Well, I was aiming for it sounding like A Few Good Men. Might have missed the mark though. Boy title might not work as a pun as easily.
Suggestion for the nephewâs scene-
Nephew Reintroduce You
As in âLet Me Reintroduce Youâ.
I didnât get the pun until I read the lower texts
Really briefly, but what is this about and is there romance in it?
Niece:
⢠Niece to see you
⢠The girls are back in town
⢠Sister, Sister
⢠She will be hugged
Nephew:
⢠Nephew good men
⢠Having to Nephewâs the situation
⢠Bad Boys
â˘Brother from Another Mother
You donât have to have the word ânephewâ or ânieceâ in the title so much as punnily allude to it imo
No explicit romance in NPT; it built toward some connections to potentially be explored in a sequel but since it takes place over a day and a half there isnât time for much else. Romance just isnât my bag.
Okay, flash contest time: who has the best name for a regional grocery store chain, a la Kroger or Publix? I briefly considered Fulgoreâs, but even a story as irreverent as this one may go a bit too far with that reference.
Groceries R Us
Both names are based on real-life companies, you donât think itâll be a problem?
I canât think of anything witty, but since names like Kroger were originally the foundersâ names, perhaps you should use a name youâve already used â like Edgewickâs Emporium (taken from Edgewick Academy) or better yet, Mimiâs Fair (taken from the Screaminâ Mimi, lol) â it could be that they named the school/coaster/etc. after the founder of the grocery store or something like that.
I was just using them as examples of the type of store I am talking about. I wonât use either.
An ode to the fallen, @Eiwynn. A good idea. I could even tweak it further, make it Groce R Ease or something.
Edgewickâs Emporium could work too, could even throwin a blurb about it being connected to the family behind the school or something. Keep in mind more than one name might be used, as I could change it up based on school, where you live, or something like that.
âWe make shopping an ease! â
Maybe it could be connected to how much money you have â that way you enforce the idea before the graduation (and the kidâs college fund) that how much money you have left is important.
As long as we donât shop smartâŚ
Nameâs Ash. Housewares.
Poll time for the store names:
- Edgewickâs Emporium
- Groceries R Us
- Groce R Ease
- Pie
0 voters
Some bugs I found:
My childâs mother is referred to as a he:
My child has higher individuality than popularity, and he still was the bully. Maybe it could be more nuanced- a lower popularity (less than 50, but more than 45) child had the option of bullying or receiving the same treatment as the victim?
Also, my kid picked on Avery when the childhood friend transferred early in life.
And when I chose to humiliate him, I showed the childhood video even though I didnât get the scene in year 3.
FINALLY someone gets it a book where itâs just normal & not over the top (not that Iâm complaining.
I LOVE THIS BOOK UGH I JUST WANT MORE LIKE ASAP.
someday you will make a poll with pie or cake in it as a joke, and it will winâŚlong live pie.
Iâm working on exactly that! I must love yâall, because I have a shiny new copy of South Park The Fractured But Whole for the Switch still in its crinkly wrap, and I spent my birthday morning writing a goodly chunk of the commercial tryout instead. Hopefully a few more nights will finish that, and then only one more scene before year 13 will be ready for the world. By the way, welcome to my excitable new reader!
@Snowflower The magic number is 46. That or lower is bullied. Higher and they are the bully. As for the transfer scene, I can see it causes some confusion. If you never get it, I just operate under the assumption fname has always been at your kidâs school (as I am fairly sure thereâs no time in the story I say otherwise, but if I am wrong please tell me so I can eradicate it). The reason you get Avery vs. fname as the bully/bullee (it really seems like this should be a legit term for a bullyâs target, yâknow) is based on potential strains on you and your kidâs relationship with the friend and his or her parents. If itâs strained itâs fname, if yâall are relatively OK it is Avery. I am giving opportunities to burn and/or mend bridges a lot in the mid-to-late game. Expect this to matter when it comes to finales, endings, achievements and so on.
@Drakeye Whoâs to say it hasnât happened already? Iâve been making online polls with that option longer than some of yâall have been using the big potty, I imagine. Probably dates back to around '03 or '04, working at a website that wanted to be a IGN killer back when that was actually a desirable prospect. I will be amused if it ever happens here, though. Probably been close before.
On a personal note, my father found out today during my little birthday bash that despite our best efforts at a hearing last month, his license was revoked. I have only talked about it on here a couple of times, but he had a traumatic brain injury known as a DAI last April that by all rights should have killed him. He made a miraculous recovery, has fought through brain swelling that left him incoherent, weeks without solid food because of a wired jaw, months having to have people with him, and through it all he has persevered. Heâs in the top 1% of recoveries for this type of injury, and is essentially unchanged from before aside from getting drowsy easier and on very rare occasions having trouble coming up with a word for something. He also just went back to work in January, which has been great for him. Heâs only 63, and the prospect of facing all those years without a license has been crushing him. I have told him weâre not giving up on this, and hopefully we can get him a lawyer to sort this out since itâs only a slight vision field issue thatâs causing this. But I still would ask for prayers for him, just that he would be able to push through this and not lose hope.
I hope we have the option to expand our family it would be challenging but Iâm up for a challenge.