Freak: Amidst the Neon Lights WIP and playtest.... last update July 4th 2019

First’s a very ‘internalized person’ due to being mute so their inner monologue is a bit more consistent than the average person that can simply ‘say’ what they want. Aka Empathy saying First has a ‘loud brain’ . She can’t read your mind without direct contact but she can pickup strong thoughts and ambient emotions at a distance, hack she could home in on intense emotions from much further if she put her mind to it. And she opens herself up when she needs to translate for someone… like First.

No window,

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The waif comment though I’d be lying if I said that I didn’t often feel like that with life anyway and on a daily basis

Alice In Wonderland is one of my most favourite books lol :grinning_face_with_smiling_eyes::heart: (I’m actually reading Through The Looking Glass for the second time now)

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Oh…I feel very very sorry for Empathy. Reason why is thusly, everyone is giving off that, “Swiggity swooty, First be coming for that booty.” Vibe. Can you imagine how terrible that’d be to constantly hear that in your co-workers thoughts? Run Empathy,flee while you still can.

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@Snoe: I’m sort of seeing two different introductions to Vaihl in the same page of text. Some of the words in the last two paragraphs below come across as a repeat of words used in the earlier paragraphs on the page, particularly the visual inspection. You may want to reword that section.

Imgur

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Tankya
Forgot to add the variable between ‘barging in’ and ‘waiting’ choices later in the text. Got jumbled together unintentionally.
Fixed it.

Also with the fix the ‘swimming’ section was nudged forward.
EDIT:five hours later

OH it was nudges further again by another few corrections I found.

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I can’t wait to see empathy’s reaction when first starts to like someone. (Her or another ro) since first has a loud brain that could make for some really funny scenes.

Mischievous first thinking all kinds of touchy Feely or naughty things at em needs to happen!

Or if First starts seeing Empathy that way. I can imagine her blushing scarlet and throwing on her headphones, blasting them at full volume XD

What if Empathy offers to show First things he’s never experienced before?

Empathy: So, is there anything you always wanted to do? Anything I can help with?

First: I never kissed anyone before.

Empathy:

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That gif. Just :joy: there is so much room for so many first/empathy shenanigans. I can’t wait to see what we get.

Could First build a pillow fortress (I picture my First as a kid at heart)

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Empathy: First… you need to go to work… You can’t just hide in the fort everytime you don’t want to do something.

First: Yes I can.

Empathy: First I’m coming in there if you don’t come out right now!

First throws a pillow at Empathy which nearly knocks her off her feet.

Empathy: FIRST! storms off.

Silic pops his outside the fort.

Silic: I think she’s gone, mate. Nice lob!

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I’d thought I would originally romance a guy with my first MC (male, earnest → smart-ass, fast movement, graceful build), but then I met Empathy and oh my God she is absolutely adorable (and fun to tease) and she likes the MC being humorous! :two_hearts: :heart_eyes: :sparkling_heart:

Aaanyway will Ten also be a romance option (for another MC, because sarcastic, also enjoys humor and know sign language…yes please. :blush: )?

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Ten is a bit ‘grumpier’ than Empathy but yes he’s an RO.

A jack-of-all trades with a bit of an issue with authority figures. Key is earning his respect, not an easy thing to do, considering there are very few people he ‘does’ respect. Heck he doesn’t like Vyde all that much and he’s a easy going individual.

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Just finished reading the updated swimming pool scene for the first but and I realised something - Empathy seems so similar to Koito Minase in terms of being aloof and distant with everyone because her powers make her feel different to an extent, the is, before both take an interest in the mc :slight_smile: (and ofc the headphones to block everything out)

Another has fallen for Empathy’s Charm :smirk:

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#teamempathy let’s go

:joy: Idk how to include an actual hashtag so it’ll have to remain bolded - all the better for everyone to see, I suppose

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#EmpaFirst 4ever

(+20)

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What even is this? :joy:
Petition to rename the story: The Adventures of First and Silic

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“Never had clothes before.”

Empathy gets First clothes.

“Never went out for Dinner.”

Empathy takes First out to dinner.

“Never danced before.”

Empathy takes First dancing.

“Never kissed someone before.”

Well. . .You know the formula.

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