I’ve begun work on my new game Dawn of Heroes. It is my first time really trying to get a story to paper. While English is my only language, I’ve always been terrible with it and look forward to all feedback!
I do not have a writing background, but have enjoyed telling stories through RPGs for a long time.
I plan to go back over everything and add more/better character descriptions. Some things are there to make sure that I was just getting words to paper. There are also some place holder texts and options, that are noted. I have plans to add to them as ideas come to me.
Currently the demo about 60% done, 17 Chapters in, with a total word count for the demo is around 239k so far.
You select the gender of the main character and the main villain at the same time.
Earth. Modern Day. The world continues to view superheroes as comic book or movie characters. The abilities of those extraordinary individuals are not possible in this universe. This will soon change. A story is about to begin as someone steps forward to inspire this dawn of heroes. All heroes have a beginning. This one begins in Ryker City. A small city with a big town mentality. Select your character’s gender, sexuality, profession, and powers. Start a romance, or not. Save a city, or fail to. The choices are yours, the consequences are impactful. Welcome to the Dawn of Heroes.
Not all Romances are created equal.
Aegis: Straight Female
Camouflage: Pansexual Female
Lugh: Straight Male
Breaker: Gay Female
Genesis: Adjusts to MC’s preference
Kilchii Jacox: Police Officer. Gay male
Silvia/Silvester: Reporter/Video blogger. Gender Adapts to MC’s preference
Malcolm Schwartz: CEO of Unified Industry Standards LLC. Pansexual male
Valentina/Valentin: CCO of Global Energy Management Solutions. Gender Adapts to MC’s preference
Kyra: Lawyer to Global Energy Management Solutions. Pansexual female
Aurora/Austin: IT Phone tech of Global Energy Management Solutions. Gender Adapts to MC’s preference
Kyra: Lawyer to Global Energy Management Solutions. Pansexual female.
Ya-han/Yeong-Gi: A fellow worker who hopes to work on airplanes. Gender Adapts to MC’s preference
• a save system is always useful.
• could we get a list of names for the MC to choose from?
• the bisexual option being “dating a man and woman at the same time” seems stereotypical.
• I prefer a second person POV to a first person POV in interactive fiction, but that’s just my preference
• the power selection is confusing. What are sensory powers? “Miscalanious” ones (assuming you meant miscellaneous)?
• the chapters are quite short, I’d consider merging some of them - in many of them, there seems to be no motivation for the chapter to end.
• it would be nice to have more options for customising the costume - a monochrome version? A glittery one? A shining one? Who’s going to stop a superhero?
• just to make things cleaner, I’d end each choice with a full stop.
Yes, I do plan to implement character physical customization including adding more options for the actual hero outfit.
There is no option for being a villain. I find it requires reworking too much and would take away from the story. However, Hero and Anti-hero options will be in. I will try to add that to the description of the story.
If you are powerless or not is up to you. Explore the game/story with the character that you are wanting. That’s why there is not point-buy system, I was just wanting people to have fun with the character they want as the lead.
Well if the job we work at actually pays us we could use the money to buy components to make gadgets and weapons and your stats can help decide if you fail or not while trying to make a device I got the idea from hero or villain Genesis maybe you should look up his code it could help give you ideas if you want to I forgot the name of the guy who made the game sorry about that.
One more thing I forgot to tell you if you do decide to go down the handing devices Route make sure that this person has the clout to give me these gadgets because I don’t know about you but I’m not putting my life on the line bye using gadgets made from some guys basement workshop unless it’s my basement workshop because if my gadgets fail then at least I could say it’s my fault Plus I think it might be a waste of the technical skills we seem to have.