So have we had the obligatory 100 replies of “my mc is x and y” or have I missed it?
you know, Reading that got me laughing
Wait so there are people who don’t consider Sophia a massively annoying hypocrite?
Is it just the intrigue of melting a solid heart?
I’m not familiar with those. I suppose it has been missed for now since I used the 100th post mark to make a point regarding the teams.
Well it’s true. She’s an Ice Queen at the moment, and it should be worth it in the end for Sophia to actually be nice if the MC goes through the effort of being nice.
According to the poll that applies to the majority of individuals in the forum. It kind of depends on perspective. Hopefully she’s just being selfish at the moment and realizes later the MC is in the same circumstances and will be apologetic about it later.
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U really think a flip is ganna switch and suddenly she’ll be all buddy buddy with us? Maybe I’m just pulling from reality when I say people locked into their own mindset of being victims never really try to change that way of thinking.
But hey it’s fiction so I’m keeping some hope I guess…
Not really a switch, I prefer to think of it as a gradual change. Although victim mentality is something that is usually hard set into someone that is quite different from a brief span of time in which someone is not doing well under the current circumstances which I hope is Sophia’s case.
Here’s to hoping fam 
Indeed. There is so much potential in these characters that I would like to see fully realized.
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hmm considering sophia is going to make us ( the King in 3 book and the fact that the mc did it for making sure shes safe… that can give us a bit of foreshadowing, kind of?)
im more the type to think that it depends how much they have suffer to get that mindset… you know like those kind of traumas some people get for past experiences…
what if is some kind of trauma or fear and shes kind of self-defending
Well she was locked away most of her life as well as hated back home because she’s a bastard.
Self defending, that’s kind of the idea when I bring up the possibility of her simply not handling things well.
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Shakespeare likes integrity and self-respect 
then In this one or in the others two we could talk or forge a alliance with some sort of parody of crusaders/templars?
looking at the replies of thread
wow more that 200 replies without use war? great!
If it happens then I’ll be team Aless (The Concubine) in Andus book
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then we will be what? team Lavina?
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Who the heck is Lavina?
did you mean Victoria shes andus’s wife
Is the wife of the king lucraex who was considered a goddess by its beauty (I think it was her)
@Sophia, the following is in no way meant to offend you or your writing ability in any way. I am only attempting to help and will stop immediately if you so ask.
Anyone and everyone who is reading this please, please tell me if I go too far. Many times I like to play the part of the editor where I should be acting more like spellcheck.
The following is only suggestions and need not be followed:
1- I would suggest “blood of a thousand men”
2- ignore the little line (whoops)
3- “the field of battle” or “the battlefield” imo it sounds weird with the two together
4- “is” is present tense and “let loosed” I think might be past tense if “loosed” is a word… I’m not sure I’ve ever heard it before but maybe. I’m sure in some cases present and past tenses can be used close together but I don’t think this is one of them.
5&6- I would suggest to use the same word so that it is obvious that this is the same person.
1- I’m not sure “all” is a word that goes very well with “quiet”. This may be more of an opinion thing but it did throw me off while I was reading. I would suggest “perfectly” or “completely” or just plain old “quiet”.
2- I’m not sure of the definition of “crescendo” you are using but from my music background (very small) I know crescendo means to get louder and isn’t a set volume. It is even written/possible in music (I believe) to have a crescendo during fff (literally as loud as you can play musically).
1- this should be two sentences. The two clauses are not related enough to be one sentence.
2&3- here you are mixing present and past again. While now I’m doubting if “peek” is present tense, I know “heard” is past tense and watches… might… also not be present tense. Yeah I’m going to give this up.
1- “understood their”
1- careful about the phrases you use. I’m not accusing you of doing this intentionally. Copyright laws do apply to people breaking them accidentally.
You’ll have to ask others how to get around copyright.
1- I believe asymmetrically is one word
2&3- past and present again, change “is” to “was”
1- are these windows on the outer wall? I was not able to determine which wall(s?) you were were describing
2- what did I do to her dress (see the picture below)
Great story!! I hope this didn’t seem too harsh! Good luck on your story!
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