No intended reason for the similarity. I had a reason for picking this title, but I am completely open to all other title ideas. There have already been some good ones. After the release of the final draft, when people get a better feel for the story, I will definitely sit down and look for another name if people want one/come up with a better one. I don’t want to confuse anyone.
Also net tanked pretty hard, so if this message appears more than once… oops.
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Oh i only watched the first 6 episodes but got bored after it.
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So interesting! Can’t wait for the next update, your writing is very engaging
Update: I have finished writing the ending and all of the base concepts, so now I just have to go through and edit the flow and general problem areas. Expect the rough draft of the whole thing to go up within a few days. But, if you want to wait for a later version that doesn’t show glaring errors, then I would recommend waiting for the first few rounds of hot fixes to go through, first. Thanks, everyone, for being patient.
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Frame of Reference: New Posts Start here. 65
Considering that the main character’s nickname is Rabbit, and that the professor has a sick obsession with the MC, your choice of words there isn’t exactly the best… but then again, maybe you intended that? 
Edit: Ok, I found a typo:
Double Edit: I realized that typo contained a spoiler, so I fixed it. 
“After a moment Dr. Feldburg stops moving so you get a better picture of
what is happening. He has your clone sprawled on the floor, and he lays
next to you. His head rests on your should, and you can clearly see his
is trying to get your clone to reciprocate some forced cuddle.”
There are two possibilities. I either intended that, and, much more. Orrrrrrrr, I really like “Of Mice and Men”, but I can’t use the name Lennie without getting the feels… oh no, here it comes… WHY GEORGE!
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More typos:
You step into the room in time to see Feldburg scrambling to get off of
the floor. He adjusts his collar collar and is the first to speak.
You words bring him back to attention, “What do you mean doctor? You have always called me Rabbit.”
How jolt his head to where it faces yours.
Twist the neck. it should be quick and painless.
Before she gets there, and after it is too late to stop it, Feldburg
slips behind them and slides his arm under their neck before locking it
into place.
You were so adamant that my arguement only angered you… You got voilent (that one kind of sounds like it has a New Jersey accent, haha)
“Your misguided, you know that?.. but… I guess I can’t change it.”
He collides with the creature, but is throw across the room in a single
motion and you know that is the last you will see of him, the breath on
your neck makes sure of that.
A devilish grin creeps on it’s face as it walks ever forward. it stops
above you and in one motion grabs your shoulders and forces you up.
I just noticed that in a lot of places, you used “it’s” when it should have been “its.” I’ll have to go back to find them.
It takes it’s hand and started to rub your shoulder
Oh, quick question: since skipping to the new stuff sets your relationship with Feldburg to neutral, does that change any of the outcomes? Are some endings only possible/easier to obtain with a positive or negative relationship?
Story Feedback: I got the ending where you bash Feldberg’s head in and the two guys arrive for the annual check-in, but I didn’t like how abruptly it ended. The guys arrive, they get in the elevator, and then what? Is the main character even still alive? What happens to the creature? Even if it is a “bad” ending, I think it needs a little more closure. There’s just too many holes.
Having a good opinion does effect only one real ending. A bad one is not really taken into account. As the span of the story is short that rash actions can easily be made against friends. But regrets are always possible.
There is a technical romance ending. That involves liking Feldburg. You are not forced into a romance, but it is the only way to unlock this ending. There are 3 different points where you can get it, but it requires having a decent opinion of him. You can easily get it by just always taking his side, or trying to see the best in him. But it might require a fresh start. The ending itself is short, but I liked it.
As for the ending you got. That is the main one everyone will get, as it is the easiest and is attainable at the most points. I hear your complaints. The whole part is probably getting a re-write, but I almost want to keep its abrupt end. It isn’t supposed to reveal everything, to leave you wondering what does happen next(almost to upset you into trying a new path to get a different one). The game is supposed to be experienced from different angles to get the whole story. I tried to not make a game that had crazy different paths, but one that would have paths that simply let you see it all from different angles. There is a creature heavy ending, but it will require some luck and testing to reach. I only hope the reward is worth it. If this whole style doesn’t work out for you overall, please let me know. Also I guess I will update the main post with a spoiler area for some of the ways to unlock endings so they can be equally tested. And I want them to be experienced.
I can just ctrl-f the it’s. just point out that it was misused a lot and I will handle it. I expect to have tomorrow to upload a better version based on all of this.
Ok, I got the secret ending! Yay! And the “romance” ending, which was honestly weirder than the secret one. Ew. 
Edit: Ohmygod, I just found out about the knowledge test thing! Is there more???
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I like atypical romances. Trust me, if in the story’s world I could have made Feldburg a rock person from Alpha-Galactis-7 and the MC a Mermaid, I would of… don’t judge.
Only one Knowledge test. I had to force myself at points to keep this a shorter story. Which probably affects some areas
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Maybe if we pass the first knowledge test, that will give us a hint later on about how to survive to the secret ending? It just seems like a good feature that would be a shame to waste.
Question: Why was the creature out of its cage in the first place? That never really got answered…
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Oh and by the way… I first checked this WIP out because the of the title of the thread. Something about the combination of “Quantic Daydreams” and “R Rated” spoke to me. I figured it was either a psychological horror story or some sort of metaphysics-themed porn. Either way, I was in.
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@Mirabella Answer:It was never really explain. It is assumed Feldburg left it out. Either by his growing attachment to it, or his intention to keep it out it in case it needs to be fed again. Or maybe the creature stayed out of it’s own will, maybe it has plans of it’s own. It was left open ended, but I can add in a better explanation if it is needed.
Also…metaphysics-themed porn… I am now genuinely curious as to what that would be? Like it would be a video titled, “We all know Schrödinger’s cat, but have you seen his snake?” and the video has a 50% probability to not even load… I would, probably, watch it.
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I’m ok with all the explanations being left out now that I know it was intentional and now that I’ve played through several times.
But the true struggle comes with finding a good balance. I want it to not reveal much, because I want the player to have to work for the answers. But, I also don’t want it to be so bad it discourages first time readers.
See I am glad you have played it several times and can understand the purpose to some of the ‘weirder’ things. Anything you would recommend to help convey the message that readers should do more than one play-through?
You mean aside from telling them to play again at the end? Maybe you could make an achievement system, so readers can see how many endings are left to achieve. Or you could do something like the “legend guide” you win if you get a high enough legend score in Heroes Rise. If the reader gets a certain ending, they win a list of clues like the one you already made.
Or, since there have been so many clomes so far, you can add some sort of cryptic line at the end along the lines of, “But another rabbit might have done it a different way…”
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Your ‘Or’ was exactly what I was thinking, that or the list of clues at the end. Partly the reason why I named it Quantic DayDreams(aside from the awesome acronym QDD) was the fact it is supposed to be a story told in slightly different ways each time, where variables shift but the equation is always the same. But, it is just a working title. So I am hoping that that one sticks or a better one comes along. Either is fine by me.
The achievements also sound like a good idea. Might do both. A double incentive! Who doesn’t like that?
