*️⃣ Phantasmagoria: Nightmare's End (WIP)- First 4 chapters released ~99k words so far

I do love riddles… but I also don’t want to get stuck. This works nicely, I think :slight_smile:

Also…

Summary

breath?
‘Footsteps’ is tempting what with the “the more you take, the more you leave behind” but surviving isn’t the only criterion required to be able to walk so…

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Thanks for the feedback @azerty!

Admittedly I was being a little tricky with the possible answers on this one and it almost fits everything there except it needs to be something another person can actually see you’ve left behind after you made it, where as a breath is invisible

If no one gets the right answer I can give it out under a spoiler tag later (and might need to check if the riddle is clear enough.)

Edit: hmm that’s a good point. Let me think if I can tweak it to be better somehow.

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I may be loud, I may be soft,
Fast, rushed or slow,
But for every one that is taken,
Another is left behind as you go.

What am I?

Does this sound any better?
(By the way thanks for pointing that out, it’s hard to write up riddles that have at least a little bit of a rhyme and are tricky enough to be a challenge, yet not confusing because it may not be quite right. If this is still sounding a bit weird let me know and I’ll have another go or use a different riddle in its place :slight_smile: )

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Not weird at all - this phrasing works perfectly - the only ‘issue’ is that it also makes it a lot easier to guess.

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Thanks @azerty! Glad it sounds better. Yes it’s really hard to balance it so it’s not to easy, not to hard and also making sense :face_with_spiral_eyes:

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I read it and I think it’s really good. (I think I got through until the third chapter.) Will be there a good ending? Love interests? How many chapters will your story have?
I wish you the best for your story :grinning:

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Thanks @Queen_Zelda :smiling_face:
Yes a good ending can be possible.
I’m still making some final decisions on how to divide up the rest of the content (and providing I don’t end up adding more) probably approx 7 chapters (+ a mini game that will become available after finishing a playthrough.)
There’s not really love interests in the main game unfortunately, but I am trying to work in the possibility of interacting with 2 of the characters in the main game as kinda RO’s (it’s kind of hard to make them proper live happily ever after type RO’s given what the NPCs in this game tend to be, but we’ll see what readers think about what I’ve done with it and if it works) in the mini game that follows on from the main story once you’ve earned their interest enough as more than a mortal that’s well beneath them to even suggest it and not get immediately shot down (probably literally).

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Please, tell me the Oneiroi is one of them :smiling_face_with_tear: :pray:

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That’s the plan :smile:

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Just wanted to wish you luck with the copyediting and publishing you’re probably working on right now, and letting you know that I’m looking forward to the next update with Phantasmagoria, whenever it’s ready.

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Thanks so much @ChanceOfFire! Sorry the update on this one has been delayed. Got hit with a lot of day work and other life stuff that’s been keeping me busy, and then Raishall was decided to play find the errors with me which took up a chunk of what was supposed to be writing time. Getting a round of editing finished up on Raishall, then can get back to updating this one again :smile:

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Footsteps??

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You got it :smiley:

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Sneak peak
“Well now, it would be only polite to introduce myself,” your attacker states in a voice that trills musically. It has a hypnotic quality that captures your thoughts in a way that you cannot help but stare. “My name is Aello, and you my little mortal are in a whole world of danger… quite literally. But you knew that already didn’t you?”

She regards you with glinting golden eyes, so out of place against the brown speckled skin of an otherwise all to human face. But no human ever sported a covering of dusky feathers, powerful wings or the curved talons of a hawk. She tilts her head in a birdlike fashion as if trying to decide what to do with you next.

Sorry again about the delays on the update. I’ve been slammed for time for over a month and it turns out I needed to write more than expected on the next chapter + also needing to get Raishall fixed as well which has been splitting my time. The next chapter is almost done (just needs a few doggy additions put in- these might be hard to find given how convoluted some of this chapter is. Hopefully not too hard for anyone searching for it in particular) then it’ll need a good round of testing to get all the bugs out.

Given how complicated the upcoming encounter with the harpie became, I’m sure there’s bug city happening so may need a little more of a wait (although maybe I’m wrong and it’ll be a quick edit? Probably not though :P). I really need to remember not to branch and return mutiple story tracks and multiple files like this. Too many if statements that need to be accounted for to prevent bugs for someone of my messy coding tendencies.

Word count estimate of the next chapter is roughly 40k give or take after I give it an edit not including the riddle files which are on top of that.

I’m also pretty much done with building a basic riddle mini game, but probably won’t release it yet as it has some potential kinda spoilers given its set after the events of the main game that I’m not sure if everyone wants to hear before finishing the main game. I’m thinking about making it unlockable once the game has been played though once in the final version for anyone who particularly wants to revisit the harpie’s roost, play more riddle games, win some great prizes^.

^Note: The definition of “great prizes” may differ considerably between players.

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