Enchanted in Blood WIP (Updated 20. Jan. 2021.)

Kane_Smith_B_In_K_Pa · 2020-11-22T07:39:07.187Z

I second that both the emotions and the lure really bring you into the story

vara · 2020-11-22T11:35:54.993Z

thanks, they’ve been corrected

Daxterix · 2020-11-22T11:36:29.518Z

Damn you cliffhangers and damn me for falling in love with this wip.

I need MOAR!

vara · 2020-11-22T11:37:39.198Z

varada_naveen:

it doesn’t appear in the phone on stats page.

Dashingdon is sometimes pretty slow with the pictures unfortunately This probably won’t be a problem in the finished app.

vara · 2020-11-22T11:57:30.298Z

spiriter:

I’m absolutely in heaven with everyone pining after the MC, the looks of jealousy feed my soul

Writing those scenes was like:
Lca

spiriter:

I can’t wait to see what the group dynamic is gonna be like when we start working on the case, I feel like it’s gonna be so chaotic (mostly courtesy of Quinn probably )

Yeah, it’s gonna be a bit different later when they start getting to know each other better And now there were some bosses in the room as well so… not that fun

spiriter:

I really wanna know why Atin was so bothered by that picture

Heh. Atin has some… issues. You will definitely discover what later in the story so I can’t tell more

French_Fries · 2020-11-22T15:55:01.190Z

Edit:

Eiwynn · 2020-11-22T16:43:18.423Z

Once an author/developer makes a decision about their WiP, do not continue to press on that point.

@vara - Please edit your first post to indicate the topic of Bisexuality and the siblings’ gender is closed for now.

@French_Fries – Please do not respond to posts you flag. It is against the forum rules. Also, you really should not demand people go to outside sources, like Tumblr accounts. Linking asks is o.k. but leave it up to the individual to choose.

Everyone else – do not broach this topic again, until the author/developer reopens it.

Next time suspensions will be issued.

Maria_Winfield · 2020-11-22T20:15:08.055Z

On a brighter note-
I FINALLY STOP FLIRTING WITH EVERYTHING THAT MOVES
Flirted with Atin the whole time and he may be my favorite at the moment…

But then Quinn comes along looking all good with his shining buttons- no no no My hoe is coming out

Mistyleaf123 · 2020-11-22T20:43:30.861Z

lol that’s me and my MC too!

why does every RO have to be so attracting

vara · 2020-11-22T20:50:06.191Z

Maria_Winfield:

But then Quinn comes along looking all good with his shining buttons

Mistyleaf123:

lol that’s me and my MC too!

My testing MCs also went “oooooh shinnyyyyy” almost every time… And then I had to remind myself that NO, I’M TESTING NOW

ArchivistAlpha096 · 2020-11-22T22:14:03.544Z

One. I’m assuming that the reason that Adin was looking at that picture of the way she was, has something to do with her past. Maybe she interacted with a human family who had a child who disappeared? Might explain why she join the police force, if we ever get that.
Two. Quinn has some sort of magic? I assume. Only way she could physically stop Roga from ripping, what’s his name bagels? Head off. Even though that would’ve been fun to see.

vara · 2020-11-22T22:29:47.903Z

ArchivistAlpha096:

I’m assuming that the reason that Adin was looking at that picture of the way she was, has something to do with her past. Maybe she interacted with a human family who had a child who disappeared?

Hmm you are getting close there, but not quite

ArchivistAlpha096:

Quinn has some sort of magic?

Heh good eye Quinn did almost the same thing to Roga as Agent Vega did to the MC when they first met.

Also… did you notice the bagel I sneaked in there?

ArchivistAlpha096 · 2020-11-23T04:46:48.207Z

Almost the same thing? How do you get that? Agent bagel, I’m gonna call him bagel now, because, bagel, equals funny
Agent bagel when shaking the MC’s hand, consciously or not, made it pretty clear that the agent had magic. Roga and Quinn’s interaction seemed more like Quinn either distracted, or just took that memory.
It’s almost like Roga just forgot about the memory, or just doesn’t register its existence anymore. Could be something different, but.
Also? All this talk about bagels has made me hungry. Unfortunately I ate all the crumpets, and we actually do have bagels. Period
Also. Are we going to ever got a look at that Rune carved axe in your commanders office? That sounds like something I would like to take a look at.
When I say look, I mean other than when Commander decides to instant murder us for something along the line.

vara · 2020-11-23T11:49:56.184Z

ArchivistAlpha096:

Almost the same thing? How do you get that?

Agent Vega (or Bagel if you insist) enchanted the MC on purpose when he touched them (I think it was clear that he did it on purpose when he said that he liked watching the rookies riled up). It was very brief but he used magic on you which left you disoriented and light-headed as a side-effect. Now I think it’s not hard to deduce that Quinn also used some kind of enchantment on Roga when they touched them, which left Roga disoriented and light-headed as a side-effect

ArchivistAlpha096:

Are we going to ever got a look at that Rune carved axe in your commanders office?

Hehe that’s actually just a myth. Nobody in the Division knows if it exists and I’m not telling

ArchivistAlpha096 · 2020-11-23T14:04:42.931Z

I read Quinn and Roga’s interaction a bit differently, but meh. That’s just me.

Cackle. Fair enough
I can see about a 50-50 chance of an existing, or Commander, just doing it for laughs at some point, and then it kind of just sticking around.

Welldread · 2020-11-23T21:13:34.223Z

Soo… hitting Osborn doesn’t have any repercussions? This doesn’t feel right, hitting another person is an assault, even if they are an asshole, this is not right and we are an officer. They must take responsibility for their actions, but in proper way, we are goddamn cops:p! Even if nobody report about incident, words travel fast. And we dont get any kind of scolding from Jakeman, and I have a feeling that everybody already knows. Righteous things aren’t just all the time. Everybody need to take responsibility for their actions, or be ready to do it. This is my opinion:p
P.S. Is it me, or Osborn written to be loved to hate/total asshole:p?

King2 · 2020-11-23T21:20:55.610Z

Yeah he seems to written that way. Hopefully he has some other side to him though cause I never really liked characters who are just there to be hated on, makes them seem one-dimensional and pointless.

ArchivistAlpha096 · 2020-11-24T00:16:26.205Z

I mean, considering what he did, and the fact that everybody probably knows what he did, as well as what you did, maybe the general consensus is that, they just don’t scold you at that point? Possibly?
Maybe they’ve just all decided that the person who technically assaulted a civilian deserved being then punched by a colleague or something.
That’s just my opinion though.

vara · 2020-11-24T13:07:14.998Z

ArchivistAlpha096:

I mean, considering what he did, and the fact that everybody probably knows what he did, as well as what you did, maybe the general consensus is that, they just don’t scold you at that point? Possibly?

Yes, you are right at that. If the incident gets reported, then of course Jakeman would have had to have a word with the MC. But nobody reported it because they all felt like it was deserved and anyway it was only one slap, not a whole melee.

Welldread:

This doesn’t feel right, hitting another person is an assault, even if they are an asshole

Then just don’t hit him if it doesn’t feel right to you. There are three other options for that. I put them there for those who would feel uncomfortable slapping someone, which is completely understandable and there is nothing wrong with it.

Jeremy_Stumbaugh2 · 2020-11-24T15:18:50.575Z

Man I let out an audible groan when I saw I got to the end of the demo, enjoying it so far and can’t wait for more!