Is there anyway I could make Duke Clarent King, and have him declare Melissa heir to the thrown? I honestly think Melissa would be a better ruler than Marxus or my MC
Uh no? They have no royal blood, so they are ineligible.
Someone likes Egyptian mythology
Is it possible to completely destroy the monarchy?
Perhaps @Sophia is a follower of the postmodern school of thought where there are no absolute truths? Maybe, all of these statements to her are all truths?
Or perhaps, the opposite is true? Maybe all of these are lies and we live in a world of fleeting illusions?
Maybe we follow a thread ruled by Madame Chaos and just take everything with a grain of salt?
(Though if you have fixed the dinner scene, kudos to you. I look forward to seeing the revision.)
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I haven’t thought of that, tbh. But that is an interesting ending and achievement for the story, so I might implement it in the future. 
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If this were to happen would it become a democracy, republic, or like 1400s Poland and nobles vote on next King
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Woohoo
Now everyone stand and say the pledge of allegiance to the Republic of Reinhardt
Or perhaps @IronRaptor has a mysterious head that has a million of brain cells, and that explains his geniusity? Or maybe he knows my spoilers? Or he has already seen my Notebook of Spoilers?
(I haven’t revised the dinner scene)
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This one seems the most accurate.
Any of these days I’ll have a heart attack on this thread
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Im not gonna lie, at first I thought this was an insult XD
It was a compliment. 
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Yeah I get that now…Im just stupid
Let’s see here. Your use of descriptive language has improved. Everything else is a nitpick.
First section - I want to rewrite this one.
The first you see is a beautiful young maiden. She appears to be your age, if not a year younger than you. Her womanly charms have bloomed and are displayed perfectly as you (I’m assuming we’re using 2nd person here) notice her long blonde hair that cascades over her lithe figure. Her lovely, blue eyes possess a darker than the usual tone which gives her a light atmosphere. Currently, she giggles at the women she’s with.
Try that out and see if it flows better for you.
Second section - Slight revision here. I would remove “around her” Then change the words “the beauty” with “This beauty.” English majors, should she replace “who she charms” with “whom she charms?” I’m pretty sure that the answer is yes but I’m kinda sick atm and not firing on all cylinders.
Third section - Not much to see here, so there isn’t really anything to change.
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Not an English major buuut…I’m pretty sure it is whom in that sentence.
Gawd I have a whole lot of reading to do. 1k plus later
It’s in my own reply that why I edit it
I don’t doubt that all three is true, but probably for next update. So it’s just really depends on which one you work on
What up with first lady?
The third one a bit lack of description, but that may just me
The other lady is a brunette, whose body is quite developed for her age.Her haxel eyes give off a mysterious air around her, and sparkles every smile she make.The beauty is surrounded by noblemen who she charms and seduces by her looks
sit atonished
Yu-Yuna…i-is that you?..
PD: jokes aside can we spend more time with the girls or only can be a one night stand?
Summary
ehh…take the walkie-talkie…ABORT MISSION ABORT MISSION…SHE FOUND US! RUN!
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Arigatou Gosaimasu, sensei. 
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One night stand, and they can be used to know the political situation of each duchy.
Cuz that’s Lady Richel.
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