I’ve been a huge fan of choice of game’s interactive novel for quite some time now. I remember reading through A Study in Steampunk over the weekend and being immersed to such extend which a regular novel is rarely able to achieve. So, after some hard brainstorming I’ve decided to create my own, very first interactive novel. Do, note that I am a complete noob at this and I am not a native english speaker myself. The country where I live in only has english as its second language. So expect some improper writing and grammatical error in the demo presented bellow.
Miracles. The gift bestowed upon us by the gods above.
Humanity has achieved many great things utilizing the full capability of this gift. Farmers, performing miracles to cultivate the land and accelerate the growth rate of their harvest. Builders, lifting huge chunks of materials with ease. And Doctors, performing what is known before as impossible.
Such wonderful gift does not come without a price. Deep within the streets, thieves are chased while walking through the air. Murderers, killing relentlessly without even wielding weapon. And terrorist, causing terror by conjuring high temperature flame out of thin air; burning everything in its path.
There are always two sides in a coin. What was once considered as a gift, is now antagonized by some with a different point of view. Lindmont Empire is in the middle of it all. Being the country with the most diverse population and a monarchy governmental system being led by the new young Emperor, an intense story about revenge, romance, and politics are about to unfold!
You are an apertus, a person who wields multiple faiths. A person with no origin, a grave-walker sworn to bring justice to your personal vendetta.
Glide under the night sky as the famous vigilante and wander through the day as noble successor to one of the most influential house in Lindmont Empire. Will you prove your point through actions? or will you dance in the palm of politics? Will you tear down the empire? or will you be the new savior and lead the waves of revolution?
You find yourself inside a duke’s mansion. The scenery from the beautifully lit streets of Edenfair is present outside from the window in this three-story tall mansion. One objective is currently present in your mind. The man present before you in his chamber is pleading for his life. Corpses of his two guards are laying prone on the expensive carpet; bathing in their own pool of blood. You are here to murder the duke.
Fool’s Fantasy is a story and concept that I have develop throughout my new freshmen’s life in uni now! Up until this point, here are some of the feature present or planned for the further development of this side project of mine:
An engaging story of revenge, drama, romance, and politics.
Set in a world where everyone is basically a freaking wizzard
A deep ability mechanic called “Allegiance/faith” towards a certain god(s) or deity(ies) from various mythology found around the world to compliment combat gameplay and stat scaling.
Deep combat/battle options to choose.
Character stats which includes, Combat mastery, Agility, Wisdom, Charisma, and Observation.
Play as a young man or woman driven by a personal motivation to uncover the truth around your personal life and the world around you.
Several RO’s to choose from! (with 2 or 3 of them present in the current state of demo)
**In depth explanation/FAQ's regarding the miracle system**
The concept of religion differs on this world. Here it is treated as some sort of a allegiance to certain god(s) or deity(ies). The majority of citizens can perform this so called miracles (Basically everyone is a wizard).
- People under the Thor’s faith can perform the miracle of electricity and polarity
- People under the Faith of Agni can conjure up flames from thin air.
- Farmers are generally under the Faith of Demeter, the goddess of harvest. The miracle to cultivate the land and accelerates harvest growth rate.
How can a person enter or get an allegiance?
The gods and diety themself decide this. Only those that are deemed worth can have faith.
Can you control this miracle?
Yes. The ability to control how one perform their miracles differs for each individuals. The greater the faith, the greater the miracle.
How can you distinguish different faiths?
Each faith has a crest or insignia. Upon gaining faith, the crest of that particular deity will be engraved to the left dorsal hand.
Several customs around Lindmont Empire
- Many people use gloves only in their left hand to hide their crest.
- The loss of a person’s left arm can banish the ties they have to the gods. Thus, preventing them from using any miracle. (Basically, if the crest is somehow detached you lose the ability to perform miracles regarding that faith)
Can a person have 2 or more allegiance with the gods?
Yes. These people are whats called “Apertus”. It generally describes a person with multiple faiths. Other than the left dorsal hand, the crest can also be engraved in right dorsal hand.
The goal of my current prologue is to give insight to the PC’s point of view as to how he react to the world around him and how he fits into the grand scheme of things. I am aiming to avoid giving massive exposition dumps in the beginning. Instead, you guys are going to be left with many unanswered questions that are left on purpose so that I could invest you in the story and make the reveal in the following continuation.
WARNING Expect many explicit violence from the demo. You have been warned. I would like it if you don’t make complain about it.
Give my demo a try! => https://dashingdon.com/play/kuroporu/fools-fantasy/mygame/index.php?cb=37296
Demo is around 20k long including:
- Prologue: A Wonderful Night (completed)
- Chapter One: Flown Too Close to The Sun (75%)
**DEMO UPDATE LOG**
Added gender-choice, fixed minor issues and bugs, and revised some of logical inconsistencies.
Added first draft of chapter one (Well, 75% of it ), fixes, and chapter headers!
What I’m looking for
I’m looking for a general feedback regarding everything this novel has to offer so far. Critiques and Opinions are welcomed~ Feel free to discuss and ask questions about anything! and I mean anything, from the logical consistency, confusing story aspects, etc.
Also, I am fairly new to the community at this point! I’ve lurked around for quite some time now and know like the basic term or stuff that are present here. SO, I’ll be looking forward for advice and guidance in the future!
[Edited on 26/12/17: Improved main thread.]