The Dweller plotline is getting more and more intriguing! The Dweller/mysticism bits of narrative are some of my favorites – they’re wonderfully visceral and descriptive, especially mystically investigating the rats/lichen in Chapter 8.
I’m definitely more comfortable with the way the first Ioco scene plays out now, and I’m looking forward to seeing if/how it changes in the future.
Ch 9 – Subject-verb disagreement for nonbinary protagonist:
“I believe they is telling you the truth,” they say. “The doctor here is quite devoted to their work.”
Ch 9 – Missing "s:
“Especially as the first infected person we encountered turned out to have been one of our underground travelers,” you add. "Eustace may have been a tanner, but I’m convinced he caught the plague elsewhere.
Ioco scratches his bearded chin beneath his mask. “Granted, that’s something resembling a pattern,” he says.
“Your bravery could save this town,” you tell the animals, without words. "And if it does, I’ll be sure to share your tale.