Honestly an argument could be made only letting you be good or only letting you be bad and introducing flavors of said morality to keep the choices element. Should be either to make a coherent narrative around rather than two very opposite alignements.
The summary kind of makes it sound as if Aphantasia is a disability when its really just a different style of thinking. You can still imagine things with Aphant. It’s just different.
I had hoped that specifying that aphantasia renders you unable to visualize anything you imagine would prevent being misleading about that.
It is… I don’t know where it made it sound like so but it’s clear.
I can certainly see a lot of your perspective here and understand why you’re facing this dilemma- you make good points!
Ultimately it is up to you which direction you go and with the greater context provided I think either story could be interesting. You can definitely still have character progression while the character is losing their superpowers, it just becomes a fundamentally different sort of experience that will appeal to a different crowd entirely, I think. Learning that you’re losing your powers and trying to learn how to compensate in other ways would be an interesting experience.
If I can make an additional suggestion for the alternate version of this game you’re considering, it would be very interesting to plot the power arc so that the player begins as super-powerful and reliant on that, then starts losing the powers and has to “take boxing lessons” so to speak, and improve their mundane abilities to stay in the game, even at some point having to keep going with no powers at all, but then it would be very rewarding to see that as the low point of a power curve, where after sufficient time with this in the story, the character’s superpowers begin to ramp back up again, and then they can finish out the game at a peak of mundane ability coupled with regained superpowers against a threat that they wouldn’t be able to face with either alone.
Maybe the enemy or situation in the climax is just too powerful for someone mundane to handle, but you’ve gained a resistance to the power-draining or learned how to reverse it, so while it can still happen to you, you recover quickly, so there could be moments in the climax where your powers flash out again and you have to rely on mundane abilities, but then they come back allowing you to use them to overcome some other obstacle. I feel like that would be a satisfying character arc and climax.
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I like it, hope your still working on it too. People are making a fuss about how the disability isn’t accurate but I really doubt the people who can’t visualize will be reading a book, something that literally needs you to visualize so just keep working on it and don’t get discouraged
Just saying as someone who can’t visualize. I love reading books and visualizing is certainly not a feature required whilst reading. I’m sure that i’m not alone in that regard 
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I’m glad you like it! I am taking a break from the story now as I’ve been too busy with other things, but I would love to get back to it again once I have the time again.
Interestingly enough, though, visualization is not actually a requirement for reading. I happen to have a very active imagination, so it is an interesting concept to me as well, but my sister is book obsessed and she doesn’t imagine/visualize what she reads. I also know of artists with aphantasia, who can make very creative drawings even though they lack mental imagery. I find that so cool. It’s always really interesting to realize just how differently people can experience the same things.
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Hey, just an update for those curious! You might recall me saying this:
Well, I thought long and hard about that, agonizing over which main character I should really keep (the power thief or the power robbed?) until I came to a conclusion: I don’t need to pick one of those main characters over the other! They both have interesting stories to tell with a very different perspective. Why not write about both?
So here is what I decided. I’m going to try to write two books in the same universe, one about each character.
The first will be about a character that should be familiar to you: a criminal who gains the ability to steal powers. Only, in this version, you gain powers using a device that you steal early in the book.
Who invented the device that your character steals, you may be wondering? You’ll have to read the second book to find out! That book will follow a different main character with a very opposite journey. Instead of being the power stealer, you’ll play as a someone who gets their powers stolen. The two books won’t have many connections (apart from some cameos here and there) and each one could be read individually, but reading both will fill in more pieces of the world.
I realize that saying I’ll write two books is a big claim for someone who hasn’t even finished writing one yet, but I already have most of the outline for both of them, so I’ll be trying my best! That said, I am still very busy with other things, so I can’t give any date that I expect a new draft to come out. It will probably still be a long while, so I don’t recommend getting your hopes up just yet.
(I also want to make sure that my structure for the stories is perfect before I begin writing this time, since I’ve learned so much from your feedback and want to do my best at preventing the same mistakes this time around.)
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Good luck with that decision!
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about to try for the first time.
Edit: I will kill to play the full game
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This game is simply awesome
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I pkayes its before and forgot how great it is
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The story isn’t being aborted, I’m just horrible at balancing my time, so I haven’t been able to work on it much. It definitely motivates me to work on it more when I get comments, though! Like, gosh, that’s so cool. I definitely did not expect anyone to still be reading it, let alone enjoying it. Makes me happy. 
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I spent my midnight there 
and I still wanted to continue it for the moment I had no desire to read anything else I assure you that this WIP is magnificent but I understand take your time ^^
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I can’t for you to continue the story wip because i want to play like All for one
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All for one with an actual good reason to be evil
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So if I like it I should click that, and not I also shall click on it?
Because I don’t know any bigger advisory then myself. My greatest enemy that holds me back is myself. Muhahahaa
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Mission failed enemies like it.
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I know others have already made the reference/comparison, but I, too, am very excited to play as an All For One style character. Hope the rewrite is going well and can’t wait to read more of your work!
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