Kingdoms: Embers In Ashes[WIP] [OLD VERSION]

So, enlightened by the same spirit that inspired some other users like @Nightgazer, I decided to make some writing of my own.

I don’t Know if my English is right this time or if this is kinda out of character, it is supposed to happen the night before Melissa’s wedding. Anyway, I proudly present to you:

Read The Corniest Fanfic Ever

The night is silent and Melissa is standing in the garden, just like you expected. You are thinking how to approach her when suddenly she speaks.

“What are you doing here?” She says, not even turning back.

“I thought you would like to talk… and I imagined I would find you here.”

“How did you know?”

“As a child, you always came here… every time something bad happened. You used to say that your problems and the rest of the world felt far away. Apparently, some things never change.”

“No… we… we have changed.” She finally faces you and you can see, her eyes are red and her hair is a mess, in her expression there is no a trace of the happy girl you saw not so long ago “Look at us, we both, once carefree children that lived outside an adult world that seemed so distant, are now in this situation… and to think that a few days ago I was hoping that would never have to change.”

“Melissa, you are too cruel…”

“I didn’t mean to upset you”

“Not with me, with yourself. You are going to be my brother’s wife, the queen. It’s an honor to know that your union will bring stability to the kingdom and eventually, a new heir to the throne.”

“Do you really believe in that?”

It is what you have been taught to believe, a marriage is meant to serve a purpose despite your personal preferences. But can you really look at Melissa at her eyes and tell her that your feelings don’t matter? She knows you too well to know when you are lying.

After a silence that lasts too long, Melissa approaches you and asks something else.

“Tell me, why does your brother have a scar on his eyebrow?”

“What do you mean? My brother is the Golden Lion, the one who has lead his men to so many victories. Scars are to be expected on a warrior like him.”

“A warrior… as such… How many kings before him lost their lives in the battlefield? How many of them saw their own hands covered by the blood of others?”

“You don’t like warriors…”

“I hate them… after all; the only boy I have ever loved was never very skilled with the blades.”
“Oh… Melissa… you are mocking me.”

“Maybe I am indeed too cruel…” You can’t help but laugh. She stares at you with a smile for a brief moment, and then suddenly her expression changes again “I’m going to miss these moments so much.”

“I should go, I came here to offer you comfort but my presence here is only making you feel worse.”

“Wait…” She grabs you by the arm “before you go… I… I…” She seems to have trouble finding what to say “tomorrow I will become consort of a man who I barely know and… and I don’t know if I will be able to come here again, and even if I do it would not be the same. So, have this, I want you to keep it.”

She shows you a flower, you have seen it before.

“You still have it, after so many years…”

“I wasn’t Eadizlove but magic was able to keep it alive.”

“No, I can’t accept it.”

“As a child, how many times were you so kind to me? And how many times I did not thank you for it? I don’t know what future awaits us, but I want you to have this, so every time you see it, you will remember that I will always be grateful to you for filling these years with such fond memories.”

“It’s funny, though.”

“What?”

“How I came here to offer you comfort, and you are the one that made me cry.”

THE END

God bless my boredom, I’m mostly doing this as an excuse to practise my writing and my art for a project of my own. If you have heard my opinions of fanfiction, you’ll know that I strongly believe that it helps to create better writers, however if @Sophia doesn’t wish that I post this here, I will delete it.

After this I think I’ll do a fanart of Chris/Kristin and that’s it, no more fanart.

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I like it very much. You are a great artist and a great writer - will be waiting for a game by @MockTurtle. :relaxed:

@Sophia won’t like it - bah she’s one of those who support fanfics and fan art.

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Ugh…I was on the team Sophia hype train but she seems so judgmental and rude to the Mc,who she knows nothing about except that they’re enemies. Every time she speaks I hear nothing except please end me Joffrey style. At least I have my darling Melissa for support even if she’s backstabbing me with growing affection for my annoying brother.

Also @MockTurtle the art and writing were really good hopefully we can see more of your wonderful fanart and fan fiction.

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Princess Sophia won’t be like that in the whole game.
On wedding night you can change her opinion about you :wink:

I totally forgot about the Eadizlove - I like how its symbolic of their early relationship.

By graveling on the floor and beg for her virtuous forgiveness? Because being nice to her isn’t enough to redeem such a vile “beastly” creature in her eyes.

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You won’t have to beg in front of her. Show some honour you are a prince.

Just play nice - both before going to the room and after entering it. :wink:

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Are we still talking about the same Princess Sophia? The one who caused a big scene during the wedding and who perceives the MC as a beast of some sort. Unless you planing on giving her a love potion, I honestly do not see how she can move from utter hatred for you to being civil in just one night.

I think that dagger now might be used more than for self defence… :smile:

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NO SPOILERS :wink: no one knows for sure but I know a hint when I see one.

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Last time I checked that was santa claus

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[quote=“DUNGEON_MASTER, post:1483, topic:27494”]
Last time I checked that was santa claus
[/quote] one too many ho’s to be santa

Santa was feeling generous that day :innocent:

@Sophia since you did not answer my question, i will consider it a yes for the lover … meaning i will stop reading this wip since it will not be something i will enjoy, wish you the best with your game :wink:

Hmmm…I had to reread the story. I noticed this:


“makes a laugh.”
I am never sure if something’s correct or not as English isn’t my native language, but still, that looks like a mistake. Even if there’s no grammatical error, it just looks wrong…
:smiley:
Correct me if I’m wrong.
Edit: “Javier laughs silently” feels a lot better, for me, at least.

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BANG!
Yes, with a Glock 17, because jeez, that woman is weird.
:smiley:

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Princess Sophia doesn’t have any lover.

you dont know that for sure, and @Sophia is avoiding the answer, so i take my 2 cents about it :wink:

@Sophia actually already give hint that who princess sophia care is can be pet and relative as well, so we don’t know for sure until we see them

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Dang smh. All I know he better not get her pregnant or hell going brake loose. He is going catch my MC hands👊

And with Sophia issue, my MC planning on just being civil to her, and let her know that when in public we have to play face, so people won’t turn on them, but behind doors she can bang who ever, while he tries to get Melissa, but they have to still to a certain degree “share” a room together. Until later, till my MC turns the kingdom.

@anon4518890 mate you know how many comments Sophia gets daily? She mighta just missed it. I know I made a comment to her once and she liked 3 days later.

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