The first HG game that has tagalog words, and i already like it.
I hope you finish the game rather than abandoning it.
Good luck!!!
The first HG game that has tagalog words, and i already like it.
I hope you finish the game rather than abandoning it.
Good luck!!!
@Natman1025 Thatās one way to hit two birds with one stone!
And Iām glad you think Lily comes off that way! Hehe.
@Abe Thatās a nice and thoughtful wish. I wonāt spoil much but Iāll say that the genie is at least not a literal or jackass genie. Probably.
@Isabella_Taylor Yup! Good thinking. Thatās definitely better than a one off wish, and people canāt say that youāre being greedy either!
Do you have any suggestions on what I can do to improve that scene? Like, was there something you wanted to say or ask but couldnāt?
And thanks! Which among the story worlds (in the first post) are you most excited about if you donāt mind me asking?
@BABYCRY Well, itās not an HG yet, but thank you! Iāll try my best to finish it.
So apparently half of the people arenāt really sure who theyāll pick as the bestfriend yet. Thatās fair, but Iād really appreciate it if people would give me some ideas on how I can improve that part.
Anyway, some behind the scenes update:
I just overhauled the relationships system so that itās much simpler for me to keep track of. But you probably donāt care about it anyway if you havenāt seen the code.
Anddd unfortunately thatās all the time I have for this weekend. Iāll give updates again soon!
I think the main issues with that scene is the page breaks. It comes off as a bit clunky and would be better if there werenāt so many. Itās been a while since I played through but I remember thinking how odd it was that there were so many. Maybe just eliminate the page breaks and put all the ātextsā on one page, unless we are commenting on something.
The screen reader settings actually change how the text is displayed (I added it in an update), but I have taken notice of this and Iāll move the settings there before the scene so itās much clearer. Thanks for the feedback!
Hi again! Hereās a sneak peek of the new chat scene.
Wayne: Guys? Whatās up?
Michael donāt tell me itās the ceiling again.
Or the sky.
Roselyna: hiii wayne!
Wayne: Oh hey, whatāre you eating?
Roselyna: how did u know im eating
Wayne: Uhh, itās meryenda time? (snack time)
I mean, youāre always hungry.
Roselyna: i hate u
do u want some cookies?
Wayne: Syempre! (Of course)
But I also want to be with you
Because youāre like a magnet
Stuck to you like Iām covered in glue
Roselyna: ang corny mo talaga (youāre so corny)
tapos ka na ba sa assignment? (Are you done with the assignment?)
Wayne: Yeah, thatās my problem.
Iām still not sure what to put in my career day assignment.
I talked to Daddy but I still canāt decide between the 12 jobs I want.
Roselyna: wow 12?!
maybe u should be a poet
heehee
Wayne: Thatās not a real job!
I think?
There are lots of exciting jobs I want to try.
Eh, ikaw? (How about you?)
Ballerina? Princess? Baker? Hehe. XD
Roselyna: gusto ko maging teacher (I wanna be a teacher)
Lily: lol
Roselyna: but i also wanna be a dancer or a baker
oh hi
Lily: Syempre, ikaw pa. Haha. (Of course, itās you)
Wayne: Oh, cool! But I thought youād like being a doctor like @JM.
You can be a dancing piglet that teaches people how to bake!
Lily: Doctor? lol. Sheād just be icked out by gross things.
Wayne: @ Lily Hey, you donāt greet Roselyna by teasing.
Lily: Says the one who called her a piglet.
Wayne: Well, a cute piglet. Hehe.
Michael: WHO DARES SUMMON ME?
Oh, itās just the leapling.
I thought someone was going to brag about how she got a higher score in our quiz againnn.
@ Wayne Duuuude, donāt be like my parents.
Go ask them if you still canāt decide what job you want. Maybe theyāll help you decide something for you that you donāt actually want.
Roselyna: @JM you dont wanna be a doctor and help people?
Michael: I can help people in other ways. No way Iād want to spend my whole life around sick people.
Wayne: I doubt your parents would like me anyway.
Michael: Ohhh I can imagine.
āWayne is such a bad influence, JM!ā
āHeās not even at the Top 5! How can you be friends with him?ā
Wayne: Not in front of @Roselyna!
Youāre making me look bad.
She already thinks all boys that arenāt you are stupid.
Iām silly and weird, not a bad influence. I think.
Roselyna: its ok wayne, JM can be stupid too sometimes heehee
just not as much as you
Michael: Not sure if I should be proud of that.
Lily: @Roselyna Finally something we can agree on XD
Michael: For the nth time Lily!
Youāre not really going to let me forget this. are you?
Lily: Iām not bragging. Iām the secretary. itās my job to keep tally.
Michael: Keep tally of everyoneās activities, more like.
Lily: Shh delete that!
Your parents knows your password, right?
*know
Michael: Oh yeahhh, gotta keep the detectiveās work secret
Lily: seriously
Michael: Fine, just stop rubbing it in my face.
Lily: That I got 5 more points than our class president?
Whoās also the Top 1 in our class?
Michael: Sige langgg (Sure, keep doing that)
Underdogs always win anyway.
Lily: Youāre the underdog now?
Wayne: Uy, hey @Thing_One/Two!
ā¦
Any feedback is appreciated!
Is the flow much better now? I tried introducing W&R first, then Lily, then Michael, instead of all of them talking at the start.
As for the choices, there will be a choice focusing on you talking to each one of them, so hopefully their personalities will be much clearer.
Thatās all for now!
I feel like Lily was a bit overshadowed in that but itās much better in my opinion =)
Yup, I thought so too, although sheāll be more active in the following conversation.
Thanks for the feedback! I had fun writing it.
Hiiii! The story is no longer in hiatus.
Iām still busy for the next week or so, but the worst of it is finally over. I just hope I did well enough.
Anyway, Iām starting to write again, but I think Iām going to change how I do the notification messages.
I donāt really know if itās worth the effort of writing additional lines each time a stat changes, so now Iām leaning towards using more generic descriptions for the notifications instead, since itās sooo hard to think of them. Plus itās less vague and I can automate it to some extent using *gosub.
By āgeneric notificationsā, I mean stuff like āI feel sillierā or āI feel a little closer with my twinā, rather than context-specific messages. And I think it feels more fitting anyway since the locket makes you feel them. Youāre not actively thinking about it most of the time.
Iāll still have to write lines when a choice changes more than two stats or relationships at a time though, or whenever I think of something appropriate, so itāll be a nice middle ground.
Also, Iām still figuring out what counts as āimportantā notification, or whether I should place a notification at all whenever something in the narrative has changed as a result of stats/certain traits. I should probably include stat increases as important though, even if theyāre a minor +1 increase.
Welcome back!
Your changes will be fine I am sure of it, best of luck and that I am looking forward to see more of it
Popping in to give you thumbs up for the story I like how you captured the childlike thinking combined spiced with gentle humour. The first few screens (is that what they are called) are a nice touch and definitely felt like I was experiencing them along with the MC. Iāll have to take a peak at your code, to see how you managed that.
When writing about Auto-boys, is the
They canāt even transform.
intentional?
Gained SIlver Spoon Trait
*Silver
And then there this part
I grew up in my aunt and uncleās mansion, and as a result I find being independent a little hard. Not that I mind. It means I get to study in a private school and have lots of allowance. Being rich also makes me more charming, I guess.
written in italics and it confused me for a moment, since you used italics before for when MC was writing a story. Would it possible to change this somehow?
Iāll be back with more
Thanks! Iām glad you liked the writing very much. Iām really busy right now, but I thought Iād drop here really quick.
Oh, and what part of the beginning did you want to know? Iāll be happy to explain.
I honestly donāt even remember what my thought process was there. I think Iāll leave that for now since Iām planning on rewriting the prologue anyway.
Hmm, maybe I should enclose this with parentheses? Itās part of the notifications. All stat notifications are displayed in italics, but I enclosed them in parentheses in the writing part to avoid confusion with the narrative.
And by the way, thanks to @kirakana I have now decided to rename the story intoā¦
Mommy, We Created a Plot Hole!
I still like The Inter-Literary Adventurers, so it will still be included in the story as a possible group name. (I know, Iām terribly indecisive.)
Thereāll be no polls this time, but I thought Iād mention it first before I update the thread title. So do tell me if you have any comments, opinions, or violent reactions
What a wonderful title you got there
Found this:
On rewriting the prologue - is there any specific feedback that could help you with the revision?
Mostly, I want to know how to change the screen to black & how to insert the symbols you used in the Stats tab. Iām sure I could probably find tutorials on this somewhere on the forum, but I find it easier to learn, while sifting through someone elseās work. I did notice you asked people not to look at your code due to spoilers and I respect that, so no code digging for me
In-short: I just hope to learn more about how to add visual and text effects (text styling).
Oh, Iām already aware of that, but thanks for reporting! Itās actually empty, so youāre not really missing out on anything.
Mostly just general feedback and any suggestions for choices that you felt like you wanted to do. Iām happy enough to get any kind of feedback.
This is the code for changing the background color:
*script changeBackgroundColor("sepia")
*script changeBackgroundColor("black")
I donāt think *script is officially supported by CoG, but I just thought it would look cool. Oh, and I just copy pasted those symbols. Nothing fancy. It was just a lot of testing if the symbols looked nice.
That said, no oneās really going to stop you if you want to peek at the code, itās just really messy right now Iād be happy to take a look at your WIP too, but Iām still busy right now.
I just started on this, but I must say that this is quite good!
Thatās an amazing title.
Yay! Iām free! Time to sleep for the whole day I can finally continue writing for about a month or so before I get busy again.
And to anyone who missed it: Yup! I just changed the title. Again. Sorry for any confusion.
Iāve made a tiny update on the demo to change the title. I might have caused a plot hole in the process because I copied my files from another computer, but I think I fixed most of it.
I also changed some achievement information since I wanted to ask while you guys wait for the update: Which of the achievements are you most interested in? Do you have any questions about the quests and achievements?
Iām going to plot the rest of the story once Iām done with the update, so until then, the list isnāt final. Iāll certainly add some more achievements for completing sidequests and maybe consolidate some of them since thereāll probably be too many.
@alphasquid Thanks! Iām glad you enjoyed it.
iām mostly interested on the parentās subplot so iām curious on what really happened to them.
i donāt know why but i find the āThereās a āForeverāā's title to be hilarious; probably because of that saying we have.
Man if there is something I never wouldāve thought of seeing in this forums it is a game that takes place in the Philippines! Kamusta aking kababayan?
So yeah, feeling giddy due to seeing a fellow Filipino aside, this is honestly by far probably going to be my most fave game here at least gameplay based. It is so ambitious how much you made this feel so much like an RPG while simultaneously making it make sense in the context of the story! I guess my only criticism in the way it was coded was just that the stat menu sometimes lags a lot whenever I open it though maybe its just my device? I dunno.
The story has tons of potential! I love how costumizable it is and it does make me feel like these choices are my own and the way I am plying this now is very possibly different from the way others are playing it! Once again though it wasnāt without flaws and my only gripe honestly is that some of the dialogue ends up feeling cheesy for me but thats just my subjective taste talking. Other than that, I would love to see you possibly expand on the other genres your MC is writing since I ended up enjoying the Fantasy story more because of how costumizable it is, maybe do something like in the Sci Fi settings where you open up with more lore about say your fave robot or something? Because I felt like the Sci Fi and Mystery kinda suffered the most out of this to be honest. I guess I was just looking for more out of those Stories but if that was all you were planning anyways then it is fine.
Its cool to see a felllow countryman trying to make something out of Choice Script. I was honestly surprised when Tagalog was mentioned and I nearly flipped. Man Filipinos are everywhere in the internet, Iām not even surprised anymore haha.
Heehee. Itās also nice to see other Filipinos around here.
Heh, itās probably your connection. That also happens to me a lot. Does it load faster the next time you open it?
Ooh, what parts exactly, if you donāt mind? Iām doing an editing pass of what Iāve written right now, so that would be helpful!
Yup, Iām aware that the stories arenāt written equally (including the stats). I plan to address this in a further update but this is going to take a lot of planning so Iām holding off on doing it for now.
Thanks for the feedback! Iām glad you liked it. Whoās your favorite character so far?
@Abe Hehe. Do you have any wild guesses about what happened to them? Iām going to be littering the story with clues so keep an eye out for them! Itās probably easy to guess now that I changed the title, butā¦
thats really good and so much Awwwwwww
Take mah money! and give me MOAR! ;0)