The save system in dashingdon isn’t working and moody isn’t opening at all.
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The save system won’t be working in Moody unfortunately due to programming errors, However I just fixed the saving system in the Dashingdon, You should be able to check it out now! Thanks for the telling <3
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Noticed how I got this: “Well… My parents never knew this but I Identify as a Male. So, My pronouns are he/his.” despite having set my MC to have the same gender and pronouns and they had biologically, so this feels out of place, this is at the job board in the first chapter I believe
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Moodys save system requires login and it works i was meaning when i click the demo there it just showed error. It’s working now.
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I’m mid way through reading it and it has such an interesting sci-fi fantasy and Supernatural romance concept that I’ll just get hooked on this and make it my life mission to bag alex (one of the characters) up by the end of it.
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Reply to @Basket_of_Snake
Sorry about that! Should be fixed! There should be fewer choices now. I should reword the choices in the future
Reply to @Fenrir1
Huh, that’s weird, I kind of couldn’t find the thing that allowed the saved system to go through and the error I was getting was the “SM_int error” which is what I got in ChoiceScriptIDE, but that’s good that it’s working now!
Reply to @Hoely
Haha, Thanks! It seems that Alex is becoming a favorite of almost every one! I’m glad that you gave the book a read and I really appreciate the comment <3
Monday! Which means Update time! So this week has been the most productive out of the last two. Almost 3K words were written and an arts that sheds a little light on M’s past but it’ll leave you with more questions then answers. Will M trust you enough to reveal their true identity, or will they keep their secrets under lock and key? There will a poll here right after my exam finishes about another short story, So stay tuned! (Ofc that poll will be early on Patreon and will have more weightage)
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Before I try this out, are there any male LIs that aren’t feminine? Or is Marcus it?
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Well, V isn’t very feminine, unless you choose them as a female RO, and Alex will be introduced in 4th chapter who wouldn’t be feminine. There may be chances of a 4th potential RO but it depends.
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Thanks for the info, I appreciate it! I was looking for male ROs, specifically, for my MC. I’ll wait and maybe check out Alex, once there’s some info out about him.
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This WIP does thing to a man.
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reply to @EvilChani
Thanks for checking out the book! Loved your responses in other topics btw! I learnt a lot from what I should do in the book and how I should do it. I know it isn’t perfect at the moment but I’ll do my best to make it perfect!
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Welp, Just gave my exam today and it was pretty A-Okay, Told you guys I would nail it hehe, Anyways, I got 4 more which is tomorrow and after tomorrow and then I’ll finally be free! Speaking of being Free, There will be a new Patreon story to reward you guys for your patience! Just like the previous version, there will be two lucky winners who will be chosen. In order to enter the lucky draw, just send a message or a review or anything really right after this update lol. Since every one in Patreon chose that I should choose what kind of story it should be, I have decided that it will be a prison/mission short story! While it won’t be as lengthy as the previous one, It will have it’s moments and be a little light hearted. Lots of world building and it’ll also show how the church has been keeping people in the dark! Not a lot of fluff this time unfortunately.
As for the update, no words were written this time, however a lot of grammatical errors were fixed all the way to the 2nd chapter. Massive thank you to @stsword and @leekyo1999 for helping me out with the book and making it better! You guys rock! See you guys next week!! <3
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It is MONDAYYYYY! Which means update time! Now, this week was a blast! I got skyrim yesterday and started to play at 1 am and didn’t even realize it being 10 am in the morning lmao. Got new glasses as well, which looks wonky on me but hey, eye sight is important people. Take care of them! But let’s not blabber about my personal life cause some of you might find that a bit weird lol. Any who! Let’s dive into what we accomplished!!
A massive 7K words were written! (I know I used to write like 1.5K words a day but come on guys, I didn’t write 1K-2K words per day for a month, I’m a bit out of practice
This number is expected to increase though!)
6k words added in main story and 1K was added in the short story, there will be a lot of disclaimers because it will contain themes of Sexual assault, Rape, and a lot of blood and gore. This will really be an NSFW story with me not holding back on how dark I can make it, Sorry if ya’ll don’t dig that but I did say this one may have little fluff heh
Previous saves won’t work because I’ve been trying to make the stats as low as I can. Astute has been replaced with “Rational”, two stats (vicious and Detached) were merged, Dominant and Submissive will only give you unique dialogues instead of changing the whole game play drastically (For example, If you’re a dominant and then choose a submissive, You’re going to get a unique dialogue now and then.) This is because I don’t want to make my game feel too much of a chore to play. I rather have it as a novel where you can earn achievements instead of just ending up dying cause you chose wrong things, This doesn’t mean you won’t get punished for choosing a charismatic route when you’re an intimating . (Imagine you got a scar, are 6’2 and above, and just have killer eyes and you walk up to someone and say
I don’t see you wooing any one with that. (On the other hand, If you’re dominant and get all shy next to someone who’s even more dominant cough cough Alex/Alice then it’ll make you more cuter :>
I am thinking of adding certain symbols for things such as 
for Intimidation (also !! ≠ ) and ↝ for for submissiveness etc. Might make a poll for it, (This idea was taken from @Phenrex. Give their book a read! It’s really great!) Until next time you guys! <3
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kathy my beloved
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Leah, My beloved
Ehem! Monday is an update day! Or what ever Obama said. Anyways, this week has been filled with questions about how I’ll proceed with this book and how I’ll present it to you guys, the public. It’s my first time writing a massive novel, so I’m learning a lot from it. However, I’ve realized that the book isn’t quite ready for weekly releases, and instead, I’ll be updating Patreon weekly and releasing a monthly update for the book here!
The reason for this is simple: I’ve read Chapter 1 hundreds of times and it’s still not perfect (at least not in my eyes). I haven’t even touched Chapter 2.5 except to cringe at a few bits and pieces and change it so it looks at least semi-presentable. My original plan was to give you all with a main draft and then fix any grammatical mistakes on the 4th chapter once all characters were introduced. But after seeing your positive reaction to Chapter 1, I felt guilty about making you all suffer through a trash draft. Why shouldn’t you enjoy my work to the fullest extent possible?
So, I’ve decided to take some extra time to perfect the book before releasing it. I’ll keep you all updated on my progress each week, but the final product will be released at the end of each month (with weekly updates for Patreon’s link). So without further ado, Let’s get to this weeks accomplishments!
A total of 7K were written! (I know, same as before, I’m trying to increase the daily words written
Since I did say that I was trying to make the book better, about 2K words were mostly me writing more and making the sentence structure better. However It won’t be that case, I’m still trying to set a goal for myself that I have to reach chapter 4 as fast as possible.
A fan of mine made a few fan arts btw!! I never thought I’d be lucky enough to have someone do that lol, and she also made a few emojis which you can find in my server! You guys can follow her on instagram on https://www.instagram.com/cinnamon_snapdragon/
That’s all folks! See you on the 1st!
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Before I read WIPS, I have the habit of looking through the code first (I know, I’m a creep, sue me!). I’ve found a few issues that might have been hard to detect in an actual playthrough. It’s ok if you don’t want to focus on fixing them right away, but keep them in mind when moving forward as some of them might spiral out of control and become harder to fix as you write your story. I’ll post them now and give you feedback on the actual story once I finish the demo.
Ro Stats
For your three RO’s you have similar structures for describing the MC’s relationship with them
*if RO_Hayes = True
*set Relationship_Hayes 100
$!{Hname} sees you as $!{Hhis} mate.
*stat_chart
percent Relationship_Hayes Relationship with $!
*goto Continue5
*elseif Relationship_Hayes > 75
$!{Hname} would give their life for you.
*stat_chart
percent Relationship_Hayes Relationship with $!
*goto Continue5
*elseif Relationship_Hayes > 65
$!{Hname} looks forward to spending time with you.
*stat_chart
text Relationship_Hayes
percent Relationship_Hayes
*goto Continue5
*elseif Relationship_Hayes >= 50
$!{Hname} adores you and sees you as a good friend
*stat_chart
percent Relationship_Hayes Relationship with $!{Hname}.
*goto Continue5
*elseif Relationship_Hayes > 45
$!{Hname} enjoys you but at a distance
*stat_chart
percent Relationship_Hayes Relationship with $!
*goto Continue5
*elseif Relationship_Hayes < 35
$!{Hname} still cares for you but wishes that you wouldn't be an annoying idiot.
*stat_chart
percent Relationship_Hayes Relationship with $!
*goto Continue5
*if RO_Hayes = True
*set Relationship_Hayes 100
$!{Hname} sees you as $!{Hhis} mate.
*stat_chart
percent Relationship_Hayes Relationship with $!
*goto Continue5
^This means that every time you go to the stat screen, your relationship with that character will always be reset to 100 no matter what interactions you previously had with them. Is that what you want? If you want to set it 100 when they become the MC’s RO, then I suggest you set the relationship to 100 when you set the Relationship_Hayes variable to true, and not in the stat screen.
*elseif Relationship_Hayes > 45
$!{Hname} enjoys you but at a distance
*stat_chart
percent Relationship_Hayes Relationship with $!
*goto Continue5
*elseif Relationship_Hayes < 35
$!{Hname} still cares for you but wishes that you wouldn't be an annoying idiot.
*stat_chart
percent Relationship_Hayes Relationship with $!
*goto Continue5
^ If the relationship value is between 35 and 45 (including), the player won’t see any text related to their relationship with the character. To cover all the cases, you can change the if to something like this:
*elseif Relationship_Hayes > 45
...
*elseif Relationship_Hayes > 35
// 36 - 45
...
*else
// for relationship 35 and below
....
These issues repeat for the other two ROs
They/Them pronoun grammar support
To properly support they/them pronouns, you also have to take into account how verbs change their forms. There are some verbs that end in “s” and others in “es” for “he/she”, but not for “they/them”. Ex: he see(s) / they see ; she blush(es) / they blush. It gets more complicated with is/are and was/were.
You already have a few of these kinds of problems in chapter 1:
that ${pc_she} was → that she was (ok) → that they was (not ok, should be were).
"$!{pc_she} is → She is (ok) → They is (not ok, should be are).
You can search your scenes for the they/them pronoun variables to hunt all of them down. In order to fix this issue, you will have to add variables for the proper verb conjugation and use them where needed (you’ll need a variable for “s”, “es”, “is/are”, “was/were”). There can be more, but that’s what comes to mind right now.
You have a different setup (declaring pronouns for every character vs using an array), but you can use the variables from my story as a checklist. I wouldn’t recommend using my approach now since you are hosting your game on dashingdon as well and it does not support the *create_array command.
*comment pronoun arrays
*create_array he 3 "he" "she" "they"
*create_array him 3 "him" "her" "them"
*create_array his 3 "his" "her" "their"
*create_array hiss 3 "his" "hers" "theirs"
*create_array himself 3 "himself" "herself" "themself"
*comment This is for the 's' on the ends of verbs, as in "they walk"/"she walks".
*create_array s 3 "s" "s" ""
*comment This is for the 'es' on the ends of verbs, as in "they march"/"she marches".
*create_array es 3 "es" "es" ""
*comment These two are for contractions. Note that all versions of them have an apostrophe: "they're"/"she's".
*create_array re 3 "s" "s" "re"
*create_array ve 3 "s" "s" "ve"
*comment This variable can be used in case there are any irregular verbs, as in "they are" / "she is".
*create_array them 3 false false true
*create_array boy 3 "boy" "girl" "child"
*create_array man 3 "man" "woman" "person"
*create_array men 3 "men" "women" "persons"
*create_array title 3 "Mr." "Mrs." "M*"
*create_array pretty 3 "handsome" "pretty" "handsome"
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I don’t know why looking at code first makes you a creep lol (Or it might just be me, I dunno) But thanks a lot for the advice! I usually was scared of touching the arrays because it’s really hard to implement(at least for me) and after staring at it for a few minutes, I still don’t exactly know how to use it. Plus as you’ve said, Dashingdon doesn’t support it either so I’m going to have to hunt them down and try and do it all manually which requires a bit more effort.
As for the RO stats, Those are fixed! I checked them out and thankfully they work as intended! For now they won’t always stay on 100 since I don’t want to make the characters to just start simping for the MC once you accept them as a romanceable partner. Instead the stats will go up and down and so will the reactions. It’ll be a bit of a work but hopefully it’ll pay off haha, Thanks again btw Quarts!
P.S You’re an amazing writer annnddd if you’d like to impart some advice for how I could improve my own writing, I’d love to hear it 
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To be perfectly honest I had just assumed the RO name disappearing from the list was just an indicator the route was closed off for the time since I first noticed it when I decided to say I was just friends with Hayes. Which did get jossed after sufficient testing of Blaine knocked the score low enough (poor lad/lass). And I had also assumed Blaine’s relationship suddenly turning into 100% in the next chapter despite treating him/her as garbage (again, poor lad/lass) and refusal to date them was just because there wasn’t stuff ready for that combo so it just defaulted into best friends with more to be added later.
As an aside, if you go with the “I was in love with Hayes” option when asked and it moves your relationship up to 80% the text of the bar says “Relationship with $!” (or at least it does with Alice). Lastly if you go with the recap to chapter 2 part 2, you get asked if Michael told you about Blaine’s past but that start point starts with you deciding to go to lunch with Blaine or going to lunch alone where Michael will tell you about Blaine’s past so it is something your character cannot know by that point (unless you are able to get him to tell you at an earlier point and I haven’t found it yet?)