Mutt Life (W.iP) (have to restarted)

That what i thought so i created another account and decided to keep to my self on there

how complex i type it and i didn’t do a challenge because i didn’t want to do it because i was not official

Well, I don’t know the back story there, but we certainly would encourage you to create a complex story here–no problem at all. There are a lot of people to help you and nuture your story along. Please ask if you have questions about using ChoiceScript–you may find that ChoiceScript is easier to use to create complex branching narratives than whatever is used on the CYS site.

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i know but i hard figuring it out it how you guys say it so it becomes twice as hard me to use, also

I have moved this to The Mutt Life post so please go to that one and check it out and thank yu

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It might be a good idea to give it a different title, to avoid confusion?

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what do you suggests for a name

I don’t know. I’m sure you know your game best, and what name might fit it. :blush:

k, will do, mournfully i can’t find a site for programming stuff like this that was easy after that one ban me because of how i spelled and talk :cry:

How about choice of dog? A life of a dog? The shaggy life of a dog?or mans best friend? Idk

I see i will think about it

K how about the mutt life

Your choice but its ok

please go a check it out

thank you for transferring this to here

I know you’ve talked about how you were banned from another site for your spelling and the “complexity” of you your story, though at the moment your story is a bit hard to read and it’s extremely short.

Some suggestions I have are;

  1. A good, complex story needs a plot. Just going through the life of a dog doesn’t really catch my attention. It could be as simple as the trials and tribulations of getting used to your owner bringing a new pet home, or something like saving your owner from some sort of danger.
  2. If you have the player playing as a purebred dog like a Husky, the Mutt Life doesn’t seem like a suitable title seeing as Mutt often refers to mixed-breed dogs. I know you have Mutt as a breed choice, but if the player chooses Husky they’re not exactly a mutt.

I am curious, is English your first language? Or are you learning it as a second language? As it is, the story seems to be in its infancy so it’s kind of hard to comment on the story itself. Though I can say that it’s an unappealing read due to the current state of it, grammar and all.

But since you’re still working on it I have no doubt that you will be able to turn this into an interesting story. And even if you don’t perfect the grammar, I’m sure you can come up with a story that will capture people’s attention. Good luck! :grin:

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MissBilbay
No English is my first language, also your right about the mutt part butif you look at it again you see the MC master didn’t know what breed the MC was.

and they ban me again

I have seen enough about that cesspool to know that while some of the stories are good and actually have some really progressive values, the people on there are absolutely vile. Cheer up. They aren’t worth your time.

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i found a new website just waiting for the go ahead to fix this up

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