys should be public now!

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No worrys and it works now :grinning: now as to what content we currently can see my intrest is peaked so will follow your progress as I can and how the implied different aspects come together.

What i can say is I have a feeling despite lack of memories im going to be on there bad side real soon lol

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Completely understandable lol. Thanks for giving my WIP a read through and I am glad your interest is peaked!

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Oh boy, dunno why but i get feelling am abt to become the bad guy on this bih

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Really interesting intro! Can’t wait for the next update.

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Playing again and noticed that when first at the facility if we choose to wait but dont do the other options it treats it as having done all the options. So would suggest creating a variation here or for the others in someway if something isn’t done. Or if you decide to not create varation to give a small note with the wait option that basically tells readers selecting it will treat all the options having been done.

Just a food for thought :grinning_face:

Playing a little further along boticed the continuation at some point might consider removing the end there message and connect the two parts smoothly.

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Thank you for the advice. I am trying to figure out how to make an if statement so that option is always the last option that is available. Will have to do more research to allow that :smiley: .

As for the end message forgot to remove that. Thank you for bringing it to my attention!

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Interesting so far! :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:

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