lol, sorry Mara, force of habit.
Most people tend to be wary around their (near) dopplegangers. Though I personally know only one set of unrelated girls to which that applies, they eventually became friends but it took some years. Of course they werenāt family so they didnāt have that kind of drama get in the way.
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is yours this? Could I play this? I have the norm to avoiding trols not playing wip I Donāt know author. So if is yours is ok i think
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Thatās true! When I was in middle school cough 10yearsagowhatthehell cough, everyone constantly told me that I looked exactly like some 8th grade boy, when I was in 7th grade. He was apparently about a foot taller and a little bit heavier, but everything else was the exact same.
We have, to this day, never met, but people STILL sometimes tell me stories about stuff they did with me, and Iām like ??? no this didnāt happen???
Awww, youāre such a sweetheart, I love you. This is mine, and Iād be totally honored if you did play it! Itās crazy short and has a pretty bad bug right now, but Iām actually actively working on it while I type here. I have today and tomorrow off from school AND work, so Iām getting as much done as I can 
haaaaah
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updated. please let me know if the changes fixed the bug. If you continue to get the repeating appearance bug, could you send me details of what choices you made to create the bug? Iāve tried myself, since the bug tester didnāt find anything ā there may be a broken loop somewhere.
It sounds awesome and special the twin bit
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All of the MCs you can choose have equal potential. There is no benefit, aside from different origin stories and bonuses to non-magic skills, for any one origin over another. That being said, the twins, once they are both at the Citadel, may or may not have different power levels. Depends on your choices.
if you want to be evil, yes. It is difficult to unlock, though. Picking random options in my later chapters, I get necromancy 1 out of 50 times.
So if we ran away from home we already know everything about the twin? So that begs the question but I assume that by the time we meet them again maybe a decade has passed since we last saw them? 
Though if my mc already knows he has an identical twin walking around somewhere then heād be predisposed to assume it is actually the twin when meeting his look-alike. The other backgrounds presumably know nothing at all about their family so they would presume less.
On the other hand it could certainly be that even the mc who ran away from home has never actually met his twin or knows of his existence, but I shudder to think what āman in the iron maskā tactics our ālovingā family has used on us in that case.
Wellā¦that could certainly be the case. I think particularly in the case of the one who ran away from home or was raised in the orphanage the people at that āschoolā would probably tend to assume the poorer, less well-known and connected twin is the doppleganger. 
Even if we were taken in or adopted by the noble I guess it would still likely depend on our status and reputation versus that of our twin.
My mc will probably choose the orphanage background though, so I think heād be in real danger of having this happen.
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Oh, I really enjoyed this! It may have been short, but it certainly gave a taste for what the rest will hopefully be like 
I only got the character creation once, and I liked being able to be so detailed about the appearance of the MC.
Definitely looking forward to playing more of this. Good luck with development!
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I actually havenāt decided how much the runaway knows about their family. In my mind, I always envisioned the runaway as being from the noble household, but other people may see it differently. I intended to keep it vague, but youāve definitely given me something to think about there.
no matter what, though, you never know about your twin
as for āloving familyā ā Tyran is never outright unloving, but he is an important man who has been heartbroken for 14 years. looking at you is his sole reminder of his deceased wifeā¦itās rough. He is aā¦distant father, but a loving one.
you arenāt adopted by the noble. Tyran and Marla Renna are your parents, no matter what
the rest of that is a bit too spoilery to respond to, but there are definitely some fun things that I have planned.
Oh, Iām so glad youāve enjoyed it! That means so much, truly. 
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I only got the character creation once, and I liked being able to be so detailed about the appearance of the MC.
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Oh, good. It seems Iāve fixed that bug, then. Since each origin story is a separate scene, rather than an incredibly long, confusing singular scene, it created a never-ending loop of character creation (as each different character), because I forgot to put *ending at the end of the placeholder. Easy enough of a fix
Iām glad you liked the level of detail in character creation. I like having those things, personally. I know some people find it boring, but in a case of identical twins, it kind of does matter what everyone looks like, lol
Thank you so much! I hope I continue to meet your expectations
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Ah, so weāre just a servant in that noble household then?
As for never knowing about the twin, curious how youāre going to pull that off if the mc does know who his father is. Since the twin is apparently daddyās golden boy and they are likely both famous. So if the mc does know the guy exist then that means they must at least be half-brothers/sister.
On the other hand if the runaway scene is from being a servant to that other noble then it all makes sense in that the mc would have no clue who their family is. So either daddy dropped us off to be raised as a servant by a noble acquaintance or his servants drop us off at the orphanage. Thatās not exactly āfather of the year materialā
Lastly of course heās always the mcās biological father, but that doesnāt mean my mc would be willing to (publicly) acknowledge that fact once he learns it or that he would ever want to have anything to do with him and the extended family. 
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hold on, let me get you a link for the old opening scene. It might answer some questions for you. Itāll only take you, like, a minute or t wo, max, to read. I think I still have a dashingdon link for itā¦
ah, here it is
itās obvious why I scrapped it. Itās just not as good, imo, and gives away too much too quickly, I think.
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Yeah it is, thanks for linking it though. I guess youāve changed it so that we can only be the younger, clueless and non-privileged twin now, didnāt you? And youāve changed being the child of the local midwife to ending up in an orphanage and presumably added, servant to a noble and the option to have run away from that. It does seem to be better overall and of course it gives way less information.
Itās also not going to make my mc predisposed to liking his āfatherā or wanting to have anything to do with the guy or his family. Fortunately you already said you were going to write some stubborn, non-cooperative and recalcitrant options in the Citadel/school part.
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Re: spoilers -
I think something may have been miscommunicated LOL. Youāre still either the older or the younger twin ā one grows up with the father, the other with Bertie, the midwife and local orphanage-runner. The basics of the story are much the same, aside from the new, third path. When I said I envisioned it being running from the noble path, I envisioned it because the teen doesnāt want to be stuck in a loveless marriage to someone when theyāre only 14 years old, but it could also be running from the orphanage. Either way, I intended it not to matter too muchā¦HOWEVER
youāve given me a lot to consider in how to write this, which I appreciate a lot. Iāve already changed some things around, because I like your interpretation of some things better than my own 
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The update isnāt as large as I wanted, but Iām not certain how much time Iāll have this weekend to finish the origin scenes, and Iām thinking Iāll try to do at least weekly updates.
Itās located at the same link
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Where Dorothy is lanky and tall, Damian is rather sinewy. Where Damian is dark-skinned, taking after their baker father, Dorothy is somewhat lighter-skinned, taking after their father.
A gay couple! (But shouldnāt Dorothy take after their other father? 
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Ended with this error:
1youngest line 284: Non-existent command āelse_ifā
The correct command should be *elseif.
(Is that the end of the WIP?)
Trying another route got me this:
1eldest line 4: Non-existent variable āfatherā
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Same errors as the watcher of parrots for me, Iām afraid.
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Eww thank you, let me fix that.
you are totally right! Let me add that in. It didnāt even occur to me. My friends who have same-sex parents generally call them ādadā and āpapaā or āmomā and āmotherā ā things like that. i think I intended to do something like that and got caught up in trying to rush
and youāre right about the elseif, ugh. I did this on about 2 hours of sleep. I work fulltime and go to school fulltime, and my dad was out of town all week, so I had extra responsibilities lol. a;sdkjfa;slfja;sldfj ;
Iāll fix that right now though. And I have some unexpected free time tonight, so Iām gonna try to write some more, after
edit: should be fixed.
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Is this an already released version or in WIP yet to release