I loved the idea behind the whole story- traveling to a different dimension/into a book would be a dream come true!
So far, I’ve only completed Sashira’s story, College Daze, and The Mansion of D’Anjou, Dragons and Devices, and Danger of the Deep.
Here’s (what I hope is) high level feedback:
The transitions between the books were fine; I was able to understand that I had or had not successfully completed a book, and that finding macguffins helped me make progress with contacting Uncle Irwin.
Overall, the pacing of the game was just right, seeing as there are seven “books” to go through, and any shorter stories (Sashira’s mystery, for example) can be made up for by the slightly longer stories like Dragons and Devices.
I would’ve liked to see more choices in Dragons and Devices that mattered and influenced the plot. I felt like most times, I was only choosing what question to ask, what object to look at, or what thought I was thinking. An example would be when Lorenzo/Gianna and I arrive at the wastes, and one of the few choices I make there is whether to make an observation on the metal sticking up from the ground, the lights in the mountains, and one other thing I can’t remember. It’s not as if there were no choices that influenced the plot though. I completed the book successfully on my first try, so I didn’t get to any scenes where I would’ve been thrown out of the book (I’m sure there are some of those), and of course there’s the scene where you fight the lava golem. But when comparing the amount of text to the number of places where you make choices, the number of choices that really matter is a bit lacking.
I liked that The Danger of the Deep was evenly paced, starting out with a moving event and keeping the action going throughout. Sashira’s Story could be considered slow for those who don’t have the patience to collect clues, but as the sense of intrigue surrounding the mystery and the characters was maintained, I kept on through the story.
The pacing in College Daze is definitely fast. (explained below)
About the plot:…Yes, it is definitely interesting! I had one problem that almost deterred me from continuing to play, though. I started with Sashira’s Story and understood the general gist of how the game was to work. I would jump into a book, complete the plot, return to the real world with a prize or macguffin from doing so successfully, then hop into another book, rinse and repeat. The problem I had was when I jumped into College Daze. I’d just solved a mystery, and suddenly in the next book I’m in a college dorm in Australia with a crazy scientist roomate, junk and maggots in the fridge, dead kangaroos, and I find a dead body in the forest… Needless to say, my brain was exploding and I was reading with a sense of “what is happening…” But maybe the author’s intent was to suddenly drop you in a drastic new story. I was just extremely distressed that I had no sort of backstory or explanation to the plot…
Another point I noticed between the stories was that in some books you do realize that you’re in a book before sinking into your character, while in other stories, such as Dragons and Devices, you’re fully aware that you’re in a book and can even tell the main protagonist about it. It made sense for the MC to at first be confused about entering a book, and maybe after completing a book or two they’re used to it, but the circumstances where the MC was either confused, or not confused; or at first self aware of the situation and then simply becomes a character were inconsistent. I realize the MC’s reaction as you go along would be hard to code >.< those were just my thoughts.
About the characters:… Seeing as the “books” are relatively short, it was hard to really get to know any one character. Especially in The Mansion of D’Anjou and Sashira’s Story where the MC is on a mainly business relationship with the characters. That being said, it was a little hard for me to become attached to a character enough to consider them an RO.
Low level feedback:
I spotted typos scattered here and there, as well as sentences that were accidentally missing a word, and some inconsistent subject-verb agreement. I’m really sorry, I don’t know how to add screenshots to a post, but if I did I can certainly go back and find the specific spots for you!
(I apologize if my feedback is convoluted in any way >_< and aaaaaah for how long it turned out to be )
Honestly though, I should really go through the game and finish all the stories! I love the concept and the overall plot, especially that plot twist that Uncle Irwin is actually a character from a book . I can’t imagine how much work it was to put this together, and I’d like to say thank you for sharing this fantastic story!!