No, we all need something that helps us through the suffering that’s MC’s downward spiral.
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I’m more interested in telling Ortega the “truth” and see how he/she reacts. Or better yet, let her discover alone and see how she reacts, that would be interesting to see…
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Well, that isn’t really at odds with hoping for a happy end…it just would be very full of suffering before that. (Practically my favorite story format…)
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Would it be really a happy ending if she never knew what happened? Also, MC tried their best not to harm her (at least in my choices). That’s why i feel like they should know.
I…do you even read what I write? I said that Ortega finding out the truth would not be at odds with a happy ending. Pretty much everyone here waits either for Ortega to find out to see their reaction or to use that moment to destroy them once and for all.
Calm down, suppress your hate. You need to meditate, Jedi.
But really, i do find that the best chance for a happy ending would to be honest with them. Any other ending close to that is likely to be lying to yourself and they, having to kill them to fulfill your objective, or don’t show the world the truth(?) at all. I don’t see any other option besides being honest with them and using the old “Come to the Dark Side” or “Let’s work together.” clichés. (Also, sorry for pronouns, my Ortega is female, so i might type gender specific pronouns)
Sure, never disagreed with that. I just say that anyway it will come with huge suffering for both MC and Ortega. And that’s why I totally can see why people would want to hope for a happy ending already now.
I hope not, seeing as that’s the ending I’m hoping for. Our character might be in jail or something, but if Ortega can forgive us…
Well, that or Sidestep’s true body dies and we marry Ortega as our puppet. 
WHAT?! That’s horrible, i mean, they are a living human and all, i hope we will get the chance to free them to their old life someday
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If they really wake up…if they don’t end up as MC’s stalker… if they don’t end up as another one of the ROs…
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Weird, it seems i can’t quote spoilers…[quote=“Sammysam, post:1793, topic:16217”]
If they really wake up…if they don’t end up as MC’s stalker…
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The former seems a bit unlikely, but i have faith that this game will end in one of these clichés with a blue screen and photos of the characters with happy descriptions.
As for the latter, they wouldn’t be a threat. Unless the MC is surprisingly stupid and doesn’t erase their memories of being a doll. And even if MC doesn’t, what will they do? No superpowers(?), no clues to MC whereabouts, no money(?)…
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We don’t now (but I anyway meant to use the term “stalker” hyperbolic in this case to be honest.)
By now the puppet is an unknown in MC’s plan, alone because they don’t know how/if the longtime manipulation by a telepath influenced them. Could they develop a resistance against MC’s powers? Do they remember anything from their possession?
We don’t know. And we also don’t know if they will end up doing anything that could bring them/us unwanted attention. If the Farm is still looking for MC or generally does research about telepathy then the puppet also could be of interest for them, for example.
The puppet is an unknown not just for us readers but also for MC (strangely a rarety in this story, at least for now.)
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No spoilers here, but I can assure everyone that you will have every opportunity to dig yourself a hole and fall into it. And maybe find someone to drag down with you… or help you out.
My aim with making this story is to allow for various paths, how divergent I manage to get them in the end I don’t know, but there is a BIG one in book two… which means writing so much extra but it’s worth it.
I just want to hear everyone go wttf… that’s what makes me smile.
Also, I have a light concussion now, so net time will be limited while my brain calms down.
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You live off a steady supply of our delicious anxiety and fangirl tears I swear.
Anybody who knows me in person would attest to this very thing.
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Finally got time to reread this story through to the new update. Still working my way through the several hundred posts that appeared in the meantime, but I just couldn’t wait to get my thoughts out.
Visiting Ortega in the hospital was great! First I beat him half to death, breaking his arm and several ribs, then I rushed to the hospital and sat by his side and held his hand as he woke up! 
He sounds like he’s really set on capturing this new villain though, but it doesn’t sound like he’s suspecting me of anything. Which, to be honest, I kinda have mixed feelings about. Obviously my character doesn’t want to be caught, but as a player, I’m kinda hoping that Ortega will starting getting a bit more suspicious, because I’m really looking forward to the great reveal.
So, remember my sneaky plan about slowly manipulating Ortega to fall in love with me? Well, I ended up kissing him as I left instead… 
My MC seems to really have some impulse control problems when she’s around Ortega…
After playing through the update, I tried going through it again to see what would change if I chose Sidestep as my villain name. Now I am conflicted… On one hand, picking Sidestep as the name kinda goes against the whole wanting to distance themselves from their past and create a new identity thing my MC has going. On the other, Ortega’s reactions and the extra irony and personal layer are so sweet. I don’t know which to pick now…
I noticed MC seems to have a lot of apprehension about being seen naked, especially at the hospital. Working off of the previously discussed MC is a re-gene theory, I have a theory for why this may be: I suspect, while their skin color is normal and their hands and head are clear, other parts of their body might be covered in re-gene tattoos, which would be a constant reminder of their origin and immediately expose their nature to anyone who saw them naked. If MC was intended to be an undercover unit, it would make sense for them to be able to pass as human when clothed, but be clearly marked so they could be identified and returned to owner in event they got injured or lost.
Lastly, I compiled a list of bugs, typos and potential mistakes I found as I went. I apologize if some (or all) of these have already been reported, like I said I’m still catching up on the thread.
[details=Bugs]It feels odd walking down the street as a normal woman where you had fought as a silvery goddess just minutes earlier.
Not sure if this change is intentional or not, but it used to say normal man, which I think makes sense considering the body I’m wearing at the time is male.
You are not a telepath here, but how do you feel about that?
*You hate the loss of your telepathy.
*You don’t like it, but it can be handy.
*You like taking a break from it now and then.
Choices are usually first person, but in this case they are second person.
“I’m going to rip your off arms and send you back to your handlers like the dolls you are!”
Working quickly, you begin to remove the armored module housing your target You can feel the alien minds chattering at you, nervous and afraid
Missing period.
You in your bed for a moment, breathing hard, trying to remember where you are.
Think you’re missing a word or two here.
That way your bdy can sleep without any more dreams catching you unaware.
You look between around the table, wondering who will be the one to explain things. That says a lot about group dynamics after all.
You are not sure which one of us is the most relieved when you are finally allowed to leave the building.
Should this be second person?
Something she can remember than she wakes up.
“Do what?” You try a shrug, but fails
fail
“You were a selfish jerk.” That’s an understatement, and not even Ortega an argue that.
Just something to sit on when you take a breather to get some food in yiu, and right now the perfect target to test the accuracy of your secret weapon.
The sooner you is done with this task, the sooner you can slide back into your real body.
are
Still, out here he has more of an advantage before, and even more of one if he plays it smart and waits for backup.
Think you’re missing a “than” or something.
Is this a sore spot for her? You’re not sure, it’s the closest one you’ve find so far,
found
Still, it’s nothing a week of rest and a few ice-packs can fix, so you are counting yourself lucky.
Think you meant “can’t”.
It feels cold when you sit down it.
Just make sure that she is alright, and say that I’ll talk to him later, okay?"
Variable issue, belive this is Ortega asking MC to check in on the puppet.
“I will. Do you want me to tell you the truth about how hurt you are?”
Think this should be the puppet pronoun.
And in this chaos, Dr. Mortum had the clout to arrange both for a private room, and a doctor to examine you.
That’s sweet of him, but a little odd when it was Ortega I went on the date with.
“You buried Sidestep. Now I have taken his name.”
Sidestep momentarily forgot she’s a girl.[/details]
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Hmm… would it be possible to include or adapt the cut content to future instalments?
@malinryden
I’m sorry to hear about the concussion! I hope it goes away without any complications.
@ anybody who wants to answer
How are you guys visualizing the characters in terms of specifics such build, height, distinguishing features, style of casual dress, and style of hero costume? What are some scenes you guys think would make for good but shoddily drawn illustrations? What would be good starting references for general aesthetics of some of the costumes?
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Wha? Are you alright? 
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I just want to say that I am so happy with the new expletives option.
“Ortega? I… yeah… I am. Alive I mean…” you manage to say, not sure how to explain this, still feeling as if you had just seen a ghost. Or maybe you are one. “I just… oh fuck me, what has it been? Ten years and change?”
You know him after all. You know him well. You can see the labored breath, the eyes focused directly on you, the way he reacts to every single move you make, he...
... he is trying to figure out who you are.
One you've recognized the look in his eyes, you curse yourself for not spotting it sooner. The way he moves, the way he tries out attacks as if he's more interested in seeing your reaction than his own results.
Oh fuck me. **(It also later says "Can't have that." but I read that afterwards.)**
Yeah." Ortega nods and looks away. “You’re right about that I suppose.”
“Oh fuck me, when did my life turn this complicated.”
**But then it backfired:**
"That's not fair..."
"I don't give a oh fuck me. You're staying in this bed, and that's final. You're not helping anybody in your state."
Ortega. Bruised and looking like hell in what looks to be a borrowed overcoat, but on his feet and looking worried.
Oh fuck me.
**Still makes sense but kinda backfired?:**
Herald, however, Herald is... oh oh fuck me how the cameras love Herald.
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