Lex Talionis: Exordium (Feedback) 2.0

Lex Talionis: Exordium is once again public and currently stands at five chapters (prologue, chapters 1 to 4) with a word count of 21 074, which excludes choice-specific scenes. I have additional chapters done, however, due to my studies in 2020 and personal matters of this year, updates will happen on a one to three week basis. I will keep Exordium public until I have made available all but the last three chapters then thereafter it will be made private again.

As before feedback is welcome and ideas, if well argued, will be taken into consideration.

Play here: https://dashingdon.com/go/7187

Lex Talionis draws inspiration from multiple sources, though most notably My Hero Academia and Teen Titans . The first entry ( Exordium ) into the multi-part series, follows a metahuman about to enroll at one of the world’s most prestigious hero universities, Herculean University. Though their motivations are far different than the usual ones that bring students to it, they see the university as a means to an end. One that will provide them with the skills and opportunity necessary to avenge the murder of their father that took place many years ago.

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Hiii I like your story’s

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Thank you.

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A thing is the part when you choose to study for the written exam the end for that part or no?

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Does the scene end there and not take you back to the main one?

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Yes demo ends there.It does not goes to main scene

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I’ll attend to it now. Try again in a few minutes.

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Story is really cool really enjoying it. Just noticed a couple of things while playing, during and after the exam/results names have switched over to a numerical value and that when going to speak with the individual that flirts with lynx before the combat exam it skips straight to chapter 4.

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Thanks for pointing that out. I will sort it out as soon as possible.

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The game doesn’t start for me, I get this.

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Try again. I think it was a once off issue.

Weird I tried it twice, but it works now Thanks :blush:

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I played the game, after deciding to reconcile with my two friends the game then sent me right back to meeting the Korean guy and then the game had a game ending error.

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I managed to remedy the issue. Once you reach the end of the chapter you’ll be taken to chapter 4.

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I recommend saving during the cafeteria scene in chapter 4. There’s an error that avoids the loop meant to take you back to a series of choices.

I will sort it out later, given that it’s 1:45 AM where I stay.

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I keep getting an error after the receiving the results of the tests or something

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That’s just the end of the demo I believe there isn’t a end card there at the moment.

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I hadn’t seen this before, but from what I’ve read I’m definitely interested now.

I like the premise, very reminiscent of my hero academia in parts, guessing that’s intentional.

Only one minor complaint, at the start where you pick the color(which doesn’t become apparent until later) your power has, there’s nothing telling me what exactly it is I’m choosing. It just says “you snap your fingers and…”(paraphrasing), basically had to just guess what it was.

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I added an end card, so you the issue will not come up again unless I forget to add it with the next update.

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I’m glad to hear that.

It is intentional, as I found the premise of My Hero Academia interesting and wanted to attempt something in the same vein with a more grounded and gritty atmosphere. Though I should admit that Teen Titans and Community College Hero were also inspirations.

Thanks for pointing that out, I will see what I can do.

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