Oh Mother, Where Art Thou? [Updated: 1/9/24](32k Words)

Yes that answers my question, thank you. I’m not sure how I feel about it yet, but I’ll wait until they’re added to a point where I can see their effects before making much of a judgement.

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thats sound very intresting cant wait till you add them :slight_smile:

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Emh, just some random question… The negative trait like lone wolf, did it also have some plus side? Like when you doing quest/mission alone or when you end up separating with your companion you gain slight buff or when one of your ally end up betray you, you didn’t get status debuff from shock because in your head you always act alone, something like that? I think a little gray area in trait will make it interesting… Like yeah its negative trait but its also have some plus in there… Love your story btw, have a good day

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Hey!
I’m glad you’re liking the story. And negative traits do have some plus sides but just come with more backlashes imo. They often restrict your options and can hurt your relationships with other characters or get in the way at key moments. Lone wolf prevents you from letting people help you and can make you say some accidental things at the worst moments because it’s MC pushing people who want to be close to them away. Hope that makes sense!

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Yup get it, thanks for the answer :smiley:

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Sandwich sandwich WHAT ARE YOU! A bittersweet sandwich.

Anyways, what does crafter mean exactly? That can mean a ton of things. Is it like a mason or a blacksmith, do we make weapons, armor, another inn?

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@Ash_Chan Your so chaotic lol, I love it :laughing:

And the crafter profession will mean MC hand makes things to sell, think carpentry or woodworking.

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Hey, I was checking your Tumblr page and the link for societial expectations isn’t linked. And does woodworking includes weapons like stakes, bows and arrows and other tools?

There is no text here BTW, I had a joke about saying not sorry and not liking you but it’s too basic. I’ll think of another one on the next update.

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was i crying reading this? yes. :sneezing_face::black_heart: so good tho

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You never fail to make me laugh ash! :joy:

And I’ll go deep diving through the tumblr to properly link that page, also woodworking doesn’t cover weapons as of this very moment but I could possibly add it later.

I’m glad you liked it! :sob::blush:

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Wonderful story! Ccan’t wait for more mommy issue mc will have!

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Literally took me forever but here is the post I think I was originally using to explain the societal expectations of the world.

Edit: this is another good post that builds on the last one.

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The Broken Isles, where our story takes place, is a large landmass (think the size of Australia)

I don’t need to think it’s the size of Australia, I AM Australia. And Romandi is based on Athens is also the progressive one? That’s going to mess with me a little.

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Mini Update!

Okay, sorry for the bit of absence. :pleading_face:

I just got a new job and I am currently taking CS college classes at the same time so my writing time has been severely impacted but I was able to squeeze out a small update.

-New Additions-

  • Word count is now at: 33k words.
  • The orphan’s name can now be added.
  • Fleshed out some dialouge options, so there is more to read in Act 3 and a bit in Act 2.
  • Changed June’s lullaby to an a better fitting song.
  • The arrival to Santuario is done. It’s honestly more of the orphan’s first impressions, the deep dive into their life there will be in chapter 1.
  • Act 3 of the prologue is done and I have decided to include the orphans development years into chapter one so stay tuned for that.

Sorry it’s not as much as I’d like but I promise I am still working on it when I can! :blue_heart:

Quick Link: Enjoy

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Beautiful update. Thanks. Take your time with this

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… To name or not to name, that is the question. parentheses I don’t know who quote thatparentheses

Okay real time, would the MC really have a name then why would they have a name? If you’re called a thing for the longest time, you would response to that instead of your own name, especially when you’re a kid who’ve accepted being filth. That’s my take anyways, don’t focus too much on me!

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There is a story reason that they have a name, I won’t spoil too much but I did add some subtle dialouge in Act 1 to set this explanation up later. :wink:

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Is it a hopeful clinging to their earliest memory where they keep hearing their name being repeated which was the only thing keeping them going until Mother comes along?

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This is a gem love it

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