Hey, I have never beta tested before so I am not entirely sure how you prefer your feedback.
I was planning to deliver my suggestions in segments: Status screen, then chapter 0, following chapter 1, chapter 2, and so on.
For instance, status screen suggestions would look like this:
You. A pale girl in her teenage years with a thin athletic physique thanks to your training and being constantly on the move, coal dark hair, and eyes of a green so prominent you haven’t seen elsewhere. Would you consider yourself a monster? You can’t say for sure, but you certainly don’t feel like one despite what you may look like. You haven’t made many friends yet thanks to that, people fear you and thus they prefer for you to be far from them, and some make the effort to get rid of you in ways you don’t appreciate at all.
Besides that, you manage to survive and are quite used to hiding in plain sight, avoiding unwanted conflict.
He is both taller and older than you. Which you can see in the slight wrinkles on his face and how they deepen when he smiles at you. He is also, possibly the smartest person you know, though sometimes you both get into trouble, you wouldn’t be here if not for him and all the effort he makes to keep you alive. Similar to most people his tan is darker than yours. He usually has a clean shave, despite not taking much care of his looks as he has too many things to worry about with you on the drift around him.
Then this part I am assuming, it is a mistake that it is in the status screen
“Well look at you,” he says with a warm smile “You have grown a lot since you were a hairless white small bead with a tiny pair of dark wings,” he chuckles. “Have you been doing your exercises?”
“Oh yes, your stubbornness is an exact copy of your father’s,” he laughs and lets his gaze fall down. “Anyone who knew him would say that. I’m sure of it.” He takes a slow breath in and sighs. “Yes, I miss a lot of things from that time,” his eyes go up to you. “But I wouldn’t change the time we spent together,” he keeps his eyes locked on you. “You are the best I could’ve asked for. Your father would be as proud as I am.”
So would you prefer to test like that OR give a summary of what I think of all the chapters combined?
