New draft posted!
Ch. 2
- added substantially more conversation with John, including his backstory (trigger warning - discussion of domestic violence)
Ch. 5
- fixed continuity error (PC refers to attraction to both Lila and John only if earlier choice indicated this)
Ch. 9
-
After John declares love for the PC, Lila only does the same if her relationship score is >=50
-
Lila no longer automatically reciprocates if PC chooses her as a love interest (relationship score must be >=50). If PC chooses her or both her and John, and her score is <50, she suggests taking it slow. This means there is still a guaranteed happy ending, but the situation is more cautiously optimistic/HFN than guaranteed HEA.
-
If the PC chooses John, the PC no longer lets her down gently if her relationship stat is <50. (This seemed unnecessary as she is not likely hurt if the stat is low to begin with.)
-
fixed continuity error at bank scene ($100 vs $1000)
-
fixed a continuity error in Ch. 5 that was created by my introduction of John’s backstory in Ch. 2.
Note to readers: The number of changes in this revision is fewer than earlier versions, but I’m getting into more substantial story changes now. Thanks very much for all the notes! I will continue implementing them and if I haven’t gotten to yours yet, please know I haven’t forgotten about them.