Dawn of Heroes (WIP)

I’ve begun work on my new game Dawn of Heroes. It is my first time really trying to get a story to paper. While English is my only language, I’ve always been terrible with it and look forward to all feedback! This project has been a little over a year in progress but I have started focusing on development more in the last six months.

I do not have a writing background, but have enjoyed telling stories through RPGs for a long time.

Between drafts the story was switched from second person to first person. If you find a shift in viewpoint mid-sentence please let me know. I’ve looked at these words so much I am struggling to catch these anomalies.

I plan to go back over everything and add more/better character descriptions. Some things are there to make sure that I was just getting words to paper. There are also some place holder texts and options, that are noted. I have plans to add to them as ideas come to me.

Currently it’s about 25% done unless I find more ideas, 9 Chapters in, with a total word count around 90k so far. I’m not sure how often I plan on updating.

To play the demo, go here: https://dashingdon.com/go/8607

You select the gender of the main character and the main villain at the same time.

Earth. Modern Day. The world continues to view superheroes as comic book or movie characters. The abilities of those extraordinary individuals are not possible in this universe. This will soon change. A story is about to begin as someone steps forward to inspire this dawn of heroes. All heroes have a beginning. This one begins in Ryker City. A small city with a big town mentality. Select your character’s gender, sexuality, profession, and powers. Start a romance, or not. Save a city, or fail to. The choices are yours, the consequences are impactful. Welcome to the Dawn of Heroes.

List of Updates
2021
Oct
10/22 Week’s end update
  • Added a save system
  • Updated wording for sexual preference
  • Fixed reported spelling errors
  • Added a 'This is the end of the demo" page
  • Added attribute and skill descriptions to the Show Stats Menu
  • Fix reported gender swap error(s)
  • Added\Requires text for Flight with Requires Earth flaw
  • Fixed Line of Sight appearing as an option on wrong powers bug
10/30 Week’s end update
  • Added text for Swinging options. More still to be added.
  • Fixed repeated lines for combat as reported.
  • Fixed reported grammatical error
  • Fixed vulnerable misspelling
  • Added Auto-forcefield defense to reported scene
  • Added more durability and forcefield text against police officer

Still working on:

  • Power descriptions
  • Chapter 9 third route, introducing a new hero
  • Custom Equipment System
  • Adding more sensory use in story
  • Battle text for hidden Chapter 8 CEO route fight
Nov
11/5 Week’s end update
  • Fixed Chapter 5 ‘EXPECTED_CLOSE_CURLY’’ error
  • Fixed Chapter 9, line 260 error
  • Fixed reported spelling mistake(s)
  • Added descriptions to premade builds
  • Added descriptions for powers
  • Removed “Metal” element
  • Added Telekinesis Flaw “Can Only Move Metal”
  • Removed “Gravity” element
  • Fixed Character Creation Error when canceled powers transfer their Flaws
  • Fixed Super Hero Rank calculation bug, giving false SHR scores
  • Fixed the Toughness and Reflexes not properly adjusting when selected as powers

Still working on:

  • Chapter 9 third route
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
  • Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
11/12 Week’s end update
  • Fixed reported gender swap error.
  • Added text for forcefields blocking wind when flying text in Chapter 5.
  • Added “Only Works on Metal” Flaw to Forcefield

Still working on:

  • Chapter 9 third route
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
  • Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
  • Adding more Mind Read text
11/19 Week’s end update

Fixed Jordan’s gender swap typos in Chapter 8

Still working on:

  • Chapter 9 third route
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
  • Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
  • Adding more Mind Read text
11/26 Week’s end update
  • Released Chapter 9 third route. Enjoy the Irishman.
  • Input a custom pronoun option
  • Allowed for the player to select non-binary sexual interest.
    • This will switch some love interests to be non-binary
  • Fixed the work LI not having a name if MC was bisexual bug
  • In Custom Build Hero, changed the default/top selections to ‘None’ and ‘Hero does not have “…”’
  • Added ‘Misc. Stats’ to the ‘Show Stats’.
  • Added ‘Glossary’ to the ‘Show Stats’. This has not been filled in; it is just a placeholder.
  • Added some Mind Reading Text. More to be added.
  • Added the ability to Disable the Karma System

Still working on (in no particular order):

  • Chapter 9 final route.
  • Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
  • Factory Worker route
  • Chapter 10
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
  • Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
Dec
12/3 Week's end update
  • Fixed reported gender flip
    Still working on (in no particular order):
  • Chapter 9 final route.
  • Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
  • Factory Worker route
  • Chapter 10
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
  • Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
12/11 Week’s end update

Still working on (in no particular order):
• Chapter 9 final route.
• Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
• Factory Worker route
• Chapter 10
• Custom gadget system
• Adding more power options/uses to the story
• Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route

12/24 Week’s end update
  • Changed wording when choosing gender to better explain that it sets the main character’s gender/sexual preference(s) and O’Rielly’s.

Still working on:

Still working on (in no particular order):
• Chapter 9 final route.
• Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
• Factory Worker route
• Chapter 10
• Custom gadget system
• Adding more power options/uses to the story
• Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route

12/31 Week’s end update

Still working on (in no particular order):
• Chapter 9 final route.
• Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
• Factory Worker route
• Chapter 10
• Custom gadget system
• Adding more power options/uses to the story
• Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route

2022
Jan
1/7 Week’s end update

Still working on (in no particular order):
• Chapter 9 final route.
• Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
• Factory Worker route
• Chapter 10
• Custom gadget system
• Adding more power options/uses to the story
• Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO rout

1/14 Week’s end update
  • Fixed the romance description in the first post for Austin/Aurora. The character is IT not CCO.

Still working on (everything after the first four are not in any order):

    1. Chapter 9 final route.
    1. Heroic Identity Costume Revamp
    1. Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
    1. A new Job: Factory Worker route most likely
  • Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
  • Chapter 10
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
1/21 Week’s end update

Still working on (everything after the first four are not in any order):

    1. Chapter 9 final route.
    1. Heroic Identity Costume Revamp
    1. Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
    1. A new Job: Factory Worker route most likely
  • Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
  • Chapter 10
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
1/28 Week’s end update
  • Fixed a bug making it so Powered Armored builds did not get options in combat.
  • Reached 80k word count
    Still working on (everything after the first four are not in any order):
    1. Chapter 9 final route.
    1. Heroic Identity Costume Revamp
    1. Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
    1. A new Job: Factory Worker route most likely
  • Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
  • Chapter 10
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
Feb
2/4 Week’s end update

Still working on (everything after the first four are not in any order):

    1. Chapter 9 final route.
    1. Heroic Identity Costume Revamp
    1. Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
    1. A new Job: Factory Worker route most likely
  • Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
  • Chapter 10
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
2/11 Week’s end update
  • Wordcount is now at 90k

Still working on (everything after the first four are not in any order):

    1. Chapter 9 final route.
    1. Heroic Identity Costume Revamp
    1. Battle text for hidden fight in Chapter 8 CEO route
    1. A new Job: Factory Worker route most likely
  • Alternative Chapter 7 encounter
  • Chapter 10
  • Custom gadget system
  • Adding more power options/uses to the story
Romance Options

Not all Romances are created equal.

Masked Options
  • Aegis: Straight Female
  • Camouflage: Bisexual Female
  • Lugh: Straight Male
  • Breaker: Gay Female
  • Genesis: Adjusts to MC’s preference
Non-Heroes
  • Kilchii Jacox: Police Officer. Gay male
  • Silvia/Silvester: Reporter/Video blogger. Gender Adapts to MC’s preference
  • Michael Schwartz: CEO of Unified Industry Standards LLC. Bisexual male
Work Romance
CEO
  • Valentina/Valentin: CCO of Global Energy Management Solutions. Gender Adapts to MC’s preference

  • Kyra: Lawyer to Global Energy Management Solutions. Bisexual female

IT
  • Aurora/Austin: IT Phone tech of Global Energy Management Solutions. Gender Adapts to MC’s preference

  • Kyra?: Lawyer to Global Energy Management Solutions. Bisexual female. Not sure if I will include this option yet

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• a save system is always useful.
• could we get a list of names for the MC to choose from?
• the bisexual option being “dating a man and woman at the same time” seems stereotypical.
• I prefer a second person POV to a first person POV in interactive fiction, but that’s just my preference
• the power selection is confusing. What are sensory powers? “Miscalanious” ones (assuming you meant miscellaneous)?
• the chapters are quite short, I’d consider merging some of them - in many of them, there seems to be no motivation for the chapter to end.
• it would be nice to have more options for customising the costume - a monochrome version? A glittery one? A shining one? Who’s going to stop a superhero?
• just to make things cleaner, I’d end each choice with a full stop.

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Question, may you please add a description of each stat please? I have no idea what Shrewd is or does.

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Sounds interesting, I have some questions

In the future, will there be character customization? Hair… Eyes… Or customize clothing or armor?

Will I be able to be a hero, villain or anti-hero? Will I be able to be a powerless person, but a very smart or strategic person? (Example batman or iron man)

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Generally, what kind of enemies do we face? (No need for spoiler)

Sounds interesting so far

  • Save system fixed! Sorry about that.
  • Yes, I wanted to add that. I will make sure to do it by days end.
  • I think you’re right, I will change the wording on this. Thank you for the feedback!
  • I can understand the power creation system being confusing. I will try to add more explanations and break everything down better.
  • I will consider merging chapters and do better on motivations.
  • I definitely want to add more options for the costume! I may even overhaul that section in the future.
  • Thank you for all your feedback!
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Yes, I do plan to implement character physical customization including adding more options for the actual hero outfit.

There is no option for being a villain. I find it requires reworking too much and would take away from the story. However, Hero and Anti-hero options will be in. I will try to add that to the description of the story.

If you are powerless or not is up to you. Explore the game/story with the character that you are wanting. That’s why there is not point-buy system, I was just wanting people to have fun with the character they want as the lead.

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It will start with small generic powerless bad guys. As the story progresses you will start to interact with super powered individuals, not all criminals, but many opposed to the main character.

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Do we get to make our gadgets if we go down the tech route?

At this time the plan is to be handed devices. I’m not against creating them, I just need to figure out a good way of implementing it.

I updated the demo with name options.

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And apart from villains, will there also be evil organizations? (it does not matter if it is headed by an individual with power or not)

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Well if the job we work at actually pays us we could use the money to buy components to make gadgets and weapons and your stats can help decide if you fail or not while trying to make a device I got the idea from hero or villain Genesis maybe you should look up his code it could help give you ideas if you want to I forgot the name of the guy who made the game sorry about that.

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One more thing I forgot to tell you if you do decide to go down the handing devices Route make sure that this person has the clout to give me these gadgets because I don’t know about you but I’m not putting my life on the line bye using gadgets made from some guys basement workshop unless it’s my basement workshop because if my gadgets fail then at least I could say it’s my fault Plus I think it might be a waste of the technical skills we seem to have.

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I have placed a definition section in the stats screen.

I don’t want get into spoilers, but there is an organization, you will have to figure out if you would call it “evil”.

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havent finished it yet but found this
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found another one
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My hero! Fixed.

Okay the armored hero path surprised me.

I was thinking a Guyver / Blue Beetle sort of thing. No mention of growing an exoskeleton.

Was the idea something like Unbreakable, a character with enhanced resistance to injury?

I can’t seem to go beyond the power selection for the customization route. Have you not gotten to that part yet, or is there some issue here?

Armored Hero? The only premade route with an exoskeleton was the tech device route, no natural powers. The exoskeleton is part of a power armor, not natural. I’ll try to better convey that.

To exit the custom powers menu select the option “Done With Powers”. This is on the main menu, the screen that lists the different powers types (Offensive, Movement, etc.)

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