I Am Not The Hero [WIP-Chapter 1+2]

The Chosen One™ sits by a campfire, holding his palms out to catch some warmth from the flames. A breeze ruffles his curly brown hair. For all that he looks like an ordinary human, he’s the Hero of Prophecy, the Lightwielder, the orphaned farmboy destined to save the world from the Night Lord’s tyrannical rule.

And I’m the one who’s going to kill him.


I AM NOT THE HERO is an interactive fantasy novel featuring clichés that are more than they initially appear. The main character navigates an increasingly unrealistic fantasy world in which their every choice seems to send the world further and further into chaos—which may or may not be a good thing.

Hello~
This WIP is still in the early stages, but I think there’s enough here to convey what kind of story it will be. The demo contains Chapters 1 + 2 and currently sits at ~21 000 words (excluding code), with an average playthrough of ~8000 words. I’m really looking forward to hearing what you think!

Fair warning: this story is told in first person. The main character is NOT the player. There are also no numerical stats. I wanted the story to read more like a novel than a game, though there is still plenty of narrative variability.

Anyway, here’s the demo
I Am Not The Hero - WIP

Any and all feedback is appreciated!

Content Warning

Violence, possibly a bit of swearing.

Relationships

The main character can build relationships with various other characters throughout the narrative. Romance isn’t really the focus of this story, and any romance choices will be kept PG.

There are 6 relationship characters in total: 2 female, 2 nonbinary, and 2 male
In this demo:

Nerion Ashflame (m) - a human wizard.
Calista Castalan (f) - a human warrior.
Inya Felise (f) - a human…cat.
Rorvar Ladran (nb) - an elvish thief.

The following relationship characters will appear in Chapter 3:

Ifrin (m) - a fellow servant of the Night Lord.
Phox (nb) - a talking fox (???)

*The main character’s affinity with each of these relationship characters is currently tracked with numerical values assigned to each choice the player makes. However, I don’t like the idea of scenes being blocked by stat checks, so I may not keep this feature going forward.

Gender choice

The main character’s gender presentation can be chosen in Chapter 2.
All other characters are gender-locked.

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I like the topic and your writing style. Gave me a good laugh here and there. I am more than interested in the evolution of this story. Will keep an eye out for this.

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This was a fun read. I also found the concept interesting. Good work, I’m certainly looking forward for more.

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This was a very fun read! I especially liked the humor and the topic presented here! Can’t wait for more!

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This is an awesome read. I never expected something like this! I cant wait for more chapters.

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This is very fun. I really enjoy the humor and it fits well with the story. Its nice to be a secondary character rather than being burdened to make choices despite and its refreshing to just enjoy the story. the story for now presents itself with a lighthearted tone and how you handle the cliché stuff of the story is not too much to just make me groan in annoyance. cant wait to see how you’ll go on with the story.

i noticed one of the lines repeat.

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cool story you got here, especially since we get to play as a bad guy. not even the main big bad either, but a lowly (or elite ranked i guess) minion! can’t wait to backstab the chosen one and his little band, maybe it’ll get us a promotion from the boss or something. (there will be a route to stay on the night lord’s side while pretending to join the party and actually kill em, right?)

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I like the story. Keep up the good work :metal:t3::facepunch:t3:

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I really liked the writing. It was surprisingly neat and I loved the little tidbits breaking the 4th wall. One request though, is it possible you can add save slots. There seems to be enough variation and I want to experience all of it so having the save slots will help immensely

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Save slots have been added! It should work (let me know if it doesn’t!)

@yb_minhee Good catch, thank you! Fixed it~

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Okay, so, this is an INCREDIBLY… cute(??!) game! I adore the MC - the very concept of this dorky fourth wall breaking Voidborn who for some reasons engages in heroics and helps his enemies (since I go for that path) is incredibly endearing.
And as always, I’m incredibly grateful for the first person narrative!

Honestly, I admire this game and the writing, cause I tend to hate fourth wall breaking or meta commentary, but somehow it works in this story. And not only that, but I’m also never interested in possible romance with female characters (only male and rarely NB), but man I fell in love with Inya the very moment she appeared… So yeah, that’s literally a first for me, and I DID play literal dozens of IF games!

I see you added save slots, so that’s nice - since it was the thing that truly bothered me while playing (I guess they were added while I was playing, but I would have needed to refresh to actually have them).

One small thing that was a bit bothersome, about MC's name:

While not strictly necessary, it would be nice to learn MC’s true name before the point we choose a human name? But mostly, for the human name, if the MC almost reveals their true name, wouldn’t it be possible to be able to actively choose what they correct it to, between the three options, instead of them being auto-linked to gender? I love the name Vis, but my MC is male so I actually had to input it manually. Fortunately I read the code all the while I’m playing, so I knew about the options and could select to input it, but if I didn’t know I would have been forced to restart the entire game.
But that’s my only gripe, really!

I’m also not a huge fan of relationship increases or decreases with characters before they appear, but since you said you’re not even sure you’ll keep that at all… eh :rofl:

Okay so, that aside… I’m really really in love with the game, and I would love to draw my MC, but for that I need to ask a couple of questions about the Voidborn appeareance.

  • I assume they have black hair?
  • Do the eyes glow constantly?
  • What type of horns do they have? Is it up to interpretation?
  • What type of tail? Again, is it up to interpretation?
  • What kind of hooves? And also, are their entire legs those of an animal, or is this only knee-down? Up to interpretation?
  • What kind of wings?
  • Skin tone? Anything we want? Something specific? Restricted to “natural” human skintones or not? Any markings?
  • Fangs? Claws? Pointy ears?

Haha, sorry for the interrogation!

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Real good stuff. A fun read and the genre twisting comedy was spot on. Good job!

Sounds interesting defo be a cdrama type one

Love it, I read many Ifs and I’m sure this one is in my top 10 -bookmarked- :upside_down_face: I like that we are not the good one, it’s very tiring to be always the hero of the story haha, hope that in the next chapters we can use our shapeshifting power, I really like it, looking forward for future updates :pleading_face:

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@Konoi unless the author says otherwise I’m going with we are free to Invision out character how ever we want them to be based off what I’ve seen on game lol

I’ve enjoyed this one and look forward to seeing what comes next other then the one error I’d a duplicate sentence that’s already been pointed out nothing jumped out at me needing fixing.

So good job all around to the author :smiley:

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Well yeah, I have a certain vision, but I want to wait to see if the author will say otherwise :rofl:
I mean, maybe some elements I had envisionned are in opposition to things that will only be detailed later or otherwise important things, so I prefer to know before I actually draw :smile_cat:

This really made me laugh :laughing: Good Job! :+1:

I thought we would be playing as the main Antagonist but playing as a (probably elite ranked) minion is still pretty neat.

So I took the money from the thief and backed Inya up against him and this happened


I think he shouldn’t have the money on him after that and I guess when I told everyone that he was the thief shouldn’t he say that I took it from him afterwards? (But sorry mr.thief, I doubt anyone would believe you after the shit you pulled)

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This is a fun read! Looking forward to more of it!

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Damn that was pretty fun to read, though you’ve probably already heard that statement 3 times now. Keep up the good work

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