The one I liked the most was lucifer effect just read the portion before Sunday arrests and you will feel be like oh my god what have I missed. There is nothing technical there only history and some facts that were sort of hidden and overlooked by people
I need assistance from @DUNGEON_MASTER. I’m in this scene.
MC: “Where is my father?”
I can’t describe a Queen Vicky’s surprised face. Can you help me?
Spoiler;
Ryan, your cuddles is the only antidote I have in this world. Leave me and you take the best part of me with you. Without you I’m not me anymore, I’m a broken shell of someone who could have loved you forever. So wrap me in your arms and never let go, keep me safe and warm. In return I’ll never let go of you, love you, defend you, keep you safe. If in all this cold universe, there are only you I can truly love, it is enough. You are the spark to my flame, the one who keeps me burning when logic decries my light should have been extinguished long ago.
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As she heard the words the colour drained out of her, with a look of sadness and anger she tried to speak but stopped as if her throat has been choked, her face dropped and she spoke “he isn’t here”
oh and read this
Oh sorry just fooling around.
Was she standing or sitting, was there some conversation going on. In short a bit more of the scene would be good
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It’s in the 5th birthday of the mc scene. She was standing.
“Where is my father?”
The sentence hits the queen hard as her eyes widen and the blood slowly drains from her face. She tries to take a couple of deep breaths as she slowly sits at her seat, leaning on the table for support. She blinks a couple times and carefully dons her regal mask. The queen thought to herself, “I cannot let anyone see weakness. Not even my son.”
The queen then smiled and said to her boy, “He had to leave and take care of our home. He sends his love to you on your birthday, dear.”
Her child nods and smiles, accepting her answer. Why would he not? Outside of Javier, the queen was his world. Still on the inside, a part of her died. “Oh, how I love and hate that man…”
Ok, went a bit overboard but hope that helps.
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“Where is father”
Mother’s smile faded and eyes betrayed sadness, she took a step back and said " he has some important meeting today so he will be attending late " she spoke convincing herself as much as me but it was not working but you still hope that father comes.
"Okay now anything else " she said regaining her composure.
Now I seriously think this is the worst thrash and please write this in your own words because that mother garden scene was screaming - the author didn’t wrote me
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Now feels insecure in her own writing style
Lol its not like king andus died
It bothers me that you can’t see your talent in writing.
You have a unique writing style and I think almost everyone loves that style of yours
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If my son, who cannot create an organic sentence, came over to me later today and asked me something like, “Where do babies come from?” I will have a stunned moment for a myriad of reasons. Kids can be hyper-perceptive and they have 0 filter. They can say stuff that will catch you off guard.
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No, no no no… no… no… 100x no. 
I think my style is hideous.
I just have observed lot of real life situations like the ones you ask help in .
But still that gesture or reaction Is very dramatic
I disagree. Your writing is clean and I enjoy reading it. 
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Thank you… But I still think my writing is inexperience.
It’s 4:48 AM. Give me some creative liscense! Besides, she wanted an example. It is not like I will see that bit in her book.
Rhetorical question: How old are you and how old am I?
I have had a while to practice. You have a good foundation, just write.
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