Hong Kong Blood Opera (WIP) OPEN BETA 206,000 words (added 6k to chapters 2 and 3 Sept 7th)

modern-fantasy
gender-choice

#1

I reached a milestone today. I’ve got 11 Chapters passing randomtest more than 2,000 times.

The game currently plays into but stops two chapters short of the ending.

I have three more chapters that I’m currently wrangling with which complete the game.

I’d appreciate some feedback on this stage about the characters. Specifically, which character do you find most compelling and which character annoys you the most.

The project needs a rewrite but it’s in rough working shape. I’m going to be expanding and developing the character arcs and the writers path much more fully.

Thanks again to everyone’s support during this project. This has been a real learning process for me. It’s been frustrating at times but your feedback and encouragement has pulled me through and I’m extremely grateful for it.

This game is inspired by Asian Action cinema. John Woo’s The Killer, Once a Thief are big inspirations. But Saviour of the Soul is also a big inspiration and there’s a big fantasy path to pursue in Hong Kong Blood opera along those lines. I’ve also been inspired by some of Johnnie Tso films like Election which explore the traditions and politics of Hong Kong’s underworld.

There’s a guns and gansters path, a kung fu path, a writer’s path (currently underdeveloped) and a supernatural arc.

To play the demo, go here: https://dashingdon.com/play/jollyspaniard/hong-kong-blood-opera/mygame/index.php?cb=31429

The demo has some replayability.


#2

More Asian based WIPs! Yay! The criminal underworld theme is interesting, and from the summary there are a good mix of “black and white” paths for MC to go down.

As for feedback: some punctuation appears to be missing from the options, and is there something wrong with the stat page? Maybe it’s just my phone but it’s not loading…


#3

Already better than a lot of demos on here. Keep it up.


#4

Thanks for bringing up punctuation. I’m not sure whether options should be punctuated or not.

I’ve uploaded a basic stat chart. I haven’t included relationships or wound status but it shows you the primary stats.

In the interesting of evilness. I have one hidden stat called Tragic which is very important. High tragic scores will be communicated via the narrative.


#5

It’s really interesting special is trained I. A lot of stuff


#6

It’s fitting that it should be her. She was the one who saw you off the day you left Hong Kong seventeen years.

I think you missed a word on the end of that sentence.


#7

Thank you so much. I’ve fixed that.

Cheers for the feedback. It’s much appreciated.


#8

Found another missed word for you:

“An enigmatic man even to his own flesh and blood. Perhaps you’ll be find out more in the near future.”

She takes a long look at you. Her eyes feel like they’re boring into you tunnel digging robots.

Here too.

Now it’s the amusement park, Wonderland. Tt was just a

Typo.

The dog stops to take a crap. That’s when gets to the point.

Missing word?


#9

Thank you for all of that. I’ve fixed those. I’m currently working on getting two more chapters debugged and uploaded but I’ll take another pass in a day or two when I have a fresh set of eyes.


#10

Pls fix the error. I havent finish the demo yet :sob:


#11

I got an error when I chose my gender as female/chose to be called Ms. :frowning:


#12

also Mr Mx. just a few minutes, it was fine.


#13

Ouch, fix one problem and create another. I fixed it.


#14

right im still waiting here :joy:


#15

there is another error at gun prodigy choice


#16

Thank you. I fixed that and did a new randomtest, looks like it works ok now.


#17

Finally, some Asian shit. I had just about given up on expecting this kind of thing. Thank goodness for this WIP!!!


#18

The Mystery Baby Momma’s name changed from Black Fan to Black Nun over the course of the last scene.

Also, it seems a bit early to be falling for anyone, Baiyu in particular.


#19

Great story with an authentic feel to the whole Asian action movie scene you said you were going for. I wouldn’t get too concerned with the typos til you are ready to put it in beta testing, but that is the only real issue I encountered. There will need to be a lot of proofreading done by the beta testers, but everything else looks amazing. I will be keeping an eye on this work and looking for its release. I, however never beta test as I feel it kind of ruins things for me. I will buy the final product though as the demo is just too good.


#20

Reminds me of the game Sleeping Dogs with the whole Hong Kong Triads theme and avenging your family.