Lost in your eyes (WIP) [Feb 06 2025 Update] [3 Ch, 260K words] [Vampires/Romance/Modern Dark Fantasy]

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@Depends, most people don’t care about the level of choices that you have but rather the quality of the story and the writing.

That I agree with, but I’m trying to juggle both of them. I’m trying to make it so that almost all options you choose will affect the character in some way. Even choosing not to sit with different people in the 1st chapter will save you from something in another choice. The quality of my writing for now isn’t as great as I want it to be, but I am slowly learning and progressing haha, It really warms my heart that you’re putting your faith in me! I’ll do my best not to let you down! :heart:

@QShiina: Is it just me or did something happen with the saves? It says there are some plugin errors (bad slot)…

Sorry about that, I was fixing up some typos! Should be fixed now! :heart:

@M_K1 Same, but i would never had the guts to write whole story in english. Good luck!

Haha, thanks! It’s more like a leap of faith and trying to follow a dream that I’ve had since childhood XD

Thanks so much for the support you guys! :love_you_gesture: :heart:

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Yeah if I’m gonna be honest most COG titles are meh and the HG titles are either bangers or weak and all the interesting stories I’ve read are WIPs so its hard to find a good title haha

This one feels more anime like so I definitely like it and I can’t wait to see the end result.

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Genders keep switching for practically everyone.

Also, are there stats and checks for some of the choices? Or are the outcomes always the same?

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@9GAG This one feels more anime like so I definitely like it and I can’t wait to see the end result.

Lol, thanks! It took me some time to come up with the title for my book, but I wanted to avoid anything that felt too cliche. The title “Lost in your eyes” has a deeper meaning than just admiring someone’s physical appearance. It represents the struggle of an individual (The player) who has been hurt by life so many times that they’ve lost their sense of self. They are looking for someone to mend their broken heart and body and help them find their way again.

And when they do (through intensive physical training and taking up the most dangerous missions), they lose themselves in the other’s person’s gaze all over again, hoping that this person will be the one to heal them. In this way, the phrase ‘Lost in your eyes’ symbolizes the characters’ desire to find themselves through each other(s) and the message that it’s okay to be lost in your lover’s presence. (Hope that made sense :sweat_smile:)

@GhostofGrief Genders keep switching for practically everyone.

Also, are there stats and checks for some of the choices? Or are the outcomes always the same?

The gender thing has been a recurring issue that I’m having a bit of trouble fixing, but I’m hoping that the next month’s update will solve all of them! If you do encounter them, please take a picture and send them my way so I can solve it much more quickly! :heart:

As for the stats and checks, There will be failures in the books, but it’ll be less of a stat check and more of what choices that you chose. Though there are fails in the stat check, and I am already considering adding “Strength” “Defence” and “Agility” factors that will be in the 3rd, 4th and 5th chapters. There’s already a fail in the third chapter if you try and recruit the guard, and unless you have an 80% or one of the two achievements, you will fail which will show what happens when the pendant takes over the character’s body to ensure no harm comes over it’s wearer.

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It’s Monday, which means it’s time for an update! I’m excited to announce that I’m writing this update on my brand new laptop with a super wide screen - it’s pretty cool! As some of you may already know from my Instagram, Tumblr, or Discord, my old laptop crashed just a few days ago, but thanks to my savings, I was able to purchase this new one. Now, let’s get to the updates!

This week and the coming week will be focused on completing the Patreon short book. I’ve written around 7,000 words and the book is now at 18,000 words! There are only two scenes left to write, so I’m hoping to finish it next week, polish it up, and then make it public the following week. I don’t want to take too long on it!

In other news, we’ve crossed 100 comments in the forum - a huge thanks to @9GAG and @M_K1 for showing so much interest in the book. The more comments people post, the more chances there are of winning! I usually use a dice roll and assign each user’s name to a specific number, so whoever the dice falls on, I’ll pick them out.

Lots of typos were fixed for the book along with 2-3 misgendered pronouns that I was able to find, please do send any errors that you find my way >.<

That’s all for now! I’m happy to report that I was able to retrieve my data from my old laptop, so everything is good to go. See you all next Monday! :heart:

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I definitely like the fact it’s more of choices wip instead of a stat check. While I don’t really have anything against stat checks , it just takes away some of story element which would ruin the game for player since some paths will feel forced.

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What am I winning lol. I just knew there was some kind of lottery involved haha

Yeah some stat checks is fine as long it has a story impact. FH did this well as your choices actually do matter in regards to your secret identity or winning and losing fights against other main characters.

However most games don’t do this properly and it ends up being “will you win or lose this fight against this random bad guy who doesn’t matter”

What I like to say is that IF games are novels at heart, story and characters come first instead of stats or numbers or choices that no one really cares about.

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Thank you, that’s so nice.

So that’s why the MC is always detached from everyone even when i choosed the most emotional choices. That makes me suspicious about the headmaster even more. He has a school full of emotionaly broken kids and he doesn’t do anything to help them. On the other hand, it makes sense that he is sending them on dangerous missions, since they don’t have anyone who would worry about them. I think i just found our villain, guys. :smile:

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@Christopher_Bull I definitely like the fact it’s more of choices wip instead of a stat check. While I don’t really have anything against stat checks , it just takes away some of story element which would ruin the game for player since some paths will feel forced.

I agree with that! Though, I am planning to add stats where you train yourself such as whether or not if you’re agile or strong etc, but that’ll come in later since I do want aspects like these to play a MAJOR role. The main reason that I’m adding this is that the MC isn’t a killing machine and has their own flaws.

@9GAG What am I winning lol. I just knew there was some kind of lottery involved haha

Oh, it’s a Patreon story, I didn’t want people who can’t support me financially to miss out so I’m trying my best to give people who can’t, a chance lol, It might come close to 25K words, and will showcase a character that I may or may not introduce later in the story. It’ll also show what happens when the MC is on the ropes and what was Marcus/Melissa like when they first met. (I’ll add a gore warning because the pendant takes over the body like in the third chapter, and once it does, the MC gets extremely sadistic.)

“will you win or lose this fight against this random bad guy who doesn’t matter”

I agree with this SO much! It’s why, even if you lose a stat check, you’ll get humiliated sure, but the pendant takes over, and you get a very gruesome scene like in the third chapter of the scene, close to the end. If you fail the stat check and don’t have the necessary stats, the pendant takes over and the MC turns extremely violent which increases their self-hate stat. (This is because of the quote “People generally don’t suffer high rates of PTSD after natural disasters. Instead, people suffer from PTSD after moral atrocities." From Davis Brooks

Haha, well, the Headmaster does save the kids from the Church’s influence, because if not for him, they’d get enslaved. He gives people a place of shelter, and does his best to cater for them, feed them and give them a sense of purpose. More on this will be covered in the third chapter which will explain Vigil’s backstory and show who he really is :sweat_smile:

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Could u add an option to the game where the mc just wants to be friends with the ro’s instead of flirting to be nice to them. I was upset with what happened with our new partner to replace our Blaine. I just wanted to be friends with them but all the nice choices were romance choices. I liked the character but not in that way

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Oh, do you mean the ones I’ve marked as hearts? They aren’t romanceable options, they just increase the relationship stat. I’m thinking of adding another option which will increase the friendship bar instead of the romance bar, but that’d limit the choices because, unless you have a specific amount of relationship stat, you won’t get approached/approach others.

Blaine is an exception to this, however, because they’ll always have a crush on the MC to the point that it’ll become a bit unhealthy if you refuse them. And even when you do accept them, they’ll get jealous if you spend time with other characters, which will lead to some conflict.

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Thanks. I felt bad about Mel especially how she opened up like that even through the mc wanted friendship

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Forgot to quote this, my bad :sweat_smile: But yeah, however if you do choose emotional choices, you’ll heal from losing everyone faster. You will suffer now and then form the flash backs, but it’ll be better than pushing everyone away.

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I can’t wait for Alex to be back :sob:

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Haha, It seems that every one wants Alex back XD Don’t worry though! The hunk’s going to be back in chapter 4 (Or end of 3rd) ^-^

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Update day! Let’s start with why people can’t access the tumbler link, and the reason to that is, well, I don’t know why but

My tumbler account got terminated.

Did I post anything NSFW? Nope, Was it hate speech? I’m not that kind of person ;-; I don’t exactly know the details but I tried to log into it and it said that my account was terminated for some reason. I messaged them so hopefully I’ll be able to recover it. Anywho, I don’t know if that counts for an update but hey, thought I should let you guys know ya know.

The short book is now at 24,500 words! With only 25,500 words of coding! With almost 6 achievements that you can earn and also 2 endings! I’m going to make sure this week is spent polishing the short book, make sure it’s the best for the patreons because they do deserve it. After that’s done, I’ll double down on the main book until the end of the month. After that, for 10 or so days, I’ll work on my other book as well.

That’s pretty much it lol, feeling a bit under the weather so I want to spend more energy to the synopsis of both the short books in the “Stories in Patreon” section which you’ll hopefully see in a few hours lol. see you guys next week!

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Not keen on the ROs. Only looked at the male ones. One appears to be an androgynous young boy. The other an androgynous young teen. Nothing wrong with androgyny but it’s not everyone’s cup of tea, when it comes to attraction. At least one traditionally masculine choice would be nice, even if you want to keep them young. Secondly, they’re WORRYINGLY young. Especially the first one. I’d suggest making them more obviously mud to late teens, if you want them to be young. The first one sounds as if he hasn’t even started puberty yet. As most of your readers will be 18+ you really need to consider changing this. Otherwise it’s going to come across as a paedophile fantasy…

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Yup Tumblr is like that, it went downhill the moment they took down all NSFW content. I think only Discord is left that is decent.

Bro this is a high school story so yeah the characters are young. Ever heard of Harry Potter? maybe some teen drama shows like Riverdale or 13 Reasons Why?

What about anime or manhwas which are predominantly set in high school where all the main characters are 16-17?

Also not all of us are from America so we don’t have that issue where everyone’s gotta be 18, that is an American thing exclusively. Also this story isn’t an erotic one but a fantasy action romance which is anime inspired.

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Oh, Marcus is in his early 20s,he has a baby face but in no means is he like young young, just inexperienced, like an extremely over protected son who doesn’t exactly know what to do when they’re put in the real world. All Vigil taught him is how to fight and how to complete a mission, not interact with people, and how to display yourself in public. There is a reason why he looks so young (no it’s not just “well, he is a vampire” but something deeper)

I asked my artist not to make Vale as androgenic as Marcus but I couldn’t complain when the art came out lol he is chaotic, yet loving and friendly. As for a traditionally male, yes, that’s Alex, he’ll be introduced in the end of the third chapter. I’m trying to make it so that each character gets their own chapter do you can set a base relation ship with them, and the chapters after those would be like a terbulance where your relationship, whether it be friends or something more, be tested.

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I,ve never been into anime and I’m not American. :slight_smile: The reference to 18+ had nothing to do with any age of consent, rather it was pointing out that most potential readers will be legal adults. If it’s aimed at kids, that’s fine, though it should possibly be made more obvious. Most adults wouldn’t want to romance underage kids, even in a non-sexual way, even in a work of fiction. :slight_smile:

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