I don’t know how to mark spoilers so don’t read unless you already read the story.
The story is all kinds of random and the setting constantly changing, it’s quite chaotic, first, it’s the modern age, going to a rather bland event with random people briefly introduced, saving some girl i don’t care about, and suddenly being chased by some monsters which are rather childish and appear under the bed too,
MC apartment burns down, then suddenly Merlin is there whose gender can be changed, I don’t see what this project is trying to accomplish apart from being everything and failing at all, and I cannot see a game that will sell well after it’s finished, considering you are putting so many topics instead of making separate games.
You could have instead focused on an Arthurian tale, telling the story of Arthur from birth to kingship and then his journey in fighting the evil with Arthur taking his guards, knights, and squires to battle.
The characters were rather bland, and forgettable, especially Merlin, language was too modern and uninteresting. and I found myself not caring about any, Merlin who I thought was rather modern and ruined the picture of a medieval one.
The general goal of feedback is to focus on constructive criticism. Telling people they should’ve written a different game entirely isn’t helpful in this regard because they are highly unlikely to scrap the current game and start a new one from scratch. That said, Arthurian-themed games are quite popular, so there might be some that better suit your tastes. Pendragon Rising in particular lets you play as Arthur, and there are other games such as Guenevere, The Bastard of Camelot and Arthurian Tale: Camelot that are also more straightforward retellings. I hope you find some of them to your liking.
Finished off all the (many, many depending upon the MC’s actions) text messages awaiting the MC once they’ve woken up from the Camelot dream sequence. Now onto the main part of Chapter 2.
Unfortunately I haven’t read/watched Artemis Fowl, so I can’t really say. Another big franchise that uses the entire “realities overlapping the same location” thing is Silent Hill.
You mean Merlin isn’t already as sus (if not more) than Adrian?
Yeah, OKS Merlin has a bunch of known aliases. And a bunch of unknown ones too. That’s why they’re pretty chill & simply amused when the MC just bald-faced lies about their name to Merlin’s face.
I added the vending machine to the end state stats that I’m collecting now. I want to see if people just aren’t using the vending machine or if they are and it’s still not enough first before making any more adjustments to Chapter 1.
Regarding the bug fixes, I’ve updated Merlin’s Guide on my end but those changes (including the typo fixes) won’t go live until the next big update since that file now has a bunch of spoilers for Chapter 2.
The manipulative option doesn’t use m_hostile_external since (unlike the other options) it doesn’t make reference to any external actions, so the hostility can also be assumed to be only internal.
Well, he’s certainly trying his best, if nothing else.
You’ll have to cast aside your recent hostility and try to begin this ‘relationship’ anew. But in the end it seems worth it.
In that case, it would be strange for the MC to “have to cast aside” their internal hostility, since that shouldn’t prevent them from attempting to manipulate Merlin. It’s not like they know Merlin’s a mind reader.
Also, I spotted your cry for help in the guide preview.
There’s just something about a stalker desperately trying to come across as the boy next door while handing us poison that raises more red flags than a vague and likely manipulative old wizard
This is a really fantastic WIP, and by some coincidence it feels like the spiritual successor to my old favorite Guinevere.
There were a lot of great moments here, but for some reason naming my cat really stuck in my head, even though she completely disappeared after the opening passages. I named her Jingxuan after the Ming Dynasty warlord nicknamed the “Yellow Tiger,” because my character struck me as that kind of nerd.
Two requests - can I get pu’er tea as my drink of choice? It’s basically the only thing I drink other than kombucha. And could we pick Palamedes as our preferred knight in the Merlin dialogue? He was my favorite as a kid because every other knight was Welsh or French or something, and then along comes Palamedes the Middle Eastern Muslim knight. (It also helped that he shares a name with my favorite hero of the Iliad…)
Fantastic work though!
Edit: Here are my stats from a quick second playthrough with the fencing club. I’d just like to say I can’t believe you Wikidropped Cath Palug and then didn’t add that to the cat name list. Dishonor!
Sadly, I’m pretty sure your pet is already dead by the time the story takes place. You can still take your pet’s memorabillia with you when you’re packing your stuff though!
I do hope we get more combat scenes in future dream sequences; my MC avoided Lancelot because she didn’t want to be at the center of attention, not that she wasn’t a competent fighter.
So, was playing the fencing club, and i decided to keep to myself about King Arthur appearing in my dreams, however, when asking Adrian about how has been doing, u know the “enough about me”, he says: He shakes his head. “No weird noises and strange shadows in my apartment. No long-dead kings appearing in my dreams. The most exciting thing that happened today was me finding a toy in my breakfast cereal, like I told you earlier.”
how could have he know about that dream if i didnt say anything bout it?
uh, i normally either choose magnetism as my ability or bring with me a weapon to scare him off (being a security guard or the im a k1ller secret), or just ask him if he once was on a museum
That’s why they’re pretty chill & simply amused when the MC just bald-faced lies about their name to Merlin’s face.
