Mommy, We Created a Plot Hole! [Rewrite Pending]

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#222

Oh alright! For the cheesy parts, really it was just a nitpick since I was way too used to cringing whenever I read something Taglish because of my experience with reading very cheesy Wattpad books, so it was not at all the fault of your writing it was just me having a hard time adjusting personally. Plus me just saying that I found it cheesy when everybody is singing means that I just personally am not always a fan of musical segments in any litterature, which is waaaaay too subjective of me so it is definitely just a nitpick and not at all a valid criticism in my opinion. I hope that helps :slight_smile:

As for the lag, it seems to be fine now, I guess it just tends to lag a lot whenever I quickly switch between the other menus which is probably the fault of my horrible data connection haha.


#223

Heh, thanks anyway. I’ll try to make it so that the Taglish parts sound more natural.

I’m also going to rewrite the musical scene (I don’t even know how to write songs), but you can always skip the singing if you choose that option. There’ll be one in each chapter though. :stuck_out_tongue:


@E_RedMark Heehee. Thanks! :blush: Do you have any questions or suggestions?


#224

just curious , are you gonna add ‘art’ to the story ?

And…if the fade to black…then white is needed? kinda hurt the eyes . I usually like to play on dark background , cose I find the white…a bit too much .


#225

Yup! I’m definitely going to add pictures! Probably not on the next update though.

And no problem! I can disable it at the start and put an option in the main menu to enable it. I just didn’t want to add too many settings at the start.


#226

you do know the rulez of Awww right ? we need DOODLES!!! :grin:


#227

For those who don’t know, :camping: Camp NaNoWriMo has started! I’m participating unofficially since it’s going to be hard tracking my word count with all the code and editing, but I’m going to consider it a win when I finish the update.


Anyway, I’m going to expand the prologue a bit more before you start writing the story, to better establish your character’s motivation and relationship with the parents.

Here's a sneak peek of the new opening section:

Dear Diary,
It was a dark and stormy night.



I’m pretty sure my parents would disown me if they found out that I just wrote the most boring opening line ever.

If they haven’t done so already. It’s almost seven years since I last saw them.

Spoiler: This new opening will have a different context when you play on New Game+ :wink:


#228

As a fellow Camper, I wish you good luck on your project!

I look forward to the update :smiley: Getting more hints about the parents is always nice. Are they also trapped in a plot hole, hm?


#229

Good luck with yours too! :blush:

And nope, I’m not going to tell any more than that. For now. :stuck_out_tongue:


#230

I thought this was another WIP because of the changed name.


#231

Oh, hello!

Progress has been slow lately, but I’m finally done with (apparently) the hard part. I freaking hate my inner editor.

I’m also reworking how the personality stats work.


PERSONALITY POINTS

The opposed stats pair has now been replaced with personality points. Instead of a single bar that tracks “opposing” personalities, you can now gain points for both of them, which both start at zero.

So, for example, you can have 10 Honesty, and 20 Manipulative. Gaining Honesty points won’t deduct your Manipulative score, so keeping a middle ground won’t be as punishing, and it is actually possible to be both now, which can give you more choices.

This means stats can be checked in two ways now. A single check will just check if you have enough points for a certain stat, while opposing checks will check both the stat and the opposing stat.

  • For singular checks, the code will check your Emotional points to determine if you’ll either just nod, smile, hug, or kiss someone.
  • Opposing checks are used if both are conflicting. So to determine whether you will cry or not, the code will check your Emotional points in relation to your Reserved points.
  • 30 Emotional vs. 10 Reserved means you are 75% Emotional, for example.
  • Having the Emotional Trait (which gives +20%) means you’ll have 36 Emotional in this case.

I think this will give the player more freedom to pick their choices without limiting to min-maxing, while also being easier for me to balance stats. I don’t have to know how much points you have for opposing checks, I just know that you have to be above or below a certain percentage to pass or fail a check. This also means I’m not limited to 100 points, like a regular stat bar.

So if you only picked Silly choices in the prologue, you’ll automatically be 100% Silly from the start, and not something like 65% Silly. That would be silly!


What do you guys think? :blush:

@BABYCRY Well, what do you think about the new title? Do you like it?


#232

Just wanted to say that I noticed your project slightly before you changed name and I think new one is perfect, both funny and catchy.
Also, whole story and game mechanic seems very promising, so I wish you good luck and enough willpower to finish it. :+1:


#233

I love the new title, it suits the story very well. Keep up the good work! :grinning:


#234

Hello everyone. I’m still alive. :wave:

I’m sorry to say, but I’ve barely made any progress on the story.

My vacation is almost over, but I’d say that’s a good thing since apparently writing in a different environment isn’t working for me at all. It just doesn’t. I freaking hate it.

I can’t wait to finally finish Chapter 1, because all the good stuff is after that. I’m sure progress will be a lot faster once I’m done with it.

But on the bright side, I’ve made some new developments on the story I unfortunately cannot share unless you want to be spoiled big time. :stuck_out_tongue:

So as a consolation, here’s a preview of the new introduction: Link!

Once I have something to show, I’ll put up the private testing as soon as I can. It’ll have four stages (one for each story branch and one overall) before Chapter 1 is finished.

Bear with me folks. :bear: I hope it’ll be worth the wait. :blush:


#235

Yuuup. It’s not happening. Sorry, I really tried. But the story is back in hiatus again. I really have to focus on my school work for the next three months.

In the meantime, I’ll keep plotting and outlining for the story (it’s a freaking trilogy, you know), and I’ll be working on a new WIP in my downtime. Don’t worry, this is my baby, so it’s not going anywhere. I just need a lighter project I can take on.
I also need to cull the amount of variables and branching I have. I know I have a lot, but it’s kinda starting to sink in that I have A LOT.

I’m still not sure yet, but I think I’m going to have your twin’s crush limited to Brandon/Beatrice only. I’m also purging the Discipline stat, because it overlapped with lots of things. Yeah. I guess that’s not really a lot, huh?


Details about the new WIP here. It’s a spin-off of the story, set in Escheria, the first story world you’ll encounter. You’ll see some of the worldbuilding in place, but there’ll be no spoilers. No promises, but I’ll try to have a demo this month!

I’ll start working on this again after three months, in case that wasn’t clear.


Anddd that’s it for now.

I’ll keep this open for future updates, or just in case anyone wants to ask a question or give a suggestion.

Thanks for all the hugs and support. :pig_nose:


#236

Hello again. It’s update time! Now where do I start…

I’ve been busy trying to make sense of the plot, and I think I finally figured it out. I’ll be changing the premise slightly, but keep in mind that nothing’s final yet:

You play as a ten-year-old who writes a fantasy story in your diary about yourself and your twin sibling. The next day, you realize that you are now reliving the previous day according to how you wrote the story. But what happens when your twin also starts writing their own story? Will you agree to fix the plot holes together? Or will you be the cause of them?

Yup, so the title finally makes sense. :stuck_out_tongue:

This means the diary story will now have fewer genre options, and you will now be forced to name the characters in the story after the MC/Twin. The twin will now also have the opposite opinion about the parents, which is where the initial conflict will come from.

I’ll have to replot some events, but at least it’s clear to me now where I want the story to go. I really hope this is the last time I replot. I don’t even know anymore how many times I did that already. :sweat_smile: Watch me do it again next year.

And in an effort to keep the story manageable, I’ll be removing the mansion background option. It never really fit the story anyway. Yaya Connie will now be relocated to the middle-class background. …Come to think of it, you may be able to change your background later. :thinking:


I’ve also decided that I want to finish the update first before I start posting my other WIP (tentatively titled Prayers, Please), although I’ll post it soon after.

I’ve come up with the mechanics and the story outline for it, so the (excuse) plot itself shouldn’t be a problem anymore. It was surprisingly much easier to plot. :stuck_out_tongue:

I’m still not writing anything at the moment though. Still busy with college.

Aaanyway, I’m out! See you in a few weeks, I guess. :wave:


#237

Is the genre of the story our MC will be writing limited to fantasy only?

Don’t know, if this has been asked before, but does everyone have their fantasy counterpart? And can we affect what other people (such as our friends) do by writing their “story” into our diary?


#238

Hi again! I’m no longer talking to myself anymore! :smile: I’ve thought about the new idea some more, and I figured out a few more details.

Nope! I’ll probably be removing the action and mystery ones (that’s too many branches for the prologue!) but I’ll be incorporating parts of it in the others.

Not sure what you mean by fantasy counterpart, but nope. There isn’t really another “you”, you don’t meet or switch with them or anything (although I definitely had those ideas before).

And yup, you can affect others! As long as they are unaware of what you’re doing. Although it’s not guaranteed, especially if it’s illogical. What you write is still controlled by choices though, so there won’t be anything too weird.

Your friends will eventually know about it, although you can still change a few things like appearance and maybe even gender–but every little thing you change will have a side-effect. Certain things will happen no matter how much you try to prevent it, and you can’t invalidate established facts. You can still try anyway, but there’ll be no telling what will actually happen.

Later on the changes will be too unpredictable (things might get “misinterpreted” for example) due to the plot holes you’ve created, which is where the different story worlds will come from. You’re basically merging different story elements together at this point.

So now you’ll be asking… will our friends start writing their own stories too? I guess you’ll have to wait and see! :eyes:

But that’s all you’ll get from now. I’ll have something special to show on my next update post, so stay tuned! (It probably won’t be the updated demo though :stuck_out_tongue: )


#239

Oh my gosh this is wonderful. Will definitely keep an eye out for an update :wink:

Also, just in case this part stays:

So, which one is it?

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#240

Hello everyone! Just stopping by for a bit. It’s bothering me for a while now and the thread got resurrected so I figured I’d post again.

I have updated the title and the first post to clarify that I will be rewriting the story. It’s still in hiatus, but I should be able to write again in a couple weeks or so, and I can’t wait to start writing again!

I’ll be creating a new thread once the rewrite is done, but I’ll keep this one alive for now.


Anyway, after a bit more planning I finally figured out what to do with the diary mechanics and the story’s main antagonist, so I’m pretty happy with that. :smile: No spoilers for now, hehe. :heart:

In line with me trying to reduce the number of variables, I have also decided to remove the negative twin relationship option. It just didn’t fit the tone of the story. In fact, I was planning to make it so that the MC makes up with the twin in the middle of the story, because I don’t really want to continue writing those options. But don’t worry, there’ll still be lots of opportunities for twin conflict! You just can’t hate them anymore for no reason. :broken_heart:

Also, Wayne is shorter than Roselyna now. I think he secretly likes it.

I may be forgetting something, but that’s all for now.


@KJM Hi there! Thank you for the interest, and I hope you’ll stick around!

And that’s definitely disguises. Silly witch. :sweat_smile:


#241

Good to see you being free from being buried by school work for a while (hell week din ba sa inyo? lol) I’ve been curious as to what happened with this and I’m glad to see it be continued. Always going to support this of course since you really got me with the concept! Anyways, good luck! Hope to see what comes of this in the future :wink: