Not to sound mean or anything, but i been trying to read the story, and it’s like i can’t. It’s confusing and hard to follow. Especially in the beginning, it felt like a lot of the dialouge was repetitive.
@Queen_Zelda That’s great. Thank you for your words. I’m always happy to read you. I’m writing faster than before so I’m sure this time it won’t take me as long to share new content with you. And I’m excited for you to choose how to react to whatever happens later at the party. You’ll be able to decide how to feel about the whole thing, from getting mildly hurt, feeling betrayed, annoyed, and getting mad at one person, or almost everyone there (including M).
@kb12 Hi! No worries, you didn’t sound mean at all.
But could you elaborate a bit more on what feels the most confusing? I did try to use Italics to differentiate the events of the past. The present moment occurs at the party when there’s already a mess to deal with. Everything else is in the past, some scenes are more recent than others though.
And I’ll check the repetitive dialog you mention too, if you have a specific example about it that would help me too. Thank you for commenting about your experience, every little thing helps.
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