Thank you!!
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What wasn’t far? Update?
Thank you for pointing these out, I’ve corrected them.
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Two more.
FATHER! THAT’S THE GIRL I WAS TALKING ABOUT! THAT’S HIM!" The boy recognizes you instantly.
should be her.
The girl appears to be completely different from her brother. She clearly has no fault in what his brother said, but knowing her arrogant brother isn’t gonna apologize to you, she decided to ask for an apology in his place
Her brother said,
Edit to add another if these being looked at same time.
“Perhaps I’ll or perhaps not, these are the talk of the future.” Lu Zhou places his hands on Ji Zang’s waist, pulling her into his embrace. Their face are mere inches apart now. “In the morning, you asked a question, if I still have the energy I used. Now it’s time for me to give you the answer!”
Perhaps I will
If I still have the energy. Cutting off I used
And ouch he shouted close to her ear? ! At end.
Also:
while his opponent is down. But to your surprise, he does no such thing; instead, he extends his hands and says, “Come on up, guard, you can’t forever lie on the ground.”
Sounds odd, perhaps: “…you can’t lie on the ground forever.”
Once inside, the group gathers dry wood from outside and uses their sword-sharpening stone to create some fire, turning the cold cave warm.
New edition:
I laughed. Understood. I do the same:
Once inside, the group gathers dry wood from outside and uses their sword-sharpening stone to create some fire, turning the cold cave warm.
Whetstone
More incoming:
But in the end, the decision is upto you, if you want to help him or just watch the fight from here.
Help her, as its a she.
Now listen to me, you fucking bitch!" She starts with an insult while looking down on you from her height. “You will stay away from your senior brother. If I ever see you anywhere near her, then you will see hell coming towards you, do you understand?”
This should of said him at end. Not sure why it was like this for several of these. Unless their gender swappable and I missed something?
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Is Ruolan a love interest She is the only I see worthy of mc???
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Sometimes overthinking and feeling burnout can result in this, I’ve corrected them.
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No comments!
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Come on dude his her little bro
Sometimes siblings just tend to get along really well
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Saying of ‘incest is best’
I didn’t expect her to be. Curious to whom possible though.
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There were other grammar errors that I held off on. Thought I already gave too many for you to go back on, distracting from continuing.
Loving the rewrite thus far. Been mostly on the bit less aggressive path. Didn’t check other path choices. Didnt think it would be that aggressively diverted pathing though.
Looking forward to more.
technically they aren’t really siblings, heck we barely qualify as being in the same realm of being
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Theyve been raised as siblings since she was a small child and mc was a baby. She definitely, 100%, thinks of MC as a sibling.
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A good time to implement it would be when Roland’s mom was joking with roan about getting an arranged marriage the MC could say something like Rowan is mine if they’re a dragon or demon
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That maybe true.
Considering Rou found us before we could talk.
I cant unsee her as a sister due to this.
Incest wouldnt hurt as technically not relatives. As pretty common for romances with built in history tends to be favored by many.
Im waiting to see whom else is viable.
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Feel free to mention them all as it will help me correct them all quickly.
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The first weekly update for patreon of March 2026 is here. This week a total number have 23K words have been added to the game, making the current length of the rewritten version 367K words long.
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Its not that far behind the originals word count. Great job
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Thank you!!
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to be clear I’m not advocating for her being a RO at all, I’m just saying that I can see how it could be justified.
personally I like having positive major character that is a constant main stay of the cast that isn’t a RO but just a strong ally through and through
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New update for the public version of the game is here. Now the current public rewrite version is 283K words long.
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