High School Revenge (WIP) (Chapter 3 OUT NOW, Mar 24, 2024)

Hey guys.

I’ve been reading choice of games ?books? for some years now and decided I’d like to write a story of my own. I came up with a comedy-ish drama story. The idea came after I watched the Count of Monte Cristo and thought that a game where we plan the revenge from start to finish could be really cool. My story goes something like this:

When the MC was 11 years old, they were traumatizingly humiliated and betrayed by their best friends and classmates. 7 years later, MC comes back a new person and is ready to get their revenge by getting under the skin of their targets, without them knowing who MC is, and planning the best way to crush them.

There will be 8 main targets and possible ROs. Right now I plan to use only relations stats to limit the MC’s choices because I’ve gotten sick by the whole “making the same choice based on your best stat” situation I find in most of the games lately.


Demo: https://dashingdon.com/go/2582 ~51k words
Patreon: Adrian Oprea | Creating interactive fiction | Patreon
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Current poll (April 06): Nothing :frowning:


ROs

Targets

Dylan Evans

The first friend the MC ever made, Dylan was once just a nerdy Asian kid with big square glasses, playing video games with you every single day. However, as time passed, he turned into a social media influencer, garnering over tens of thousands of likes on every post.

With an incredibly fake smile, Dylan manages to turn most people into his followers, as his strategy to suck up to the rest of the students seems to work quite well.

Though he seems to be quite irredeemable, you do remember him being a selfless kid with a big heart. There are so many memories with him helping you out whenever he could, being the only person you could confide in. What could have made him turn against you when you needed him most?

Olivia Hartley

If your MC had to choose the most unlikely person to ever do them wrong, then Olivia would be their first choice. Strong willed and incredibly sarcastic, this raven-haired tall girl has remained exactly the same 7 years later.

And yet, she did betray you on the day of the Tragedy, giving secret information to your bullies and allowing you to fall victim to their prank… What could have been her reason?

Olivia is an incredibly intuitive person, with a quick mind and a powerful personality to boot. Someone like her will likely be a huge challenge in the upcoming revenge, but not even her can stop this mastermind.

Michael Knox

This tall, dark, and handsome captain of the Baseball team can be, depending on your choices, the person that tricked you into falling in love with him, only to publicly humiliate you in front of the whole school.

He is an incredibly talented athlete with a very arrogant attitude, assuming that the world belongs to him. With a very rich dad to support him, nothing has ever gone wrong in his life, if we were to ignore his mother’s death during his birth.

Can he be considered one of the main antagonists of this story or is he just a secret follower that only followed orders during the Tragedy?

Cecily Knight

Ah yes, Cecily Knight. Everyone, everywhere knows who Cecily Knight is. This petite blue-eyed blonde is the captain of the swimming team, and regularly publicly humiliates anyone that attempts to get to know her romantically.

With such a strong reputation, Cecily manages to order around anyone in the school with ease, as they all lower their heads when she passes them on the hallways.

However, observing her more closely can reveal that she is much more docile with her friends and loved ones. Is she actually an ice queen or is it all a facade to protect herself?

Connor Cobb (F)

With his long blond hair and piercing smile, Connor tends to attract every girl that passes his way. However, he manages to make them all leave once he opens his mouth, as his desperation can be seen from miles away.

As the star guitarist of The Fighting Rooster, Connor is an incredibly talented individual that planned the whole part of the Tragedy where they befriended you first before destroying your life.

Though he seems like a total idiot, looking into his life seems to reveal that there is more to him than just this fake persona he shows everyone. With 3 younger siblings, Connor seems to have a lot on his shoulders as many in his family look up to him.

Isaac Freeman

With his curly red locks and emerald eyes, Isaac manages to trick many people into thinking he is someone they would like to get to know. As the mastermind behind the Tragedy, he is the worst out of all the people on this list.

It is quite common for him, even 7 years later, to bully students so badly that they decide to move schools. By observing his behavior, it seems that all he cares about is being thoroughly entertained.

Either make him laugh, do something outrageous, or get out of his way, as he will do his best to make every day more interesting than the last.

Vivian Porter (M)

Vivian turned from Isaac’s best friend in her childhood to Dylan’s current confidant. With a seemingly perfect appearance and an endless wardrobe, Vivian manages to impress anyone that sees her pass by.

She is incredibly empathic, being able to tell what anyone is feeling at a glance, allowing her to use this skill to make anyone fall for her ambitious tricks.

Is she just someone that just made a mistake during childhood or are her intentions impure at this age as well?

Haley Freeman

As Isaac’s twin sister, nobody would expect her to be the biggest goody two shoes the world has ever seen. Seemingly stuttering her way through most conversations, people usually tend to forget she even exists.

This curvy redhead has a deep passion for painting, as she spends most of her time in the school gardens, capturing the view.

Is there more to Isaac’s sister than meets the eye or is she just another victim of Isaac’s abuse?

Allies

Angela Slone

A swimmer with long, brown hair, Angela is part of the team alongside Cecily. After being bullied into submission by the harpy, she reluctantly decides to help the MC carry out their revenge against their many targets.

With a bubbly personality and a merciful soul, Angela is possibly the worst ally for this revenge you could find. However, this doesn’t mean she can’t be tricked into giving you what you want.

Marcus Parmer

Marcus has led a horrible life during high school. Being diagnosed with a medical condition forcing him to go bald, he has been constantly bullied by Isaac ever since he joined the Baseball team.

He is much more serious than any of the allies you can find in the school, but he isn’t the most capable person for the job. He is, however, excited to help you get rid of the scum pretending to be students in his school.


Features:

  • Play as male, female, or nonbinary.
  • Romance your 6 childhood bullies, your 2 childhood friends, or hidden allies.
  • Live the tragic childhood events that lead to the worst day of your life and decide how everything went down.
  • Almost all targets will have deep secrets that you’ll have to discover throughout the story and use against them.
  • Pretend to be a charismatic popular kid, a likeable klutz, a rebel that goes against the norm, or the edgy, silent type.
  • Lie, charm, spy, blackmail, everything is on the table to get your revenge. There is no “good” way to learn the targets’ secrets and there’s no perfect way to get the job done.
  • Your stats will almost never affect your capability to get revenge. All that will make a real difference will be your relationship with all the characters.
  • Spend a full academic year getting to know your targets, interacting with them through random events, relationship events, or hobby events, similar to a Persona game.
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Are you kidding me?

With so few stats, how can I possibly min-max the living daylight out of the game? You do not understand my need for stats, the more the better

But on a more serious note, I think a little change can be refreshing if done properly
Not that I’m advocating undermining stats in anyway, I’m just that compulsive about min-max-ing

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just curious , what is with the ‘you play as a kid’ WIP popping up ?

and that sound like carrie no ?

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I’m not usually interested in revenge stories, but I’m looking forward to how the comedy part of the story will play out. It’s an uncommon combination.

Do you mean the targets are also the ROs? Now that’s interesting.

I won’t comment about the stats thing, but good luck with your project! :blush:

Ehem.

I’m sorry I can’t help it, but what is your problem with them? You don’t like kids? I could say the same for all the medieval, superhero, or supernatural stories that there are lots of them (not that I don’t like some of them).

I will argue that there aren’t enough stories about children.

For the record, the description states that you’ll play as an 18 year old. I wouldn’t call that a “kid” exactly.

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Sounds interesting! Looking forward to playing a super bitter MC who’s unlucky enough to fall for the one person who hurt them the most. :joy:

I’m already curious how exactly our MC will be able to take revenge on their targets. Will it be one big revenge plan that hits all eight targets simultaneously or eight different plans that unfold separately? Could be very, very interesting. :slightly_smiling_face:

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Hate to be that person but it sounds like a threat like “GASP! how dare you not wanting to play a person of different age than a children you heartless monster?!” But I do agreed it would be cool if the mc is eighteen, because I know some few high school students being eighteen and in their senior year.

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My mother always said ‘I like kids , I like my kids . I don’t like others peoples kids’ lol . So , personally…yes and no . some kids are quiet and nice , and some are horrible monsters .

And no, I dont have kids and never planning on having any . I do have a puppy right now . 3 months old…which is like a 5 years old toddler . Teething , all she does is yap , bite and refuse to sleep and wake me up at 4am lol

Didn’t say I have an issue with the story , was just curious . The only con I see is being a kid mean you are limited in some stuff you can do . That’s about it . For exemple , if you are 10 years old…you can’t have a story where you drive a truck . Or fly a plane .

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@May_Smith I am not saying that. But yes, it’s on me that it felt a little personal to me.

@E_RedMark Oh, okay. It just sounded different to me. I get what you mean.

Not in a realistic setting, maybe (I have those things in my story). Personally, I find it one of the appeals of having a kid MC, doing things you don’t expect them to do.


I’m sorry if I offended you or anything.

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not offended lol just remember , that not everyone has to like kids . Just like everything else…I guess .

Yeah , I did play one choiceofgames with a kid detective . That was nice actually .

so my turn to ask you something : is it easier to write a kid MC in realistic setting or harder ?

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Yeah… I wasn’t saying that everyone has to like them. That’s their opinion.


I’m not sure if we should be discussing this here, but that depends on the story and the writer. I’m inclined to say it’s harder, but then you have the question: “What’s a kid doing in a fantasy world?” It’s pretty much the same thing in a realistic setting, the only difference is you have fantasy elements to play around with. They still shouldn’t do things that they shouldn’t do, but they can do them.

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As someone who always loves a good revenge story, I’m excited to see what you can do.

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Now this sounds like it could be a revenge story on par with the one form Revenge of the Nerds in that it is about the best form of revenge (in my mind) in that you don’t hurt people but you have the satisfaction in knowing that you outsmarted them and made them feel a taste of what you felt. If this is done right you’ll be looking at one very happy reader in the form of yours truly. Best of luck in your work

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@kyros I’m thinking about a story where you can do anything that you want without basing the choices on your stats
@E_RedMark You play as a kid only for the first chapter. Most of the story will happen when the MC is 17-18
@feurio I plan to do a big moment where you take your revenge on whom you decide simultaneously
@MindightWatcher You’re right, the MC will mainly try to make them feel what he felt when they humiliated him, but I plan to let you decide how to take the revenge

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That’s why it’s the best form of revenge. Where’s the satisfaction in getting revenge if the person you got it on isn’t around to stew in it to know that you outsmarted them or even better that they don’t know you did it but someone did and that lack of knowledge will torment them worse than anything else

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I will be eating a cold dish while reading…

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What would the revenge be like killing or prancing what sort of revenge

This is a bit young to go berserk on the revenge for me, now if it was senior year (that is what Americans call the last year of both high school and college, correct?) or prom and the mc came back a changed college senior that’d be much more intriguing to me. If it happened to me as an eleven year old just convincing my parents to move and getting some new friends, maybe therapy ought to do it.

Well I do like a good revenge tale every now and then it is just that the age of the mc at the first incident here doesn’t quite do it for me.

I think it would work better if the first chapter is maybe 16-18 and the rest is near the end of college 24-25 or so.

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Sounds like I can finally be mean… so I love it.
It’s refreshing to not have to neccisarily play a “good character”. Though I do hope you’ll give more of a variety in terms of moral choices. Like the character deciding taking revenge wasn’t the best course of action.

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Omg can I Please romance the most horrible , mean, rude bully from my past. I don’t even want revenge. I just love villains.

OOOO OOOO WAIT

How about at first I wanted revenge and decided to break their heart but then accidentally fell in love.

Enemies to friends to lovers, my ultimate romance.

“My flame of hatred turned into love.” :heart: :fire:

I think I need help.

Maybe.

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