Destiny of the Exile (WIP with Demo Updated Nov 24)

Zeus · 2016-10-10T13:36:20.949Z

Definitely sounds like a great story from the plot but you had me hooked when I saw an army of lovers since I’m sap for the romance

Nael · 2016-10-10T14:13:27.847Z

One thing I’d like too see more in games in general is more than one representation per character. People who don’t belong to a minority, or just one or two of them, tends to put like, 1 black man and that’s all. He’s cis, he’s straight, he’s alossexual.
I myself, am a non-binary person, panromantic and assexual, and despite the “variable” characters that have genders changed when we choose our sexuality, I don’t recall seeing any character like me. What I mean is, people can have more than just 1 or 2 aspects out of the society’s standards.
If I can add, maybe you can consider putting some mental disorders? Like a character who has depression, or something like that. Or even something like dyslexia.

This post got too long, I’m sorry I just took the chance to talk, since you asked feedbacks and I actually feel good now

anon57826008 · 2016-10-10T22:24:14.306Z

Now i’m excited, go Lizzy!
I’ll be happy to help.

Lizzy:

(If I missed someone I’d also like to know so I can work to incorporate you as well)

Sooooo one thing that I miss a LOT is the freedom to customize my MC body, to combine the both genders. Since i don’t feel like man or woman even if I use feminine pronouns, when i have this freedom i can identify myself with the MC

Lizzy · 2016-10-11T01:50:57.552Z

NB is definitely one of the areas that I need help in, which is why I created this thread early before I had anything to really show anyone. I want to make sure that I represent people fairly in this project. If you don’t mind sharing with me your perspectives I’d be happy to talk over PMs about it

Faded · 2016-10-11T05:14:00.617Z

Lizzy:

I am planning to have at least 3 options per sexual orientation

Lizzy:

I want to make sure that I represent people fairly

What happens if I sexually identify as an apache attack helicopter?

Lizzy · 2016-10-11T05:21:33.422Z

I’m afraid it’s a fantasy world that doesn’t have helicopters so you would be lonely

Faded · 2016-10-11T05:23:56.248Z

What! Siros gets skeletor, but I don’t get my attack helicopter?

This is messed up…

Joking aside, I like the idea of the project, as well as trying to accurately represent all the various sexuality(s) in the modern world.

EDIT: I already have two projects I’m working on, but one is on hold. If you need a proofreader in the future, just pm me. I’d be glad to help.

Lizzy · 2016-10-11T05:41:40.430Z

I was drunk when he asked

Thank you The thread that was up a few weeks ago about transgender representation was what really got me, I hadn’t really given the issue much thought until then and decided that I wanted to do something about it since I know how much I hate playing games where I don’t feel represented. Hopefully I will get enough input from community members to do this justice

SiROSTRiKE · 2016-10-11T10:48:56.296Z

Wire_Ryse:

What happens if I sexually identify as an apache attack helicopter?

Wishes he still had his facepalm gif ready.

Wire_Ryse:

Siros gets skeletor, but I don’t get my attack helicopter?

Because i’m Batman!

Faded · 2016-10-13T08:12:09.854Z

SiROSTRiKE:

Because i’m Batman!

Lizzy · 2016-10-13T15:51:18.468Z

So as I work on rewriting several of the initial ROs as well as trying to rework some of the story with feedback I already have in order to put up a demo, I decided to post some of my character notes about a few of the ROs to give people a rough idea and get some feedback on them. Please me gentle

Princess Ella
Orientation: Lesbian
Princess Ella is the princess of the neighboring kingdom of Irannia. She is very emotional and known as quite a crybaby. She is known for being kind and compassionate, always trying to find a way to make those around her happy. Her father is worried about placing the kingdom under Ella’s control because he sees her as lazy, inattentive and a hopeless romantic, spending far more time staring into space lost in fantasies of finding her true love instead of focusing on her studies. Thankfully for Ella she is intelligent and a quick learner, so she does well in her classes if she can be roused from her dreamland.

Princess Jenna
Orientation: Straight
Princess Jenna is Ella’s younger sister, unlike her sister she often has trouble dealing with emotions, both her own as well as those of others. Jenna also runs into troubles when dealing with people in general, and is generally thought of as rather sarcastic. While she is far more grounded in reality than her sister and a terribly hard worker, her father still judges her as an even worse candidate to run the kingdom since she lacks her sisters intelligence and people skills.

Lady Bria
Orientation: Straight
Lady Bria is most known for her quick temper, she is intelligent and often views the people around her as fools, causing her no end of irritation. She has a tough shell and often seems to be cold and distant, the only emotion that most people ever seem to invoke from her is anger. Deep down she can be caring, despite what her servants think. Bria tends to have a rather cynical outlook on romance and expects any romantic match to disappoint her like everyone else around her.

Squire Maxwell Meadowbrook
Orientation: Gay
Squire Maxwell always dreamed of being a knight, to rush off into danger and save some dashing Prince. His dreams began to become reality when a knight that had been passing through stopped at his parent’s in. She immediately saw potential in the boy and after securing his parents’ consent appointed him her squire. Maxwell is confident and athletic, qualities that will serve him well on his road to knighthood, however he is also seen by some as rather vain and reckless.

Emily DeVille
Orientation: Bi
Emily is the only daughter to a wealthy and influential merchant family that had made their vast fortune in the shipping industry. Emily is resigned to the fate of taking over the family business out of fear of disappointing her father, but its not her dream. Since she was young she had always wanted to be a playwright and works on scripts when she can find some privacy, her father had made it quite clear to her that he would never approve a life of creative poverty for his only child.

Lady Stephanie
Orientation: Pan
Stephanie is well known for her charm, she seems able to get most of the people around her to do whatever she asks of them with a simple ‘please’ and a smile. Those that see through her facade tend to see her as spoiled, selfish and manipulative. She enjoys to dance and is quite graceful, on numerous occasions she has even caused people to stumble and fall as they watch her glide through her family’s castle.

Lord Wesley
Orientation: Gay

Wesley is older brother of Lady Stephanie and is known throughout the lands for his wit and striking good looks. He is always at the forefront of fashion, causing much of the nobility to feverishly attempt to imitate his style. Wesley’s detractors see see him as arrogant and disingenuous, most of which are girls that had advances rebuffed by him and even then they only speak such things in whispers behind his back.

Scribblesome · 2016-10-13T17:35:56.059Z

Is everyone but Ella and Jenna from your/MC’s country? So they’d all be at your court?

Lizzy · 2016-10-13T17:36:57.778Z

Scribblesome:

Is everyone but Ella and Jenna from your/MC’s country? So they’d all be at your court?

Of those that are posted, yes, the others are part of the Empire

Scribblesome · 2016-10-13T17:45:50.130Z

I think I like the sound of Lady Bria, even if I would have to roll a male MC Always have a soft spot for the ice queen types!

idonotlikeusernames · 2016-10-13T17:56:34.674Z

Scribblesome:

So they’d all be at your court?

We’re exiled from Court (and possibly the entire country) at the start of the game though, remember? Our mc’s are probably the lowest of the low now and given that we’re accused of a murder we didn’t commit it must have been quite the important individual that we’ve supposedly murdered because usually crown princes are virtually immune from any sort of prosecution or punishment, whatever their crimes.

Scribblesome · 2016-10-13T18:03:27.961Z

Good point, though i thought there might be enough time pre-exile to start a romance, and then you’d have some great angst when you get banished!

WaltzinElf · 2016-10-13T18:15:29.776Z

ooo princess ella sounds so lovely! i love it when a woman character is able to be romantic whilst still being presented as intelligent! can’t wait to romance her

Eiwynn · 2016-10-13T19:08:41.518Z

Stephanie is an interesting character as written; other people’s perceptions may not always be true.

Edit - what is meant by “Pan” again? My mind is not figuring it out at the moment.

Faded · 2016-10-13T19:14:31.144Z

Eiwynn:

Edit - what is meant by “Pan” again? My mind is not figuring it out at the moment.

I believe pansexual means that they don’t care for sexual orientation or sexual identity when they look for love.

I might be wrong, but that’s my understanding of pansexual.

Eiwynn · 2016-10-13T19:15:47.315Z

Thank you. So Stephanie is happy being bff as well as a RO … that sounds wonderful.