February 25th: I’ve edited Chapter 8 the first of the Manila chapters
Hong Kong 2008
You return to Hong Kong, the city you grew up in, to identify your fathers body and settle his affairs.
You thought you were done with Hong Kong but Hong Kong isn’t done with you.
Welcome to Hong Kong Blood Opera a love letter to Hong Kong action cinema. Guns, cops, gangsters, martial Arts, romance and food.
The game has is very broad with a main arc and six side arcs which are very substantial in of themselves.
Central Arc: Saving a woman in a coma who needs an expensive operation, running a bar, figuring out what to do with your father’s unpublished novel. Paying off your debts and your entangled history with the Hong Kong Triads.
Writers Arc : Revive your failed writing career with a gold opportunity to get involved in a Hong Kong movie production. It begins as a script rewrite job but evolves into something else. Make a movie, try to keep your sanity and look for love in all the wrong places.
Donnie Arc: Work as an informant to a renegade Hong Kong cop. Donnie is also your childhood friend whose heart you broke when you were sixteen. Can you bring down the Triad and regain her trust?
Spin Arc: Plan the perfect heist, the Macau Job with a childhood friend. Can you work for the Triad while secretly planning to rob them at the same time. Can you get Spin to follow orders?
More Asian based WIPs! Yay! The criminal underworld theme is interesting, and from the summary there are a good mix of “black and white” paths for MC to go down.
As for feedback: some punctuation appears to be missing from the options, and is there something wrong with the stat page? Maybe it’s just my phone but it’s not loading…
Thanks for bringing up punctuation. I’m not sure whether options should be punctuated or not.
I’ve uploaded a basic stat chart. I haven’t included relationships or wound status but it shows you the primary stats.
In the interesting of evilness. I have one hidden stat called Tragic which is very important. High tragic scores will be communicated via the narrative.
Thank you for all of that. I’ve fixed those. I’m currently working on getting two more chapters debugged and uploaded but I’ll take another pass in a day or two when I have a fresh set of eyes.
Great story with an authentic feel to the whole Asian action movie scene you said you were going for. I wouldn’t get too concerned with the typos til you are ready to put it in beta testing, but that is the only real issue I encountered. There will need to be a lot of proofreading done by the beta testers, but everything else looks amazing. I will be keeping an eye on this work and looking for its release. I, however never beta test as I feel it kind of ruins things for me. I will buy the final product though as the demo is just too good.
