Dawn of Heroes (WIP)

I’ve begun work on my new game Dawn of Heroes. It is my first time really trying to get a story to paper. While English is my only language, I’ve always been terrible with it and look forward to all feedback! This project has been a little over a year in progress but I have started focusing on development more in the last six months.

I do not have a writing background, but have enjoyed telling stories through RPGs for a long time.

Between drafts the story was switched from second person to first person. If you find a shift in viewpoint mid-sentence please let me know. I’ve looked at these words so much I am struggling to catch these anomalies.

I plan to go back over everything and add more/better character descriptions. Some things are there to make sure that I was just getting words to paper. There are also some place holder texts and options, that are noted. I have plans to add to them as ideas come to me.

Currently it’s about 25% done unless I find more ideas, 9 Chapters in, with a total word count around 62k so far. I’m not sure how often I plan on updating.

To play the demo, go here: https://dashingdon.com/go/8607

You select the gender of the main character and the main villain at the same time.

Earth. Modern Day. The world continues to view superheroes as comic book or movie characters. The abilities of those extraordinary individuals are not possible in this universe. This will soon change. A story is about to begin as someone steps forward to inspire this dawn of heroes. All heroes have a beginning. This one begins in Ryker City. A small city with a big town mentality. Select your character’s gender, sexuality, profession, and powers. Start a romance, or not. Save a city, or fail to. The choices are yours, the consequences are impactful. Welcome to the Dawn of Heroes.

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• a save system is always useful.
• could we get a list of names for the MC to choose from?
• the bisexual option being “dating a man and woman at the same time” seems stereotypical.
• I prefer a second person POV to a first person POV in interactive fiction, but that’s just my preference
• the power selection is confusing. What are sensory powers? “Miscalanious” ones (assuming you meant miscellaneous)?
• the chapters are quite short, I’d consider merging some of them - in many of them, there seems to be no motivation for the chapter to end.
• it would be nice to have more options for customising the costume - a monochrome version? A glittery one? A shining one? Who’s going to stop a superhero?
• just to make things cleaner, I’d end each choice with a full stop.

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Question, may you please add a description of each stat please? I have no idea what Shrewd is or does.

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Sounds interesting, I have some questions

In the future, will there be character customization? Hair… Eyes… Or customize clothing or armor?

Will I be able to be a hero, villain or anti-hero? Will I be able to be a powerless person, but a very smart or strategic person? (Example batman or iron man)

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Generally, what kind of enemies do we face? (No need for spoiler)

Sounds interesting so far

  • Save system fixed! Sorry about that.
  • Yes, I wanted to add that. I will make sure to do it by days end.
  • I think you’re right, I will change the wording on this. Thank you for the feedback!
  • I can understand the power creation system being confusing. I will try to add more explanations and break everything down better.
  • I will consider merging chapters and do better on motivations.
  • I definitely want to add more options for the costume! I may even overhaul that section in the future.
  • Thank you for all your feedback!
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Yes, I do plan to implement character physical customization including adding more options for the actual hero outfit.

There is no option for being a villain. I find it requires reworking too much and would take away from the story. However, Hero and Anti-hero options will be in. I will try to add that to the description of the story.

If you are powerless or not is up to you. Explore the game/story with the character that you are wanting. That’s why there is not point-buy system, I was just wanting people to have fun with the character they want as the lead.

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It will start with small generic powerless bad guys. As the story progresses you will start to interact with super powered individuals, not all criminals, but many opposed to the main character.

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Do we get to make our gadgets if we go down the tech route?

At this time the plan is to be handed devices. I’m not against creating them, I just need to figure out a good way of implementing it.

I updated the demo with name options.

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And apart from villains, will there also be evil organizations? (it does not matter if it is headed by an individual with power or not)

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Well if the job we work at actually pays us we could use the money to buy components to make gadgets and weapons and your stats can help decide if you fail or not while trying to make a device I got the idea from hero or villain Genesis maybe you should look up his code it could help give you ideas if you want to I forgot the name of the guy who made the game sorry about that.

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One more thing I forgot to tell you if you do decide to go down the handing devices Route make sure that this person has the clout to give me these gadgets because I don’t know about you but I’m not putting my life on the line bye using gadgets made from some guys basement workshop unless it’s my basement workshop because if my gadgets fail then at least I could say it’s my fault Plus I think it might be a waste of the technical skills we seem to have.

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I have placed a definition section in the stats screen.

I don’t want get into spoilers, but there is an organization, you will have to figure out if you would call it “evil”.

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havent finished it yet but found this
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My hero! Fixed.

Okay the armored hero path surprised me.

I was thinking a Guyver / Blue Beetle sort of thing. No mention of growing an exoskeleton.

Was the idea something like Unbreakable, a character with enhanced resistance to injury?

I can’t seem to go beyond the power selection for the customization route. Have you not gotten to that part yet, or is there some issue here?

Armored Hero? The only premade route with an exoskeleton was the tech device route, no natural powers. The exoskeleton is part of a power armor, not natural. I’ll try to better convey that.

To exit the custom powers menu select the option “Done With Powers”. This is on the main menu, the screen that lists the different powers types (Offensive, Movement, etc.)

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