I really adored this and fell in love with all the characters immediately! I can tell a lot of care and time went into their development. The only thing I would say is it would be lovely to see non-binary as an option in the gender selection, it in no way hinders your beautiful writing but I felt I could not truly connect with the MC I was building. Great work though! cannot wait to see how this flourishes.
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This looks fantastic! I can’t wait to see where it goes! The odd typo but you expect that at this stage. A pleasant change from all the vampire, werewolf and anime stuff. 
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cool game ya got here! love the setting, real prince of persia vibes. all the characters are great and likable too! kinda wish there was an option to run away and stay a street rat/locust instead of getting adopted, kinda felt like we ddin’t get to feel the suffering and hardship of that life long enough with how quick the prologue progressed. but i suppose the new family and revenge stuff is pretty essential to the plot. lookin forward to seeing how it goes!
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you must think before acting you must find a way to manipulate the crowd onto your side and you figure out how way to take what you need and if it comes down to it blood must be spilled make sure it’s the only person you spilled blood that threatens you and your existence because that is the meaning of a thief ( choice of games really gets me into this type of mindset but it when it comes down to things that are funny or hilarious I am a different person to but when it comes down to a dramatic moments like your story I have to go full in on how I want to word my things and I hope I don’t make mistakes on the way yeah you got to say I can’t wait for honor among Thieves because this really gets me into a mindset of the Thief)
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Great so far!
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Can’t wait for this as it’s a book genre I’m looking for 
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i usually have a hard time getting interested in the characters unless they’re introduced in the story but wow! i think i just fell in love with every single one of your characters already (spending a good chunk of my day reading through your blog must be the proof of that 
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i adored every minute of your writing and i’m going to bookmark this and reread it again just to feel this odd sort of melancholic hopefulness again. can’t wait to see where this all goes 
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Oh my goodness thank you so much for the high praise! I’m so glad that my story was able to evoke those types of feelings in you and I’ll do my best to make sure the rest of the story doesn’t disappoint!
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Have I told you how much I love this? Well now I am telling you.
Be it the fighters, the scholars, the painted ladies, I loved all the characters and parting from them was just as heartbreaking as the other! 
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Thank you so much! I really enjoy writing them and even though it’s taken me longer than I expected, I’m really excited to revise and update!
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Sorry for disappearing for so long, but I made some great progress on figuring out how to show what being a locust entailed for the MC!
Next update will be tentatively on January 10th, 2022!
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Welcome back and thank god and here i thought this project is dead. It would be a shameful waste of potential, I’m glad it isn’t. I can’t wait for the upcoming update.
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Glad to see you back! Looking forward to the update
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Haha sorry for the scare! I don’t have any intention of letting this project die!
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Okay I gotta admit I’m really excited see where this goes! This is a really cool story you’ve made and it is super interesting.
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Thank you so much!
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New update for 1/10/2021!
Sorry for the long wait and please let me know what y’all think and if there are any bugs!
This new demo features a slightly revised prologue and character customization. The next update will introduce new characters, and set more events in motion.
Please don’t hesitate to leave feedback or submit any errors you’ve caught and thank y’all again for being so patient!!
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