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This is a very strong start so far, @Samuel_H_Young! 
I’m only a bit through Chapter 1 at this point but I’m already intrigued by the writing style and premise (that line about watching your sister drown = 
). I am wondering if you’ll be killing multiple mothers throughout the game, hence the “mass” and the “serial” bits? Also, I did notice this when playing as a female who only wants sex in life (no judging!):
It feels a little strange for a woman to crave the wet and heat of being inside someone else, but hey, maybe I’ve been missing something in life…
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seems like the female MC know some VERY interesting spell XD
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I mean… half-goblins… 
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Whoops, I forgot to add some *if statements to that choice. I’ll do that later tonight.
I’m glad you’re enjoying the story. If you get a chance to read further on, some of your questions will be answered.
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Y’know, I just realized that most of your romancable female ros are pretty unconventional in terms of beauty! I think thats pretty neato and kinda rare to see in media.
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Thanks! I’m glad you appreciate that. For anyone interested, here are some basic descriptions of the females ROs I’ve currently written, so you can get an idea of what @BoisterousBumblebee is referring to . (There will be several more ROs in my various stories, but later on in each series.)
The Magician’s Burden:
Violet - 18 years old.
Mabelin - 29 years old. 
The Enchanter’s Misery:
Blihja - a specter that’s hundreds of years old. She has a tall, toned body and she’s hella curvy. Her skin is light purple, her hair is styled back in spikes, and she would have a pretty face, if not for the fact that her mouth is sewn back to make her have a permanent evil grin and her eyelids are sewn back to keep her eyes open in a scary expression at all times.
Zendi - An 18 year old woman with light brown skin. She is thin and styles her hair in pigtails.
Envy - A 21 year old woman with pale skin and dirty blonde hair. She has a thin but toned body, piercing blue eyes, and is missing a front tooth.
Mass Mother Murderer:
Abella: a 27 year old woman with pale skin, lots of freckles, and bushy, vibrant red hair. She is tall and has a lean but toned build.
Cherihl: An 18 year old half-goblin. She has light green skin, and her nails and teeth are sharper than regular humans. She is short and muscular.
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I understand we’re playing someone who is mentally disturbed or what have you, but for me personally, I think it would be interesting to have someone that you are in some way able to feel some level of positive feeling for. Kind of like how Dexter Morgan has positive emotion for Debra Morgan if that makes sense?
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The MC can still feel sexual attraction towards an RO, and they can still find an RO interesting, so I suppose those things count as positive.
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Dexter is clearly less psychopathic than the MC.
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I haven’t watched Dexter, but since he seems to mostly target killers and since he apparently cares about someone, it sounds like he’s a sociopath.
Also, I really need to watch Dexter.
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Dexter would actually qualify as a schizoid personality type in terms of the show. In later seasons, he has vivid hallucinations of his adoptive father who basically encourages him to kill and stay out of trouble. Harry is always right in the show, but he’s also a guy who told Dexter to drive an axe into someone’s neck.
The books of Dexter can’t even be compared to his personality type on the show. He has much stronger classical psychopath traits in the book series. Part of it is also because, he’s possessed by a demon with insatiable bloodlust. And no. I’m not making that up.
I did like the books a fair bit better than the show though. In fact, those books are some of where I had the original inspiration for my oldest WIP.
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This brings up an interesting thought: will we ever encounter another serial killer in this book? Obviously you shouldn’t pack it chalk full of psychopathic characters, but I think it’d be cool if we ran into another person with a beast inside.
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Would be funny if the game end on a cliffhanger where you’re finaly going to go kill your mother…only to see her already dead in a weird modus operandi
and the sequel is basicaly tracking the fucker who stole your kill and putting all your crime on him before going back to social climbing
and since @Samuel_H_Young mentioned that the father would play a role in the sequel, he is the one who killed her or you recruit him for the case
yes i’m going way too far with my ramblings but it’s fun trying to predict where it will go
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My mother just tried to commit suicide. I’m going to take a break from writing and the forum for a while.
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@Samuel_H_Young Words cannot explain how shocked and sorry I am to hear that. I…I hope I don’t sound artificial right now…I just don’t know what to say.
Just please take to heart that I think I speak for everyone hear when I say that we hope everything sincerely goes okay, and she recovers. Your privacy will be respected, and please take as much time as you need. We’re here for you, not just your work.
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I prefer to not say anything on that developement, i just don’t feel it’s my place to do so
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Take all the time you need.
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@Shawnheatherly and @anon89206566
Thank you for your support. I’m still fucked up over it but I visited my mom in the hospital today and she’s doing better. She’ll be in the hospital for a few more days but things seem okay-ish for now.
I was so pissed about what happened that I bowled 13 games in a row until my thumb got all cut up and bloody.
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I hope she makes a smooth recovery and wish you and your family all the best.
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